Hi, there! I'm stopping in for BvB :)
Oooh, I really liked this! This was an excellent depiction of Lily, and very unique to ones I've read in the past. I love the fire you've given her here, the resilience and determination. We always hear about how Lily was kind and a wonderful friend, and while those are obviously good things, I liked reading about her looking out for herself for a change. It was a nice change of pace.
One thing that really struck be about Lily in this was how she defined what it meant to be a Gryffindor. This line in particular really stood out to me: "She refused to show weakness in the face of the enemy because she was Lily Evans and she was a Gryffindor." Gryffindor is obviously associated with bravery, but I think a lot of us forget that there are many different kinds of bravery. It's more than running headfirst into a fight or a battle. Lily showed her bravery by being tough in the face of adversary, but quietly. She had a quiet strength, one that she obviously didn't get credit for until now, her seventh year. And she absoultely has every right to be proud of herself for it, and to bask in the feeling of being on top of the world, so to speak.
Hehe, I love her shock about James being Head Boy. If I was in her shoes, I'd be confused, too. (He wasn't even a Prefect, right?) But I love the subtle hint of her starting to tolerate James at the end and even finding him funny.
This was great! Excellent job!
Huh. I really liked this take on Lily - I feel like it takes her out of the Mary Sue realms and into someone who's a little more realistic. The idea that part of what drove her to be such a powerful witch was competitiveness and the desire to prove people wrong is one that I can believe very easily, and given how many slurs and insults Hermione received when Voldemort was out of power, I can only imagine how much worse it would be to be Lily, who grew up during the First Wizarding War. The internal drive and sentiment that she absolutely had to be tough seemed like it was absolutely the sort of pressure that could mold someone into being as talented and accomplished as Lily is always described as being.
I really enjoyed this little look into Lily's character. Great job.
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I'm so glad to hear that you liked this version of Lily. I think if you look at what we're only given in the books, she seems pretty Mary-Sue but if you made up the rest of Lily, you could make her pretty realistic. I feel like in Lily's days, it was either be the best in your classes, especially Defense, or you'd find yourself in the hospital wing with a very bad injury, or dead.
Thank you so much for your awesome review!