Wifey!! I’m here for Team Silver!
So like I said, I had to chose something that wasn’t LNW, because reasons, so I stopped here. I know you mentioned this happens after chapter 8, and I’m not quite there yet, but that didn’t seem to impact the experience reading this. I didn’t feel lost or anything, and this could probably even stand alone for people who haven’t read your novel. You explain enough about Seleena, and who she is, that it would be easy to keep up if you were behind, or haven’t read LNW at all.
I really like Seleena, I legit just told you that lol. You can tell she takes no crap, and really follows what she feels is right. Which is probably why she left the clan to begin with. I’d love to get more on them. Like show what it was like for her when she lived with them all. And seeing more interactions with her and her grandmother. It makes you wonder if maybe they are more alike than she want so to admit, since she was so adamant on saying she was nothing like her.
The whole thing with the males in super interesting, too. It would be awesome to see when Seleena eventually does take over, since it seems as if that is going to happen, if her grandmother had seen it, and everything she sees comes true. Like, will Seleena change the laws? How would the clan react? I just want to know everything about the gypsies. It’s such a cool side world of the HP universe that you’ve created. I’m begging you again to write more on them lol. The whole concept is so unique, it would be a great read.
Loved this little snippet. Love you!! And Team Silver for the win!
Ahhh, the Gypsies! So interesting to see into their community a little more! I kind of feel like Queen Carla sees through Saleena a little, but she sees that Saleena will take over as Queen so what's going to happen that makes her change her mind and become leader? I'm excited to see what happens as she learns to control her powers more and see the two of them interact a little more.
I like that Saleena is so set on changing traditions and I wonder if we'll get a feel for how more of the Gypsy community feels! I also totally haven't forgotten about Voldemort and her work for the Order and am curious how powerful she can become, how much influcence she'll have, and how the community will react to seeing her back in their midst.
This is so interesting! I was really curious to see what Saleena would do upon returning to her clan, and this one-shot really delivered. (Also, how did you manage to constrain yourself to 1500 words like that? It's really impressive haha.)
I thought it was interesting seeing Saleena's viewpoint of her Clan. I do wish she wouldn't hate her own people so much, and wouldn't separate herself from them so much. It makes me really sad, seeing someone distance themselves from their family. Personally, I feel as though if Saleena really wished to cause change, she should be more dedicated to her Clan; that way, her poeple will trust her more, and she will be better off in attempting to change their traditions.
Also I really liked the descriptions of the powers of Saleena and her grandmother. The distinction between seer and rememberer is really interesting, and I think it's so cool that different generations get different powers. Does her mother have something similar, or is it only for people who fall into the line of inheritance?
Anyway, this was a really cool one-shot about a glimpse into Saleena's Clan. Thank you for sharing it!
Hello my dear!
I'm stopping by with a late hot seat review. I haven't read your story where Saleena is introduced but that didn't stop me from enjoying this story. The entire tone is very mystic and feels like I'm reading a rather well established character. You have Seleena's and Carla's voices down pat. I mean, it sounds like they're alive and complex which is hard to get through in a one-shot when you're writing OCs.
I really like the power/family dynamic in this story. I'm reminded of other dynastic stories I've read where there's a shift in power and the tension that causes. This makes me want to read the story that this is set in because there's so much going on that I'm curious about and is probably talked about in the larger stroy. Even without reading the story this connects to, I feel this was still a great standalone story, even without the broader context.
Ooh now I'm even more excited to see if Saleena will take on the role she was born to, to see if she really will change the current laws and practices. If she can bring the Gypsies back into society, that would be so amazing.
I'm also excited to read more about this in Love, Not War, as well as Saleena's involvement in the Order. I've really enjoyed this snippet into Saleena's life and I'm so happy you let me know about it! It's given me more anticipation as to what happens next in LNW!
Also amazing that you wrote this in exactly 1500 words! Very impressive!
Lovely work, as always, D! <3