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Name: ReillyJade (Signed) · Date: 15 Jan 2018 01:32 AM · [Report This]
Story:Bad Blood Chapter: (don't) forgive and forget

Hi there! Dropping in for BvB. :)

 

I think you characterized Lily beautifully here. The insinuation that this isn't the first time he's wronged her and she's just sort-of let it slide seems like a very Lily thing to do. Lily's kindness and loyalty is prevalent throughout the books, and it's very likely that she turned a blind eye to his antics before finally snapping. Lily's not the type of person to cast someone off lightly, especially a close friend, so the way you eloquently depicted this as her breaking point is very believable.

 

And she doesn't just say "we're done" either. I love the way she lists off everything, throwing it all in Severus's face. It's like she's taking a huge weight off her shoulders while simultaneously chastising him for being such a crummy person (and that's putting it lightly lol.) To me, that seems quite true to the Lily we know in canon, and certaintly a very Gryffindor way to end a friendship. She kind of sets herself free here, in a way, and I enjoyed that aspect very much.

 

You handled Snape extremely well, too. Him not taking responsibility for his actions/acting like it's no big deal is so Snape, it isn't even funny. I love the comparison you drew between him and the Marauders in this regard. Yes, the Marauders aren't angels, but at least they own their poor behavior. It makes them far more tolerable. XD

 

Having Snape try to pin the blame on Lily at the end was a marvelous touch, too, because that's what he's done his entire life, isn't it? He's always blamed others (be it James, Dumbledore, or Harry) for his mess-ups. It just goes to show how selfish and arrogant of a person he really was if he tried to pin the blame on Lily, of all people. 

 

All in all, a wonderful little one-shot! Well done! 

 

Cheers,

Reilly



Name: Elena (Signed) · Date: 13 Jan 2018 07:27 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Bad Blood Chapter: (don't) forgive and forget

This gives a more in-depth look at the end of Severus and Lily's friendship and I think it's pretty spot on. I think you got both Lily and Snape right at this point in time. Lily was fed up, she couldn't find any more reasons to forgive him - not that she should have. They were both at the point of going their own ways, which Lily does point out. Regardless of James, Snape was unwilling to forgive and forget - and never did.

 

In some ways, it's sad because as much as Lily was angry, there was hurt there too. As much as we analyse Snape now, Lily also lost a friend and had to watch that friend turn into the very thing she was going to have to fight in the pending war. But most importantly, he turned on her - he just never understood that part. Overall, I think you gave this moment justice.



Name: Nhaz (Signed) · Date: 07 Sep 2017 02:58 PM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Bad Blood Chapter: (don't) forgive and forget

Oh, sorry. Forgot to log in. You can delete the previous review.

Even if I keep wishing all this hadn't happened, it very well could have. Unlike (arguably) me, you seem to have zero sympathy for young Severus, so you've added even more unsympathetic reactions than what I would have imagined right in that moment - then again, I admit they would have been as likely as the ashamed mumbling I expect him to have resorted to.

You've perfectly captured his lack of understanding of what Lily is upset about, and inadequate apology. Especially the moment with him babbling about homework. As is realistic, he doesn't even realise his apology is hollow - he only sees harm in calling Lily that name, anyone else is separate and fair game. This is exactly how Snape is written in the books, compartmentalising everything into Lily and Not-Lily. And then after her tirade about him being evil and uncaring on principle, he still thinks that pointing fingers at Potter about the incident (which was just the last straw, really) will make her reconsider.

His jealous, pathetic rant about Potter's fanclub is also spot-on. This is one element of "nice guys" in general that I feel people miss often about Snape - the same resentment that he didn't realise had pooled in him against Lily and that triggered the insult - is showing up again here. He might as well regret it, but his fault remains for not taking care to learn anything or even ask himself if he's in the wrong.

Now, Lily. I appreciate how you wrote her as someone who wants her friend back, but also won't beg him or hold his hand when he's in the wrong and oblivious about it. You've shown her own disillusionment with their deteriorating friendship - how Severus always expected her to be the listener, how he never heard what she had to say. It's nice to see the realism of her trouble to let go - for much the same reason I think Severus felt entitled to her compliance and support. I'm afraid part of me will always see these events through Snape's point of view, but even then, Lily's harsh rebuke of him feels well-deserved. I believe Lily's yelling and unforgiving tone gives the scene a finality that was not quite obvious in the book.

