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Name: LadyL8 (Signed) · Date: 02 Dec 2017 09:56 PM · [Report This]
Story:Molten Lava Chapter: Leap

Hey Kaitlin,

 

It's been a while since I've read anything of yours, so I thought I'd come back and read something again. I think maybe I've read it before, but I don't know if I've ever reviewed it. Anyway, I love stories about children and I can't wait to read this one, so I'm just gonna stop talking and review instead.

 

Omg. I remember playing this game when I was little. Not with my sister because she was always "too cool" to be playing with me (I'm four years younger than her), but I always played it with my friends. And I even played with my little sister when she was born. Aww. I love Lily and Hugo. I've always imagine they'd be really good friends and they'd play games, and then everyone else would just play along to not ruin the fun for them. Cool to see that Albus is joining in too. I never imagined that for some reason, but I can definitely believe it.

 

I think you did an excellent job of writing them as children. I've always found writing children to be really difficult because there are a couple of traps you can easily fall into, but you've done a really good job. You write about the game like it's a great adventure and I absolutely love that, because to Hugo, Lily and Albus it obviously is an adventure. It's not just a game, it's really serious. And I thought that was really cool that you wrote it that way. It took me back a little bit to that time when I played games like that.

 

And the ending is great too. I love that Hermione is playing along, but then everyone just forgets the game when she comes with chocolate cupcakes. Definitely something kids do. And yeah, I just thought it was a really sweet story. It brought me back to when I was a child and really made me look forward to when my own niece and nephew are a little bit older and we can play games like this, so thank you so much for sharing!

 

- Lotte

 



Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 02 Dec 2017 09:14 PM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Molten Lava Chapter: Leap

Aww, this is a super sweet little story! I don’t read Next Gen a ton, but I think I’m a sucker for the children having fluffy lives. After everything that their parents went through, it is very satisfying.

 

And you did a fabulous job writing this, capturing the children in very cute and believable ways! I wondered for a bit if Albus was older enough that he was just playing along for the younger kids’ sakes without really believing it as much, but either way it was very sweet.

 

It seems just like Albus, to overestimate a jump in a showy way and pull through just shy of failing spectacularly. I can see the Quidditch player in him already.

 

I love that you described the lava just as much as the cushions, making both as real to the reader as they are to the children.

 

Aww, I’m glad that Hermione’s puts a hold on her impulse to scold and plays along =)

 

Omg, that ending was perfect! Lava is nothing when there are cookies available. Scientific fact.

 

Sam.



Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 10 May 2017 01:36 AM · [Report This]
Story:Molten Lava Chapter: Leap

Aw now who didn't play this as a kid? It's so so so cute to read baby next-gen playing together. What I love most about this is that they're having some good old fashioned fun without magic. Surely they had magical toys and games, but they choose to use their imaginations instead.

Also how cute is Hermione on baby sitting duty, baking cupcakes <3



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