Reviews For The Phoenix Song

Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 27 Jun 2017 10:40 AM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:The Phoenix Song Chapter: Birds of a Feather

Wow. There really were a lot of amazing entries written for Event 3 for this House Cup.


I loved this. I think you captured Luna beautifully, and I love how you characterized Rolf - I sometimes think of him as being rather like Luna, but Luna really is one of a kind, isn't she? And just because his grandfather is big on magical creatures doesn't mean that he's quite as enthusiastic about them, particularly when it comes to wild goose chases.


But I love that Luna was vindicated. I know that some of her ideas really are completely out there, but not all of them are, and I feel like she probably wouldn't hold all of those beliefs that are a bit left of the middle if she'd never experienced anything vindicating them.


And Luna is such a gentle soul - I can totally see a phoenix coming out to help her when she gets hurt.


Beautiful job.


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Author's Response:

I know right, I've read through some of them and they're all really good, I could see why the staff had such a hard time picking a winner.

I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed the one-shot! I really admire your writing so to hear that is a big deal for me! Luna really is one of a kind, there's no one quite like her. I think Rolf would've really loved animals but probably not quite on the scale that Luna loved animals so it might've a bit a of a shock for him to be introduced to someone like Luna.

Luna is a Ravenclaw, and even if she does seem a little bit loony at times, but she was put in Ravenclaw, the house that values intelligence, knowledge, logic, and reasoning and I don't think she'd believe in something if she didn't have at least some evidence proving that there was a chance of that thing existing.

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!

Name: Rhaenyra (Signed) · Date: 20 Jun 2017 01:26 AM · [Report This]
Story:The Phoenix Song Chapter: Birds of a Feather

Even though Rolf/Luna is a canon pairing, you don't see him in too many fics so this appealed to me.  I like the way you have him characterized in comparison to Luna.  While she is open to things beyond the realms of logic, it is clear that Rolf is not.  He is much more rational from this little snapshot, which makes sense for somebody who is a part of a magizoological family.  I also like how you have made him a person of colour.  We know nothing about his appearance, so it was a good idea to add some diversity there.


As for Luna, she is very true to the Luna of the books.  Whereas most people would be discouraged after travelling through two countries in two different continents without finding the animal they were looking for, Luna is not.  Rolf has the more "normal" reaction by trying to come up with a way to leave, but Luna is not discouraged so easily.  I also laugh that she calls him "Ralph" instead of Rolf.  Clearly, this is long before they get married (or even start to date, one would hope!).


I like that the phoenix can tell when its powers are needed.  The fact that we have only seen a phoenix appear to help otherwise is when Harry is injured and shows true loyalty to Dumbledore.  I think the phoenix would know that Luna had only good intentions and a gentle heart.  Even though you don't go into why Luna was looking for one, I don't doubt for a second that she wasn't trying to take feathers or otherwise cause it harm.


The characters in this were very well done.  I would love to read more about Rolf and Luna in the future if you wrote them.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for reviewing first of all!

I feel like when you're with somebody like Luna, somebody in the relationship has to keep their head screwed on tight as Luna is prone to following whatever takes her fancy, not always thinking it through. And coming from a magizoological family, Rolf would probably have the patience to keep up with her considering how fickle magical animals can be.

Also yes, this was way before they were dating, more around the time when the two of them first met. Rolf's main job here is to make sure that he and Luna come out alive from wherever Luna drags them and leave the rest to Luna herself.

I can also assure that Luna was definitely not going to harm the phoenix. Her main motivation would be to see what a phoenix is like in it's natural habitat, maybe Fawkes became somewhat domesticated than those of his species that lived in the wild, the Ravenclaw in her would want to know and study the differences I'm sure.

I'm so glad that you enjoyed the one-shot, again thank you for leaving the review and I'll have to give some thought to more Rolf/Luna stories they sound like they might be fun to write.

Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 16 Jun 2017 08:28 PM · [Report This]
Story:The Phoenix Song Chapter: Birds of a Feather

Hi again!  I was looking at your page and this story caught my eye - I love Luna (I mean, who doesn't?  She's amazing) and I have a real soft spot for Luna and Rolf, too.


I loved the idea behind this story - it's such an original concept, and I'd actually love to read more about Luna and Rolf going on their adventures and discovering new creatures and seeing rare beasts in all of these different countries.  It's such a brilliant premise for a story and if you ever write more about them on their adventures, let me know!


I really enjoyed the fact that Luna and Rolf are only friends at this point.  We know from canon that they only have kids fairly late on compared to the other characters of their age, but I love the idea of them being friends for a long time beforehand and going on all of these adventures together.  I thought you captured their friendship really well, and I liked the dynamic here, too - it's interesting to see that, even though Rolf is the one who's related to the famous Newt Scamander, Luna is the one who's so determined to trek through the jungle to catch a glimpse of a phoenix.  I think that also nods to her Ravenclaw side - she loves learning so much and is so curious about the world around her, so it's nice to see that side of her here.


I really enjoyed the way that you painted the picture of India here, though they didn't spend much time around people there - the mentions of the rickshaw and the really vivid colours and beautiful scenery helped to build up an image of what it's like.


