Reviews For All the truth about Jimmy Portman


Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 07 Mar 2024 03:38 PM · For: Mischief Half Managed

Hi there! A bit late for the swap, but I’m here now.


Hey, so I just wanted to say that I love the chapter titles of this story. They are very descriptive, and I can tell that you put a lot of thought into making them. I love when a chapter title gets me ready for what I’m about to read!


This is so fun, seeing Neville pretending to pay attention, while he’s in essence, passing notes of a sort in class! Your characters feel their age in this story, just a bunch of eleven year olds, trying to figure things out, sticking their noses in the business of adults, solving mysteries that are above and beyond them. It’s so good, the way they act like who they’re supposed to be!


Samantha is not going to be dissuaded that easily, Neville. What are you going to do in the middle of class to prevent that book from being confiscated from the teacher? Haha, well, it looks like Neville had things under control on his end, but apparently the other end of the conversation got interrupted. I can only imagine what happened.


Ah, yeah. Hermione explains it in short order, and Sam thinks she’s going to solve it. We’ll see about that. Meanwhile, Neville is having thoughts about Samantha. Hmm…She really is good at fixing things!


The twins are delightful1 I think you’ve nailed their dialogue. I could see the back and forth in my head, and they are surely going to weasel their way into Jimmy’s plans, which was probably why Ron didn’t want to ask them about anything. He likely knew they’d try to get in on the action. 


But ahhhh! It’s the map!!! This is so cool!


“He hates me.”


“No, he knows you.”


Well played, Hermione! But I wonder why Neville would be trying to get past the dog on his own… This doesn’t bode well.


“What about a bit of optimism?”


Haha, well, Jimmy. I think that’s all that you have going for you at this point. Good luck with your scheming. I’m with Hermione. This is a really really bad plan. 


Ahh!!! He finally told someone about his theory!!! This was such a wonderful chapter! I had so much fun reading all the shenanigans, and the tension was awesome with these bumbling kids!


Pix



Name: quill2parchment (Signed) · Date: 05 Mar 2024 06:47 PM · For: Dealing with the past

Hi Chiara! Here for our swap <3


I'm still reeling from that fact that REMUS KNOWS, omg omg omg. 


Okay, but let's back up a bit. The description of the shop was fantastic. I could envision perfectly. I genuinely felt for Peter at the beginning of the chapter. He's keeping so many secrets and it clearly has him on edge. 


"Sometimes sorry isn't enough." I love how this moment was so heavy on foreshadowing. There are so many things Peter has done that make me believe this statement to be true. He betrayed his friends. He caused impairable damage. No amount of apologies is going to erase the pain he caused Lily and James by keeping them from their child. And yet - and yet! - he did save Harry's life. He dedicated his life to making sure he was safe and well taken care of. It makes everything so complicated. 


That last scene has to be one of the best scenes I've ever read. The tension between Remus and Peter was just at another level. The way there was such anger and resentment and hurt but also ~ lingering feelings ~ that neither of them can really deny... 


And now Sirius has joined the scene and I'm dying to know where we're going from here. I don't know if Remus has it in him to turn Peter in, to be honest. And Peter needs to finally gather his bearings and tell the truth. It's not going to be easy, we all know that, but it's time for him to face the consequences of the mistakes he made in his youth. 


Absolutely brilliant chapter. Thank you so much for this swap opportunty. 


<3 Quilly


 



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2024 02:45 AM · For: A plan

Oh no, Jimmy caused a big jumble of brooms at practice, and then got hit in the head!


Drunked pixies, indeed! I hope Jimmy is able to prove himself at the game, or he’s not going to be flying a broom for much longer. Poor thing! After the bludger and everything!


Awww, guinea pigs are such cute things! Sometimes they can be friendly, but their little legs can be faster than they look. Haha! 


“Because I’m trying to poison you.”


LOLOLOL! I love this McGonagall. He has really vexed her to no end. She obviously knows something is wrong, but badgering an eleven year old isn’t going to get her answers. Biscuits might, though. Smart woman!


I love that Seamus leaves burn marks behind!


Yeah, who told Samantha anything??? Ah yeah. Hermione bonded. I bet they’re going to make a swell team!


Ooookkayyy… and now they’re going to do the most dangerous thing ever. I hope they have a backup plan, because this is ludicrous!

