Kaitlin this is terrifying! I have goosebumps!
I love the idea that Padma, Parvati and Lavender would use a ouija board - although they're surrounded by ghosts so I'm not sure it's the most effective way of communicating with the dead in Hogwarts :P
I love the idea that they could communicate with Tom. That's so unsettling. And he possessed poor little Colin, and meets Harry straight away! What a horrifying story that would be!
So good, K <3
Hey Kaitlin – here for ctf, to break out Liv
Ummm Liv’s reviews all seem to start with OMG WHY. Or something like that. It has me worried.
OH NO OH NO OH KAITLIN WHY???
This is rather the start to a story. A horror story. TOM RIDDLE? And MUDBLOODS BEWARE?
Wow this is bad. Seriously. I have no idea where this is going and I’m like 200 words in but wow.
Haha I remember when I played that once and suddenly the weather outside seemed so much scarier than before. I can totally relate to that. That wind was probably there all along but they only noticed once the tensions grew?
OH NO OH NO WOW THAT’S SO MEAN OF LAVENDER. You really shouldn’t joke about these things. Not at all. That could cause so many problems and also so much pain, bringing back old memories and also senselessly scaring people. I feel like it’s something pansy would do.
I’m almost a little glad she’s feeling guilty but then omg what?
KAITLIN HOW COULD YOU????? Did she even move the piece in the first place? Or did she just think she did? Wow I’m confused and terrified but this time I’m not crying so I guess that’s something, right?
DEATH IS COMING FOR YOU seems so foreboding, especially when thinking about the final movie and Lavender’s role in it. Scary and very mean and gripping at my heart with an ice cold hand.
I’ll have to come back to read ch2 eventually. (and the rest of your AP)
Hi Kaitlin! I'm here for CTF and ready for you to break my heart again!
Oh dear. Oh no. Oh no. Oh dear.
WHY KAITLIN WHY WHAT DID YOUR CHARACTERS EVER DO TO YOU
Okay, first of all, using a Ouija board is not a good idea, and I don't know if they thought to do it because of their love of Divination but....
And of course Voldemort would be the one on the other end! Of course. I love how you've written him - revealing himself as Tom instead of "EVIL WIZARD YOU ALL ARE AFRAID OF AND FEARED FOR YEARS" is exactly the kind of diabolical, cunning thing he would do to grab hold of power over somebody.
You set the atmosphere here really well. I love how it's really foreboding and tense, when they're in a bit of a dangerous situation. I just... you wrote this so well and just... wow. I swear I was on the edge of my seat.
Also, that cliffhanger ending is, grudgingly, one of the best I've read ever. (I say grudgingly as I really really really want to know what happens to them, not out of malice or anything)
The pathetic fallacy with the weather was excellent. One reason why I liked it so much was because I'm not sure if the pick-up of bad weather occurred naturally or if it was something that Tom was causing.
I love how they all started to blame each other for moving the planchette, because none of them would want to admit that something like that would come through on a Ouija board.
In conclusion (she says, tossing every rule about concluded things out of the window), this was an excellent one-shot, and I will be back for more! (obviously because of ctf, but in general as well)