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Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 17 Dec 2017 03:00 AM · [Report This]
Story:Scars Chapter: Lovely Lavender


Oh hey, you posted this on my birthday! Happy late birthday present to me!

 

My first reaction is surprise that Lavender isn’t with Parvati, and relief that she’s alive. I can deal with this compromise.

 

I hope it’s okay that I’m reading this without having read Her Love first - I couldn’t find it on the archives!

 

The first half of the story is a lot of Juno’s internal monologue, and really does a thorough job of describing her her state and her perception of Lavender’s, but it was a bit much of telling instead of showing. I really enjoyed when the story shifted to describing the scene of the date, as I was able to feel right there with these characters.

 

Wow, Lavender came a long way! I’m super happy for her. I am very curious about what exactly changed to bring this about. From what we know, she was in a very dark place for a long time, and then this night she made the decision to act differently. She almost seems like she’s starting fresh with a different attitude, which is huge and no easy adjustment. I’m very curious what changed to get her to that point.

 

Sam.



Author's Response:

I'm honestly so sorry that I took so long with this review response, it's been a hot minute since I've actually looked at any reviews.

 

It's been so long since I've written this one-shot that to be perfectly honest with you, I barely remember what I wrote and what happened, but I do know that it was the other half to a one-shot written by the person I was paired up with. It's totally okay to read this without having read Her Love First, to my knowledge (or what's left of it) the two can be read separately. I think the author of Her Love First is still on HPFF and maybe didn't hear that everyone moved to a different archive so I don't know what happened.

 

Thank you so much for stopping by with a review!



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