 

Pix



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2024 02:28 AM · For: A job

Oh no, Peter, what have you done???

Oh my GOODNESS!!! IT’S a… oh whew! I almost had a heart attack! Don’t do that to me ever again!!!


HAHAHA! Jimmy’s opening line of his letter was so funny, complaining about his friends to his dad, “What is wrong with all of them!?!” But the crossed out sections have me worried. I’m so glad that Jimmy has someone to care about him, someone to write those letters to. But then, how will he feel if and when he finds out the truth about everything? Who will be his rock, then?


I am so worried.


Oh gosh. His dream is coming to life. Will Peter be able to resist correcting the stories?


It is so cool that Sirius plays Portman Games!!! But also, what are you getting yourself into, Peter?? Obviously there is some kind of attraction there, and this…


This does not look like a Good Idea. In fact, it looks like a terrible idea. 


And of course, Remus accepts. 


Oh dear.

 

Pix



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2024 02:01 AM · For: A Rosier's perspective

Eww, yuck! Pansy drool!


And who is this Samantha person? OOOHHHH… she’s a Rosier. Well, then. And Woah, There, these Slytherins are out for blood!  Sooo… about this Samantha person and this Neville person and Neville trying to avoid her by sitting at a different table… it all sounds very… childlike. Snort! I’d be tired of all the bickering too, Jimmy!


James is quite moody. I wouldn’t blame him, he’s got a lot on his mind. All the questions about who his real parents are and who his father really is has got to have him losing sleep. 


Ah, and yes, Snape is soooo creepy! I’m really interested in what Samantha knows from her background, and I hope to find out soon. I loved how you led her to her conclusion, slowly, but surely through the chapter, that Mudbloods were not that bad and that she could be friends with one. It seems that once she sets aside her prejudices, she and Hermione might become fast friends, which would be a fun thing to see, and probably put the boys at odds about something other than bickering with each other for a change!


Interesting development!

 

Pix



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2024 01:50 AM · For: Stopping with the guesswork

Ah, I did not expect to have Ron and Neville just go at it for so long! I wonder if this would have happened if one of them had not been in Slytherin. If that’s the real issue with Ron behaving that way. 


Okay, but Neville has some deep thoughts on all of this, and if the kids are already taking it at face value that the Potter’s girl is his sister and he’s the missing kid, then they’re going to piece all kinds of things together and then of course get into some deep deep trouble over it… and this is not going to be good, is it?


*scratching head*

 

Pix



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2024 01:37 AM · For: An unexpected guest

Uh oh. Neville has figured something out. I wonder what he’s been up to over the break. 


It’s touching that Peter goes to see his mother and she warms to him this time. It makes sense, since she’s just been to a funeral. And then Remus shows up! Probably to thank her for the final message from his mum, but it’s terrible timing with Peter RIGHT THERE!!!

Mary is such a spitfire too, loving on her son in one breath, and then in the next, calling him out for all the things he did wrong. It’s just like a mother to do that, too. You can’t blame her for chastising him for being gone for years without word. That was hard on her, I can tell.


But she’s a good woman, to comfort Remus in the best way, reminding him that his own parents loved him and were there for him when it counted, and telling Remus not to blame himself for having wonderful, caring parents. 


That’s about all one can do, under the circumstances. 

 

PIx



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2024 12:55 AM · For: In death of Silvia Lupin

Hi there! I get a chance to come back to this story for a while and see what I’ve been missing!


Ah, if Remus is talking to Sirius about Portman, then things are bound to get uncovered. Both of those men are sharp-witted enough to puzzle through whatever must be going on. I am really nervous about this now, because I am unsure of what the exact relationship is between Peter and the rest of the Marauders. It can’t be good.


And oh no! Remus is going to lose his mother soon! You sure know how to pull on the heartstrings at the exact moment! And oh no, is she going to go without him??? This is SO SAD!!! Remus was unable to make it on time, but at least his mother gave Mary the message for him so his anger could be tempered. I’m glad that Remus is the kind of person who realizes the important things and didn’t continue to lash out at someone who didn’t deserve it.


But now what’s going to happen with Jimmy? Remus is already going to be on edge, and he’s just seen, who I’m guessing, is Peter’s mother?  How is this all going to play out in the end?

 

Pix



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 20 Dec 2023 02:43 PM · For: Theories and apologies

Hi there! First off, Happy Holidays!