It made me laugh a little that they trekked through the jungle and suffered the heat for so long because Luna was desperate to find a phoenix, and yet it only appeared when she was least expecting it.  The ending was a really beautiful moment, though - I loved the gentleness of it, with the way the phoenix knew instinctively that Luna wouldn't hurt it and that it wanted to help her.  I'm glad that Luna got her moment and got to see a phoenix in person!


Sian :)

Author's Response:

Hey sorry for responding to this in 2018, I usually end up going MIA in the fanfiction world for quite a while and things sometimes pile up while I'm gone so I'm only getting to this now. But anyways, moving on to responding to the actual review.

I'm so happy to hear that you liked the idea behind the story and I agree that it would be really interesting to see Luna and Rolf travel all over the world looking to find magical creatures and learn about them (assuming that the creatures didn't try and eat them of course). I like the idea of writing stories about them travelling together, but I'm not gonna lie, it probably won't happen this year or anytime soon but if I'm still writing fanfiction a few years from now and I've done all of my other ideas, then I probably will.

After all of the adventures that Luna and Rolf had together, it would be extremely difficult for them to find someone else that they shared so much history and adventure with and that understood them in the same way. It was inevitable that they fell in love with each other. Growing up with Newt (who I imagine was quite a bit like Luna), he was probably used to the spontaneous ideas that Newt has and went with Luna because he knew that she was like his father and that she needed someone who could keep up with her and keep her alive. I think one of my favourite things about Luna is how curious she is about everything and that she wants to know things for the sake of knowledge when a lot of people simply learn something because they need to or because it is a mean to an end.

I'm glad to hear that you liked my description of India, I've never been so I didn't want to give a describe anything that was stereotypical or too inaccurate.

Thank you so much for reading and for leaving such a lovely review.

Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 16 Jun 2017 12:35 AM · [Report This]
Story:The Phoenix Song Chapter: Birds of a Feather

This story is super cute!

It didn’t occur to me that phoenixes would be hard to find, since we had one chilling in hogwarts through the series, but Dumledore is an extraordinary wizard. Phoenixes also seem a little more normal than the things that usually capura Luna’s imagination, but I can see their appeal for her.

Hehe, I find it cute that she had to drag Rolf along.

Is she calling him Ralph because they just met, or does she always do that?

I like that contrast of Rolf being much more practical and anxious than Luna.

Haha, if Rolf is waiting for Luna to suggest they give up, he may have to wait quite a while =P

Oh wait, she does have a concept of rest? Impressive.

The phoenix’s song is such a perfectly beautiful match to Luna’s ethereal personality. I think that Luna has a very strong connection with Death, after seeing her mother die and her affection for thestrals - it makes sense that she would be very interested in phoenixes.

I adore the fact that after all that time Luna spent searching for the phoenix, it is the one who eventually sought her out.

Aw, cute photographer Rolf.

That’s an interesting idea, that phoenixes have to relearn their sons when they are reborn.

Aw, what a cute little encounter! Lovely work.


Author's Response:

I'm so sorry for responding to this in 2018 but I go MIA in the fanfiction world quite a bit so things sometimes get away from me.

But yeah, I actually pulled out my copy of Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them to try and keep the information that I had on phoenixes as accurate as possible and I'm pretty sure it said something about them being very rare (I can't remember at the moment it's been a while). But at least Luna has a chance of finding a phoenix, Nargles on the other hand ... perhaps not as much. 

Luna calls Rolf, Ralph because she forgets what his name is the second after he corrects her and the first thing that comes to mind is Ralph as it's closest to Rolf, since Luna has a tendency to be out of it quite a bit, I figured it would be pretty believable that she would just call him Ralph.

Ya know, I never really thought about the connection that Luna has to death, but I can see what you're talking about. I think she kind of accepted how big a part of death was in her life and worked with it instead of trying to distance herself from it. It's very different from how Harry deals with death being present in his life.

Thank you so much for reviewing, I really appreciate it.

Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 15 Jun 2017 10:27 AM · [Report This]
Story:The Phoenix Song Chapter: Birds of a Feather

I love how you start the story with Luna's situation straight away, and how much time and effort and money she's put into finding the phoenix, and how frustrated she is. I'm already crossing my fingers for her that she's successful in India!

Aw and she's taken Rolf with her! That would be so romantic... if she could get his name right, haha!

He only had the sounds of her laughter and awe that came from her as she found new things. I love this and I could just imagine it happening. I'm sure there are worse things to follow, Rolf.

The difference between them is so great - how Luna sits there daydreaming about finding the phoenix, and Rolf is terrified that a tiger will find them. It's a nice balance.

Her determination is amazing.

Ahhh! She found it! Well, it found her. I love that it healed her without missing a beat. And I love the idea that as phoenixes grow, they sing more songs. I'm glad Rolf managed to see it as well, and even catch it on camera, especially after the hard time he had trudging through the forest!

Author's Response:

I think this journey definitely brought Luna and Rolf closer together and that hopefully by the end of it, she would at least know his name properly, if not be smitten with him. I feel like if Rolf were smitten with her he'd do a very bad job of hiding it and probably super excited about their relationship to be honest.

Thank you so much for reviewing!

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