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Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 02 Jul 2017 06:38 AM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Breathe Chapter: Breathe

Wow. This is both really entertaining and surprisingly dark all at once - my heart went out to the mandrakes, which is not a thing I ever expected to say. :P I really enjoyed it!



Name: danicasyer (Signed) · Date: 23 Jun 2017 11:02 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breathe Chapter: Breathe

Hello!

 

I genuinely enjoyed reading this story as you were to capture the Mandrakes’ and their thoughts, feelings, and sights and the fact that it was from another perspective that wasn't human so that was highly intriguing for me to read as well! I also enjoyed how you gave the Mandrakes names and personalities too and were able to bring them to life by their responses from their point of view especially regarding humans. Your description of how Drake and his friends feelings of apprehensiveness and disdain towards human species when they were demonstrating repotting in the class was my favorite aspect of this one shot because I was able to understand their feelings in that moment. I also thought it was somewhat fitting that you described the humans as hulking beasts as well as well as being able to describe the pain that he to go through when the Professor had pulled him out of the pot.  The other thing that made this story interesting for me was how you used words to differentiate the humans and the Mandrakes to further show the latter’s thoughts of the formers as well.

 

I think Petal being able to understand them while Drake and Mandy weren’t able to was quite interesting since it shows that she is more wiser than the two which makes me wonder about her character. The part where you wrote about them breathing actually made me feel conflicted because I can understand the pain they’re going through but also funny in a sense how it looks on the flip side if that makes sense. I found the ending had me also sympathetic for Drake and his friends after what Petal said about their future and what was in store for them. Poor Mandrakes!

 

Overall this story was really enjoyable to read and seeing another point of view from humans was absolutely a delight! I think this gives me more sympathy for Mandrakes in a way too! But overall, this story was really fun but somewhat bittersweet.  Still thank you for an enjoyable read!

 

-Anni




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