Second, CONGRATULATIONS ON DECEMBER STORY OF THE MONTH!!!


I know it’s not this one, but I plan to make it there as soon as I finish with this one. Then I will be all caught up and get to the cool shiny new stuff!


Kids say the darndest things. I wouldn’t believe the scene if I hadn’t seen kids this age act in this very way with my own eyes. He’s just going to come out and say stuff in front of veritable strangers, because Jimmy has an agenda. In his brain, his agenda trumps any discomfort or upset he might cause because of his questions. 


Part of me wishes he had more tact. The rest of me knows that he just hasn’t developed it yet. I am currently assisting my twelve year old with his own tact. It’s a process.


“Something in Mr. Potter’s tone suggested to Jimmy that he’d gone too far.”


OH THANK GOD!!! This could have blown your whole story into space right here. But then, he has to go and talk about it to someone, and Ron is the lucky guy. I don’t know how to feel about this, because Ron has his own tact problems. I love, love how these kids keep interrupting each other in the journal!!! It’s so… them, and so spot on for this age. It’s great to see kids acting like kids in a fic. You’re doing a great job of this!


“I’m a Slytherin. I know how to ask for information without being too obvious.”


Bless you, Neville!  I’m having a hard time picturing the Neville I know in Slytherin, but this Neville seems to have it down pretty well. I’m glad you gave him some backbone. I like this guy!


Ah, the conversation between Jimmy and Dorea is exactly what I needed right then! It clears up so much that we didn’t know, like how everyone else viewed what Peter did. I am so relieved that they all believe that Peter did it to save Harry, but still, they would definitely be upset by everything. Ahhh, I wonder how this is all going to play out!


Oh gosh! So Peter’s mum knows!!! What a twist!

 

Pix



Name: dreamshadow (Signed) · Date: 18 Dec 2023 03:56 PM · For: Of sisters, parties and baby unicorns

happy holidays, chiara! <3


the tension between lily and petunia is so real in the beginning. i'm almost glad that they tried to get a coffee together, but i'm not surprised that things turned sour very quickly because of petunia's prejudice against magic. they're trying, though, and they're sisters, so i guess that counts for something - and i'm glad that they both agreed that petunia going to james' birthday party would not be the best idea. i do hope in this au version they have the chance to work things out, even though i know it will take time - but it is nice to see them trying


haha, i feel james' sentiments about how he must be getting old if quieter parties are more relaxing instead of boring. i feel that way now too, bud XD and it was interesting how the topic of severus came up, though i guess given his prior friendship with lily, it makes sense - and it makes sense that he'd be starting to piece together what's happening at hogwarts. it's very interesting to read it after reading sorcerer's stone and knowing how the book ends and what we know about snape, so it's really very clever of you to tie that into this au universe where the adults would be discussing it


the banter between the marauder's was absolutely excellent, as always, and i know we know a bit with what's going on with remus - not at all surprised that he hasn't told james, but there's a part of me that wishes he would. hopefully he will in due time because they've been through so much and there's no way that james wouldn't be there for him. but given their history with peter, it's also definitely not a surprise that remus has kept it a secret this long


another excellent chapter, dear! great writing, as always <33



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 06 Dec 2023 12:15 PM · For: An unexpected guest

well, I like the idea that lupin and pettigrew knew each other before hogwarts, that's interesting, it would also make sense why remus might stay connected with mary though it was a little out of character, lupin is extremely reclusive.

I guess mary had to keep up appearences and act like she was still mad at peter, it was still a bit harsh with him in the room.

interesting chapter,

Heather



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 06 Dec 2023 11:58 AM · For: In death of Silvia Lupin

Poor Lupin. I'm glad Sirius was there for him. I wasn't expecting Mary's maiden name to be Yaxly, that's interesting! It's nice that Mary and Sylvia could reconcile and that Mary could be there for Remus was sweet. I'm gonna have to read a more upbeat one before I go to bed though lol.

Good job

Heather



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 06 Dec 2023 12:11 AM · For: Theories and apologies

I have a similar theory about Peter. I just can't think of him as evil, it doesn't make sense to me. I think he did it to try and protect his mom, Voldemort would have tried to bribe him, your mom will stay safe if you do what I say. Peter wouldn't have wanted to involve anyone else, it's personal and of course they were busy dealing with the threat on the Potters. This was really sweet. I can also completely see Dora eavesdropping and or convincing Remus or anyone else to tell her info. She's cute enough to do that to them <3

Great job!