The one thing I wouldn't see as canon compliant is the long laundry list of bullying committed by Snape. I doubt he personally bullied people, or at least not so overtly. Not for any other reason, but to avoid getting his hands dirty - Lily would have stopped talking to him a lot sooner if she had learned of any of this. Unless he had been extra careful but she found out once she opened her eyes to it... after the Mudblood incident.

All in all, a heartbreaking but cathartic read.



Author's Response:

I couldn't figure out how to delete the other review so here we go:

I'm really sorry for taking so long to respond to this but I'm here and I'd first like to start off by thanking you for this really long review. I think you've probably figured out that I'm not a very big Snape sympathizer at all, the list of terrible things that he did is just too long for me to be able to look on him in a positive light.

I'm really glad that you saw that he didn't really understand why what he did was wrong. I've gotten a lot of reviews and messages from people who didn't really get that and basically telling me that I had no understanding of Snape's character and that I didn't know what I was talking about and how it lacked. 

I'm really glad that you at least could see and understand why Lily was upset and the struggle that she had to go through with letting Snape go and realizing that they were not the same people that started Hogwarts at the age of 11. My most common response to Lily in this oneshot has just been that she wasn't as saint, as if I was somehow implying at all in the story that she was. I feel like another perspective on the situation was needed, in the book you only see it from Snape's point of view and you kind of forget that he was this big bully in school who terrorized the other students, not that the Marauders never did the same thing but I feel like the degree to which Snape and the Marauders misbehaved was on different levels. 

The long laundry list of Snape's crimes, I don't think he personally would've carried out each and every task, he was no doubt involved in some of the things that could have occurred, and more than capable of covering his tracks, but the group of Death Eaters that he joined at school were the ones who carried out the list of bullying and as Snape was part of them, I figured, by association, he too committed those bullying acts as well, indirectly.

Thank you for the lovely, long review.



Name: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: 07 Sep 2017 02:56 PM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Bad Blood Chapter: (don't) forgive and forget

Even if I keep wishing all this hadn't happened, it very well could have. Unlike (arguably) me, you seem to have zero sympathy for young Severus, so you've added even more unsympathetic reactions than what I would have imagined right in that moment - then again, I admit they would have been as likely as the ashamed mumbling I expect him to have resorted to.

You've perfectly captured his lack of understanding of what Lily is upset about, and inadequate apology. Especially the moment with him babbling about homework. As is realistic, he doesn't even realise his apology is hollow - he only sees harm in calling Lily that name, anyone else is separate and fair game. This is exactly how Snape is written in the books, compartmentalising everything into Lily and Not-Lily. And then after her tirade about him being evil and uncaring on principle, he still thinks that pointing fingers at Potter about the incident (which was just the last straw, really) will make her reconsider.

His jealous, pathetic rant about Potter's fanclub is also spot-on. This is one element of "nice guys" in general that I feel people miss often about Snape - the same resentment that he didn't realise had pooled in him against Lily and that triggered the insult - is showing up again here. He might as well regret it, but his fault remains for not taking care to learn anything or even ask himself if he's in the wrong.

Now, Lily. I appreciate how you wrote her as someone who wants her friend back, but also won't beg him or hold his hand when he's in the wrong and oblivious about it. You've shown her own disillusionment with their deteriorating friendship - how Severus always expected her to be the listener, how he never heard what she had to say. It's nice to see the realism of her trouble to let go - for much the same reason I think Severus felt entitled to her compliance and support. I'm afraid part of me will always see these events through Snape's point of view, but even then, Lily's harsh rebuke of him feels well-deserved. I believe Lily's yelling and unforgiving tone gives the scene a finality that was not quite obvious in the book.

The one thing I wouldn't see as canon compliant is the long laundry list of bullying committed by Snape. I doubt he personally bullied people, or at least not so overtly. Not for any other reason, but to avoid getting his hands dirty - Lily would have stopped talking to him a lot sooner if she had learned of any of this. Unless he had been extra careful but she found out once she opened her eyes to it... after the Mudblood incident.

All in all, a heartbreaking but cathartic read.



Author's Response:

I'm really sorry for taking so long to respond to this but I'm here and I'd first like to start off by thanking you for this really long review. I think you've probably figured out that I'm not a very big Snape sympathizer at all, the list of terrible things that he did is just too long for me to be able to look on him in a positive light.

I'm really glad that you saw that he didn't really understand why what he did was wrong. I've gotten a lot of reviews and messages from people who didn't really get that and basically telling me that I had no understanding of Snape's character and that I didn't know what I was talking about and how it lacked. 

