Reviews For Golden Days

Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 27 Jun 2017 10:39 AM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Golden Days Chapter: What a Time to be Alive

Aw, this was really cute. I liked going back in their memories with them, to a lot of the best moments in the series - or at least the most entertaining ones. I especially loved their reminiscing about the first time they met Grawp (though in the books, was Ron there for that?) - I'm sure Hermione was close to falling apart, too! I also really appreciated the reference to Kreacher, and their going to look for him at the end of this - it really says a lot about how far he's come!


A minor bit of CC, though - 


I wasn't sure about the order they listed the people they lost in the war, or who listed what. I'd think that Harry would be the one who mentioned Lupin, Sirius, and Dumbledore, and not necessarily in that order, and I certainly don't think Colin and Griphook would come before Dumbledore, Sirius, and Dobby. It's minor, but it stood out to me as a bit odd.


Overall, though, excellent job!


[review transferred from HPFF]

Author's Response:

Hello there Branwen!

I fixed the whole Grawp thing because someone else had pointed it as well and I felt like such an idiot about it because I completely forgot that Ron wasn't there to meet Grawp so I went back and fixed it.

I took into account about what you said about the order that the names were listed in and I went back and fixed that as well, taking out some names and I think I put in a couple of new ones in their place. i see what you mean about it being odd in the way they were listed.

Thank you so much for your awesome review!

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