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2023 09:46 PM · For: Christmas

This was sweet :) I really like Dorea, it'd be cute if she and Ron fell for each other like Harry/Jimmy and Ginny do.

Jimmy just Had to say something didn't he? lol but kids do that, I don't blame him, but it sure will make the next chapter super awkward!

-Heather



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2023 09:16 PM · For: Auror James Potter

Ooo so Jimmy met James!

I'm kinda glad James grew up enough to apologize to Snape but still had a childlike respect for Dumbledore and even still not know what a lemon drop is lol

The kids are very like how I imagine the Marauders if they included a Slytherin,  The ending was silly lol. I can't wait to read what Hermione's theory is, I have my own :)

-Heather



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2023 12:32 AM · For: Quidditch, curses and family affairs

aww, that was sweet how Peter and Jimmy reconciled. The truth will of course come out some time, but for now, he is pretty young to find out. I don't really remember them having the flying lesson and Neville falling. I could just have been a while since reading that, but it was a thought when reading about the first quidditch game. I could almost picture Neville on the broom behind Jimmy catching the snitch. Very clever, since Neville would need to touch that snitch to get the ressurection stone later ;)

It also didn't occur to me that Frank and Alice died, I think in my head they were still in St. Mungos.

Great job on this chapter, it seems like it would have been tricky to write!

Psst, one typo I've seen quite a few times was 'misterious' it would actually be Mysterious. 

-Heather



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 04 Dec 2023 11:08 PM · For: The golden quartet

I guess I wonder why Hagrid (and Quirrell for that matter) would need to be there on the 31st if Hagrid wasn't taking someone (like Harry/Neville) to Gringotts on their birthday anyway. I think what probably happened was that Quirrell overheard that Hagrid was going and went too, But Hagrid wouldn't have had to that day. Shrug. This is probably me being over-analytical lol.

It's strange that Jimmy has hazel eyes, not green, but I suppose that might be addressed in later chapters? :)

Interesting way to do the chapter based on their Halloween experience, good job!



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 01 Dec 2023 10:09 PM · For: A new neighbour

Oh my goodness! The same house Dumbledore lived in?? Peter must have made himself look very different for Lily not to recognize him, this should all be really interesting, but Peter is deluding himself that they wouldn't find out about Harry/Jimmy if he wants them all to meet.

There were a couple of typos I found, instead of foul it should be 'fool' and instead of do the dishes, it should be 'does'.

Oh! and James tricking Hagrid like he did was very them, I could absolutely see that happening! And does that mean Neville was with Hagrid then, like Harry was?

I do love this idea :)



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 19 Nov 2023 11:35 PM · For: Christmas

It’s Christmas time!!!


Oh, but Remus is short for his Wolfsbane potion! It’s fortunate that Lily brews it and can get him a special deal, though. I can’t imagine what he goes through when he doesn’t have it. It must be horrible.


That is nice of Ron’s brothers to wish him well if his parents allow him to visit Jimmy over Christmas. I can imagine it would be nice for Jimmy too, since it’s a new house and all, and he won’t know anyone in the neighborhood… yet. I’m feeling all kinds of tension building for these holidays. Peter being invited to the Potter’s house for dinner sounds like all kinds of disaster! If Remus and Sirius will be there too, I can’t believe they’d not at least have a clue together who Peter really is. Wow, what a setup!


I love the idea of Hedwig stalking Trevor in the train compartment! Lol!


Moving to a new place is always bittersweet. It WAS a good idea for Jimmy to bring Ron home with him. It should give him a way to pass the time and not get too lonely or sentimental about Baltimore. 


Ah, it’s the ugly sweaters!!! I am so excited to see these, and also excited that Jimmy gets one as well! Guess it wouldn’t be Christmas without them!   I am also very excited about these secret message booklets! Those should come in handy in the near future, I imagine!


The descriptions of the photographs are so cute! I loved seeing that little glimpse into their past! 


And isn’t it just like a little kid to grab your hand and say, “You’re coming with me!” Lol!


And yes, I did see what you did there with the dinner conversation and Remus. Very clever nod to him!