I'm really glad that you at least could see and understand why Lily was upset and the struggle that she had to go through with letting Snape go and realizing that they were not the same people that started Hogwarts at the age of 11. My most common response to Lily in this oneshot has just been that she wasn't as saint, as if I was somehow implying at all in the story that she was. I feel like another perspective on the situation was needed, in the book you only see it from Snape's point of view and you kind of forget that he was this big bully in school who terrorized the other students, not that the Marauders never did the same thing but I feel like the degree to which Snape and the Marauders misbehaved was on different levels. 

The long laundry list of Snape's crimes, I don't think he personally would've carried out each and every task, he was no doubt involved in some of the things that could have occurred, and more than capable of covering his tracks, but the group of Death Eaters that he joined at school were the ones who carried out the list of bullying and as Snape was part of them, I figured, by association, he too committed those bullying acts as well, indirectly.

Thank you for the lovely, long review.



Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 27 Jun 2017 10:36 AM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Bad Blood Chapter: (don't) forgive and forget

Hey, I'm here for the BvB review fest! I meant to review when I stopped by to read this a few weeks ago, but I must have gotten distracted. I'm glad I remembered to come back, because I love this story.

 

I'm not a Snape fan. I don't like Snape - I think he's pretty much a jerk, and that his being a selfish bad friend dates back much further than actually calling Lily a Mudblood. The way you approached the aftermath of that incident here lines up pretty perfectly with my own headcanon for what happened that day; I found it completely and totally believable.

 

Your handling of Lily's emotions throughout the one-shot was wonderful - you gave them the full scope and complexity that I think the situation warranted. Her wanting to avoid people because she (probably accurately) thought that they'd say "I told you so" was perfect, and her processing that it had hurt even though he did call everyone else that - as well as really thinking about what that meant - rang so true to me.

 

But it wasn't easy for her to let go, and as much as I really dislike Snape, I liked that, too. They'd been friends for years, and he'd been her first glimpse into the wizarding world - that's hard to let go of, particularly since everything we know about Lily from canon paints her as a kind, empathetic sort of person. Both of those things working together would definitely make her want to forgive him for the slip up.

 

It seemed pretty clear, though, that Lily's take was right - Snape wasn't sorry enough to not keep making the same mistakes. He was more sorry that he'd gotten caught out at them. It was so gratifying to see Lily call him out on it.

 

Amazing job.

 

[review transferred from HPFF]



Author's Response:

I'M SO SORRY FOR TAKING SO LONG TO RESPOND TO REVIEWS BUT LET ME START OFF BY SAYING THANK YOU FOR LEAVING THIS FOR ME!

First off, it's made my day to hear that you loved this story. I'm not a Snape fan either to be honest with you, Lily tried to warn him plenty of times that what his friends were doing went beyond being bullies and he simply ignored her warnings. Everyone has their limits and I think being called a Mudblood was the straw that broke the camel's back.

And there was the fact too it was embarrassing that after so many years of friendship, everyone witnessed Snape pretty much spitting all over what they went through together. Everyone warned Lily it was going to happen, just like she warned Snape that his friends were doing evil things.

Of course it would've been hard to let her go. Cutting out people in your life who are toxic is easier said than done, especially when you have to see that person every day for an entire year, and if you've gone through difficult times together.

Thank you so much for leaving this review!



Name: Rhaenyra (Signed) · Date: 24 Jun 2017 10:46 PM · [Report This]
Story:Bad Blood Chapter: (don't) forgive and forget

So I was scrolling down the stories list for Marauder fics and I saw your banner.  Sophie Turner is my Lily too so I had to read & review this.

 

The layers to Lily's realizations in your story are really interesting.  She thinks of all the years they have been friends and the bond that they used to have and her (friend!) love for him and is now realizing it has impaired her judgment.  She wanted to believe the best in him because when she met him as a nine or ten year old kid, he was fairly innocent and they got along so well.  Yet it is clear that she is realizing just how much they have grown apart and how so many infractions over the years have affected her perception of him and their friendship.

 

I think this summarizes it all perfectly: "But Severus had never been sorry enough to not make the same mistake twice. You were supposed to never make the same mistake twice, you were supposed to learn".  Lily is realizing that she has been forgiving somebody for mistakes that they continue to repeat and that it means that he is not actually sorry for any of it.  Sorry for being caught or for the impact, maybe, but not for what he said.

