Quodpot Match 1 - Friends to Lovers
you write beautifully - the descriptions and your general writing style are amazing to read and even this story, which is both sad (but also maybe a tiny bit hopeful at the end) is stunning.
i like how you've approached beauty as a curse - it's not something i think about often and it's easy to forget how much people judge you based on your looks (at least to me because i don't really think about looks all that much but on the rare occasions that i do i realise i'm being judgemental), be it good or bad looks. beautiful people get jobs more easily and a lot of other things too (if some sort of research i read way back when is to be believed) and of course, beauty has its perks. but not being appreciated for your personality and intellect is awful and always being in a position for people to think you got something (anything) just based on your looks is...disturbing. especially for women, as it's often the case that a good looking woman who got a promotion got it based on looks (and the implied sexual favours she provided based on how she looks) - which is obviously disgusting and incredibly misogynistic.
teddy seeing the real victoire gives me hope he might actually tell her and convince her that she's more than her looks and that he's being genuine!
Thank you so much for stopping by and for your lovely compliments on my writing <3
The poem that inspired this (and the myth that inspired the poem) really plays with the idea of beauty, and I was so intrigued to explore that theme myself. Victoire is depicted in so many stories as someone who's incredibly beautiful, especially given her Veela ancestry, so I really wanted to work with the idea that she might not see it as a blessing, rather as a curse. You're right that people often do get ahead based on being good-looking, and I think that can mean a lot of people end up resenting beautiful people for that. It was so interesting to write about the idea of beauty as a curse, and the impact that's had on Victoire and her self-worth. Teddy definitely sees the real Victoire, and she can't yet see that he sees that person, but there's definitely hope for them in the future (at least, in my head canon).
Thank you for the lovely review!
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Well done on this! The writing flows so effortlessly, it's incredibly poetic. I like that you didn't reveal who the characters were until the end - I was guessing from the beginning who it might be. And I think it makes perfect sense that Victoire, who is part-Veela, would be the Narcissus in the story.
I also like how you've added your own spin on the Narcissus and Echo story, how Victoire, although entranced by her own reflection, hates it because it's a curse. I appreciate how Teddy sees more than just the mask though. Given the original fate of Echo it seems like Teddy will always suffer unrequited love, but I hope that he tells her eventually ;) I do like the way you left it off there though, with the end unresolved.
Lastly, you conveyed so much in just 500 words, and that's something to be proud of. There is so much description in this piece, so much emotion - it's really cohesive and I know I can't write something that good in 500 words, so I'm impressed! ;)
You're a talented writer and you did a wonderful job on this!
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Wow, this review! I'm blushing as I try and think of an appropriate response, so I'm sorry if this doesn't make sense!
I'm really pleased that you were guessing who the characters were, and that Victoire and Teddy make sense belonging here. I was so excited to write this and use the story for inspiration but add my own twist. I'm really pleased that you could see that Teddy can see deeper than the mask! I think the main problem is that Victoire doesn't believe anyone can see past her appearance, so maybe there will be hope in the end!
I've wanted to try the Every Word Counts challenge for ages now, and I'm so happy that you think I managed it well! Thank you for this amazing review!!