Uh oh. Jimmy just pointed to the elephant in the room. This is going to get interesting!


Pix




Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 12 Nov 2023 04:17 PM · For: Auror James Potter

I have to tell you that I’m already excited about this chapter from the title. I am dying to see Auror James Potter in action!!!


I totally relate to this feeling of going back to your childhood haunts and having those same insecurities. It’s like it’s burned into your psyche or something. And also, having James Potter be the one investigating the jinxed broom is going to be sooooo interesting.  


Okay but this:


“... the safety of my students is still, and will always be, my first priority…”


Does anyone truly believe that, anymore? 


“I have my sources.”


That’s a great refrain. Of course he does. Because Auror James knows things. I want to know all the things!


Lol! The Auror/Professor jabs were hilarious!


Oh, but what’s this? Jimmy is RIGHT THERE! I love the way you switched these POVs so we can see all sides of how this is going down. He’s onto something, hearing that name that the Sorting Hat gave him. I’d be super curious as well!  


Oh wow, I did not expect an apology! But that makes sense too, and it’s long overdue. 


“Actually, I did.”


Haha! Of course Hermione told them, but no one listens to her. Oh, that was a nice way to soften James’ recognition of Neville. It must be so nice for Neville to hear good things about his parents for once.


Okay, so now I need to acknowledge that Peter and Jimmy must have some kind of disguise, because if James is staring Jimmy in the face and telling him that he looks like Peter, then there’s GOT to be something going on there. 


“The only one I remember ever attempting murder at Hogwarts is you.”


LOLOLOL!!!  Sirius probably deserved that. I loved how you portrayed Sirius and James’s friendship through their training exercises, letting them vent and also speculate about Voldemort here. 


Ah, yes. I think Hermione is really scary, particularly now. Because if she’s going off to dig up an enchantment remover, Jimmy will suddenly find himself in a dangerous situation… and for that matter… so will Peter. 


But then, if Peter is the Secret Keeper, maybe that’s part of the disguise???


Hmm….

 

Pix



Name: quill2parchment (Signed) · Date: 11 Nov 2023 02:51 PM · For: Consequences

Hi Chiara! 


I'm way past due paying a visit to the Jimmy universe but I'm here now to get my fix of all things Jimmy <3


I know I'm always going on about how well you manage to present the OC characterazations in their Jimmy-verse counterparts but I just can't stop being impressed by this. I thought that first scene with Dumbledore was such a perfect example of them behaving very canon-ly. Neville speaking out and revealting where Jimmy's gone because it's the right thing to do even though that's not what his friends want him to do is so book 1 of him. (I was shouting 10 points to Slytherin behind my screen lol) And of course Ron's the one protesting because his loyal as heck to his best friend and Hermione is the one apologizing to the headmaster. 


She was really acting as if she was his mother and Jimmy wasn't sure how he felt about it, it made him happy and sad at the same time. My dear heart. I feel the same, Jimmy. It's such a bittersweet moment. 


I love Dorea and how she's already behaving very sister-like to Jimmy. I wonder what she's up to though. I don't blame Jimmy for thinking her plan is bound to not end well but I have full faith in her smartness lol 


The friends searching Jimmy out at the end had me in my feels. I get that Jimmy got them in heaps of trouble but I feel like it came for a moment of desperation so I can't help but get where he was coming from/why he did it. I was so glad to see his friends give him some grace about it. 


Another briliant chapter like always <3


Quilly



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 03 Nov 2023 11:04 PM · For: Quidditch, curses and family affairs

Hi again!

Oh gosh, of course Lily would have nightmares about her daughter getting taken away, when that’s what happened to their first child!


Oh hey, it’s Severus! This should be interesting… interesting that Severus is equating the quartet to the Marauders. I had not expected that. And I’m wondering why Portman would throw him suspicious glances. Did his father warn against Severus before he sent him off to school?


Okay, so that was pretty funny that Hermione keeps talking about Muggle things and the boys are all, “what are you going on about?” I bet that thing happens often.


I, too, read books at football games in school. To the great annoyance of everyone around me. 


Haha, Neville ditches his scarf when his team gets too many fouls! That’s adorable! But then oh no!!!


“Love is never a lie.”


I’m so glad the Sorting Hat’s words penetrated through Jimmy’s thoughts at that moment, or things could have gone badly. It looks like they both needed this reconciliation.


