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Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 18 Dec 2017 06:17 PM · [Report This]
Story:Please Tell Me Secrets Die Chapter: Prologue: July 6th, Summer After 7th Year
Hey!


This is a really neat idea for a story and is a much darker perspective for Scorpius than what I'm used to, which is great, it means it's new and fresh! The Malfoy Manor burning to the ground as Scorpius walks away from it is some tragic imagery. It seems that Scorpius is experiences some level of psychosis as the voices haunt him and it makes for an extremely chilling atmosphere especially considering that Scorpius was the one to burn down the house, if I'm not mistaken. He did it for Lily, because he loved her but his parents were against the star-crossed romance. Even his best efforts have gone to waste, it seems, as the person he loves walks away from him because of his anger issues. It seems he has bipolar disorder, or some other mental disorder, if I'm not mistaken. His emotions flip flop so quickly it must be extremely difficult for him. Hopefully he gets the help he needs so that he can continue on in his life without having to worry about something like this happening again.


Good job!


-Rumpels


Name: manno-malfoy (Signed) · Date: 12 Dec 2017 04:36 PM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Please Tell Me Secrets Die Chapter: Prologue: July 6th, Summer After 7th Year

Hey there! I'm here again for the winter wonderland. 

 

This was such an interesting read, and so different from the other story by you that I just read. This is a lot more intense and emotional, and the descriptions are very elegant and make a lot of impact. I like the comparison of comparing curses of the Malfoy name to black cats. That was very powerful. 

 

 Lily's stance is on point. I understand the frustration of Scorpius in his reaction to being shunned by his parents for the person he loves. But Lily is right. Healthy people don't burn down their childhood home in response to something like that. From Lily's description, I'm guessing that he has bi-polar disorder? In any case, I can't blame Lily for abandoning him. Yes, he's going through a rough patch. But we can't help the people we love until they can acknowledge that they have a problem and decide to see help. Otherwise, we'd just be self-destructive. So I admire Lily's strength to walk away. It couldn't have been easy. 

 

I really enjoyed this story, brief as it may be. But I think it's really powerful and really very beautiful.



Name: Veritaserum27 (Signed) · Date: 01 Aug 2017 12:03 PM · [Report This]
Story:Please Tell Me Secrets Die Chapter: Prologue: July 6th, Summer After 7th Year

Hi there!  I just noticed this on your AP and I thought I'd give it a go.  Wow.  This is really a powerful first chapter.  You did an azazing job with showing us everything Scorpius was dealing with, withouth explicitly telling.  And I'm duly impressed that you managed to do it in so few words.  I can see why you've decided to expand on this story - there are so many unasnwered questions!  I really do like the idea of Scorpius and Lily (although I'm a ScoRose shipper through and through), but you've made their pairing really compelling in this.  

However, I think my favorite aspect of this story is Lily's powerful character.  She's not a shrivelling flower, and she's also not falling into Scorpius's clear downward spiral.  She's strong enough to give herself what she needs - some space.  It *might* just be the thing that will pull Scorpius out from under this desctructive spell.

I really hope he didn't end up killing his parents, or anyone else.  And I'm looking forward to see where this goes!  Again, great start!

 

~Beth



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