Reviews For Eyes Like Steel


Name: starbuck (Signed) · Date: 15 Jan 2019 09:44 AM · For: Chapter 1

i feel like this can be read standalone as a perfect teaser for the events that happen in golden girl. it's mysterious enough that you need to know more, and yet, it ends with a line that could be an ending but also a beginning. 


it's interesting to see things from albus' perspective - to me, he seems so different than when i read about him from vanessa's point of view and i think that that makes sense. i think he's as guarded as she is - like with the start of the story, we see he's the most comfortable in a crowd where he can get lost, so to say and it seems obvious to me he would want to keep his emotions and thoughts to himself so that's why, when i read about him from vanessa's POV, he seems distant, possibly a tiny little bit rude sometimes. i think it's great that you wrote this from his POV, if only to give us a glimpse of al's personality the way he sees himself.


kris



Author's Response:

Hey Kris, thanks for the review. I always love reading your thoughts.

I really enjoyed writing from Al's perspective actually. Personally, I think that Al and Vess are very similar in how closed off they really are to the rest of the world, and that eventually (hopefully) that aspect of their personalities bring them together. You never know, fingers crossed.



Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 15 Jan 2019 12:32 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hey Rhi! Here with your very much belated entry review for the Prefect's Fall Writing Challenge! Apologies for the delay!

 

Ugh, I love a good next gen fic, especially one featuring the friendship that Albus & Rose have as cousins! Love the costume idea for Albus here -- it's only proper that he dress up as his namesake and if everyone else finds it hilarious except for Rose, well then it's her loss! Margot seems like a fun OC and I think she and Albus would make a cute couple or just best friends with a priority goal of just annoying Rose as much as possibly. Clearly Albus is best friends with Scorpius in this imagining, but it seems very much like a strained relationship right now thanks to the bombshell Vanessa dropped on them. Albus also appears to have some issues with his anger -- the description of the imprint his hand left on Vanessa's arm is indicative of that without it being one of the usual over-the-top descriptors of anger, so well done with that. The flow through the party is also done nicely as it doesn't feel rushed, even with the 1000 word limit we had you all adhere to. Great job with this, and thanks again for entering! :) 

~MadiMalfoy x



Author's Response:

Hi Madi, thanks for the lovely review. I would love it if you read more of the Golden Girl verse as it might explain some of Al motives/actions.



Name: LadyMarauder (Signed) · Date: 04 Dec 2018 05:27 AM · For: Chapter 1

Tasha here for Christmas gift giving!

Oh. This is a very intriguing next gen story.

I love a good Albus story, there's just something about him that seems lovable, isn't there? Anyway, this little teaser to your novella is great - it says just enough to make the reader want to know everything, without leaving you scratching your head wondering what is going on. I really liked your writing style too - and I'm looking forward to finding out where this slots into your story timeline.

 

I'm certainly interested in finding out about Scorpius' addition. It's a fascinating topic to explore in a wizarding world setting, so I'll be looking forward to diving into Golden Girl to find out a bit more. I loved Al's fancy dress costume - it was hilarious and completely inspired! Also, I really felt for him when you said he much prefers being in a crowd, it definitely makes sense from a Next Gen point of view. 

 

Also, I really liked your two OCs, especially Vanessa. I liked your description of how Albus left marks on her - for some reason I thought he reacted in a realistic way. Also, the fact that she was the one who let the secret out and not have Al know anything about it is really cool. I'd love to know a bit more about that. The last couple of paragraphs at the end where you talked about her emotionless voice as though she wasn't there, was really quite something. I'm off to read Golden Girl now!

 



Author's Response:

Hey there Tasha! Thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you liked it as well.

 

Golden Girl is so thoroughly dominated by Vanessa's voice that Albus' ends up being drowned out. I felt for something like this I really had to give him the chance to speak up. But I actually really enjoyed writing from his perspective, so who knows, I may write of few more like these. I hope you continue to read on and enjoy. Thanks again for the love on this story <3

 

Rhi :)



Name: BBHP (Signed) · Date: 14 Oct 2018 12:53 AM · For: Chapter 1

I find myself fascinated with this story and it’s companion story. Looking forward to more of them both. Al and Vanessa’s characters are so intriguing, and I’m interested to know more of what makes them them. 



Author's Response:

Hey there! Thanks so much for the read and review, it's very much appreciated!

 

Rhi :)



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