Ooohhhh, this is also very interesting… that Peter knows all that about Neville, and that he KNEW when he took Jimmy away, that he was saving people… but oh, the guilt must be eating him alive!


How wonderfully twisty this version is!

 

Pix



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 22 Oct 2023 12:17 PM · For: The golden quartet

Hi there! I’m back for another chapter!



Okay, I really love the synopsis here, with the way that Jimmy is reevaluating Neville’s social ladder climbing, with all the “hey, the boys are mostly tolerating him”, followed by all the people who are still giving him a hard time (loved the ‘overbearing girls’ jab!)... which is totally fine, because really, the only one left to convince that Neville’s a great guy is, of course, Hermione. 


Haha! I wouldn’t put it past Hermione to be stalking anyone, specifically if it’s a person-of-interest. And those glares… good thing she’s not a basilisk herself!


“Shut up, Jim, and listen, alright?”


Ooooh… where did this sassy Neville come from? I like this guy!


I am living for this re-telling of The Sorcerer's Stone, with an expanded party, altered backstories, and quibbling children!


And wait… who is this??? Neville is being stalked by some Slytherin girl??? Sounds like more complications. Sorry, I was momentarily distracted by the TROLL IN THE DUNGEON!!!


And yay! This could possibly mean that Hermione has moved up from ‘stalker’ to ‘friend’... I hope? I love how you’re keeping these characters true to their canon-selves, yet providing new insight into their lives by altering their situations and giving them a fresh start. I can’t wait to see what other changes from canon you have in store, as well as which canon events are going to be featured in this story! I feel like we have all the players gathered and are about to embark on a fantastic, yet weird, yet totally engrossing journey!

 

Pix



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 02 Oct 2023 11:26 PM · For: A new neighbour

Hi there! It’s Chapter 6!


Oh gosh, here it comes… the letter we have all been waiting for. I love the way that Peter struggles with this letter, and well he should struggle, given what Jimmy has found out and what Peter now has to contend with.


But… does Peter know that his cover has been blown?


“What had Peter ever done to him to deserve such a treatment?”


Parents ask this question every day. Sometimes, multiple times a day. I’m sure kidnapping is only the tip of the iceberg here, from Jimmy’s point of view. 


Oh, but does that mean that Peter doesn’t have the house?? Is he homeless? Oh, gosh. Yeah, he’s in trouble.


Aaaand… we shall have to wait on that letter because Peter just saw a squirrel. Lol. Or a house. A house with a squirrel?  That was a joke, by the way. There were no squirrels in this chapter.


Okay, but the whole Lily with a cute rugrat is adorable. And really, we should all kill Sirius Black. Every day. Probably multiple times a day, depending on what’s he’s done this time.


I did not expect Lily to NOT RECOGNIZE Peter… and this whole pretending to not know her is very suspicious-sounding. He MUST have a disguise or something, I’m assuming. Oh gosh, this does not bode well. WHY would Peter get so cozy with the people whose son he stole???? (I mean, I’m sure he has a valid reason, keeping Jimmy away from his family, and probably saved his life in more ways that we can count, but still. This is not a smart move, Pete.)


Get smart!


Sightings of Peter??? So he is NOT in disguise?? Or did Lily just not recognize him?? 


Oh, okay. He has an American accent, sort of, and she didn’t recognize him. But if he’s moving in down the street…


I don’t think this bodes well. Not at all.

 

Pix



Name: Owlpost68 (Signed) · Date: 28 Sep 2023 09:09 PM · For: Brooms and troubles

review 3/3

This was a cute chapter, I'm glad you showed some positive interaction between the Slytherin girl and Neiville, they can't be all mean towards him. She reminds me a bit of Luna from the way you described her. I also enjoyed him reading the C.S Lewis book, that was a cute idea. I can totally see that happening.

The way you introduce the new friendship between Neville and Ron was clever, Ron would appreciate that and drop some of his prejudices for someone who came just to warn them they could get caught.

I am wondering how Jimmy is going to confront his father eventually, I understand his feelings, I just am curious how it will happen.

Thanks so much for the swap!

You were, indeed, the 100th review on my recieved reviews so I will be returning when I can to review this story until the finish :) Absolutely no obligation to return the favor.

Thanks for the swap!

-Heather



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