 

The jealously in his mentioning of James Potter or other Gryffindors having an impact on her thoughts is really good, as well.  He wants to believe that there is no way that his actions could have caused this, that it has to have been somebody else who has done something to take his best friend away.  It ties in nicely to the line I quoted above and also really underscore the unhealthy parts of their relationship.  He is possessive and abusive, in a way, using slurs against a group she belongs to.

 

Speaking of slurs, Lily defending the fact that she can use Mudblood but he can't struck a chord with me based on real world words that members of disadvantaged groups can use but people not in those groups can't.  So that was a nice touch as well.

 

I didn't think I had this much to say, so I'll stop now.  I really enjoyed this and I'm glad the banner got my attention. :)



Author's Response:

I'm sorry for taking so long to respond to this review but thank you so much for leaving one! I think it's fairly common to make excuses for the behaviour of someone who's been a huge part of our lives up to a point and Lily was probably doing the exact same thing for Snape throughout the books to be honest up until he called her a Mudblood at which point she realized that she couldn't keep making excuses for him, that this was who he had become and she had to decide whether or not she wanted someone like that in her life.

As well as the apologizing, before she might have talked herself into thinking they were sincere but having Snape turn on her in that manner hit her with the ugly reality that he didn't mean his apologies otherwise they wouldn't have fallen out. And you also see it throughout the series as well that Snape doesn't really take responsibility for what he's done he's always looking for ways to blame it on other people because there's no way that he could've been wrong and Snape was like obssessed with James as well and James's feelings for Lily so to me it would make sense that he would assume James had something to do with it, that and the fact that Lily had probably never been as angry or as hurt as she was at that moment and he was surprised that she hadn't just shrugged it off.

Thank you so much for reviewing!



Name: danicasyer (Signed) · Date: 24 Jun 2017 02:37 AM · [Report This]
Story:Bad Blood Chapter: (don't) forgive and forget

Hello!


The first thing I wanted to say that this story really broke my heart because I do recall the scene where Lily and Snape had stopped being friends in the Deathly Hallows but I was always curious to see what happened at that exact moment more than what the book gave. I honestly enjoyed reading your take on it too since we can see more of Lily's thoughts and feelings. I was able to take in Lily's frustration, anger, sadness, and alot of her emotions that came with the conflict of having to end a friendship with somebody who was once her friend because he decided to hurt her in a way that was not okay. I loved that you were able to also show us her reasoning and unwillingness to not want to remain friends or even forgive Snape this time instead as she always did considering what he did really wasn't okay in her eyes also showed.  It's great that she stuck values and what she believed in even though it was really tempting to also wanting to wanting to forgive him and place him back in her life.


Another thing that I wanted to point out is there were aspects of how it was relateable it was for me since I know many people have gone through situations like this too and it really does hurt. I understood that in Lily’s case since it was hard in finding out that her close friend was a bully to other students and she was standing before him before she saw the error of her ways but also seeing the bigger picture herself of what kind of person he was which lead her to be conflicted about him at times before she was called a foul name herself. Bullies, I’ve seen in media are usually depicted as people in school, workplace, or other places where the target doesn’t know the bully or vice versa as well. But I know there are times they are the ones who can be closest to us in form of a family members or friends which makes it harder to deal with. I honestly think  it was great how you were able to show through Lily’s internal conflict, dialogue exchanged between her and Snape, and the result of that. I was glad that Lily was able to stop befriending somebody who hurt her despite how much it must of hurt her even more to do so.

 

Overall, I genuinely enjoyed this one shot alot! I really enjoyed your take on Lily and loved her characterization in this as well!

 

-Anni



Author's Response:

Sorry for taking so long to respond to this review but I'm here now and thank you so much for leaving one!

I think Lily and Snape's relationship is always interesting to look at especially since there isn't much to go on throughout the books and to think about how the dynamic in their friendship would've worked especially once Snape turned towards the Dark Arts. Lily was really brave in ending a friendship that she knew was toxic and unhealthy because it can be so hard to cut out someone in your life who was such a huge influence. Calling her a Mudblood was probably the signal to Lily that they weren't the same people anymore and they couldn't  keep carrying on as if things were going as usual between them when it so clearly wasn't.

Lily probably had an easier time of ignoring or at least tolerating the things Snape did until it was directed at her and then it kind of hit her that deep down inside Snape didn't see her as any different to anyone else that he had bullied at school.

Thank you so much for reviewing I really enjoyed reading your thoughts.



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