I've never had the pleasure of reading a Marlene x Dorcas before--they're awfully cute together, as it turns out. I love how Marlene's the one leading her off on an adventure (albeit it's just an adventure to the kitchens); she always felt like a very adventurous, forward character to me. Late night snacks are awesome! And I've never had a tracle tart, but they sound very good, and apparently, they must be Dorcas's favorite, given that she smiles at the mention! A warm pastry is the best kind of pastry, if you ask me--so I'm happy that they're sharing their delicious midnight snack directly from the oven. The house elves do seem awesome and I'm sure if I were at Hogwarts, I would be making trips to the kitchens for snacks and to hang out with the house elves. I love that when Dorcas suggested that Marlene should try some of the tart, Marlene leaned in to kiss her, instead. This was sweet and fluffy and a very nice read!
BEAUTIFUL. This has all of my favorite things in it: first war, lesbian relationships, fluff, sweets, secret trips to the kitchen, EVERYTHING I COULD ASK FOR. I love how sweet and simple this was. You haven’t given us much detail, but I still have a solid glimpse of both of these girls as characters, and their relationship. I think my favorite thing is that it’s unclear when this takes place, so you can imagine it as a first kiss or just a glimpse into a really loving relationship.
Awww this was so sweet! (Pun totally intended) I really like the idea of these two as a couple, and I adore the way you showed their dynamics of their relationship through the dialogue and how they're flirting with one another while sneaking around at night to eat dessert. And the tone of the piece is just wonderful, this carefree but sort of rebellious feel as they're probably not supposed to be there but everything about it is just perfect (and probably the fact that they shouldn't be there is part of the excitement, at least to Marlene :P )
I loved this!
So this was simply adorable femslash, is there anything that you can't right? I love the way you used dialogue to tell most of the story that we get most of the context of this relationship from that. I love the playfulness that you've used in their voices here at being out after dark to go to the kitchens, I enjoyed how Dorcas is a little naive but Marlene is being super flirty. it adds something to the scene. I enjoyed the way you painted the dynamic between the two girls especially Marlene's character who seems to be very cheeky more of the ringleader type leading poor Dorcas astray :P
I thought the kiss its self was really lovely - just so sweet but mischievous which really added something to this cute little drabble. I think it's a perfect snapshot into their lives at this time so well done at creating this moment of happiness before the war properly started. I really enjoyed this!
- Abbi xo
Yass I love Marlene/Dorcas.
lol at first when you said “summoning” in the first line I imagined a summoning spell *couch*
Squeee this is so cute! Even before the kiss, just them sneaking out together to get some treacle tart felt very fun and flirty to me (which might be the bias of how much I love sweet showing XD).
This is just a tiny little piece and we only get a glimpse of these girls and their relationship, but you’ve managed to convey a lot with those few words, and leave a huge smile on my face!
This is at a wonderful intersection of being perfect how it is and leaving me wanting more. Excellent job!
Is it bad that the title of this story makes me really hungry? I could definitely do with my own late night adventure to the kitchens for some treacle tart :P
This was a really sweet (no pun intended) story. I haven't read a lot of stories about Marlene McKinnon or Dorcas Meadowes - and I definitely don't think that I've seen them paired together before - but I thought this was a great snippet to introduce us to their characters. So often, because the only thing we know about them is that they died fighting for the Order of the Phoenix, the stories about them only centre on the war and the tragedy of it, so it was nice to see them here as people - just as two young girls who like having fun and doing normal things. It's a nice reminder that the people who died fighting for what they believed in also managed to live first, and it was a life that most people can relate to.
I could definitely get behind these two as a couple, too - they were so relaxed with each other, and seemed so happy and carefree. It was really nice to read about them having this late night trip to the kitchens, and just having fun like most people there age, without the shadow of the war hanging over them. I'd love to read more of them together, if you ever write them!