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Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 14 Aug 2018 01:10 AM · [Report This]
Story:Twelve years Chapter: Twelve years

Hey Mel!

 

I’m here to drop off a review for Quodpot Match 1 because this features a star crossed lover pairing.

 

Gah. The idea that Remus and Sirius were lovers always makes Sirius’ imprisonment so much more painful. The idea of not only thinking your best friend had betrayed you, but also your lover...how heartbreaking. 

 

I like that you showed Sirius wandering through London observing how out the LGBTQIA+ community was in the current times. I’d imagine a lot has changed in 12 years. It was so sad when it made him think about if he and Remus had a chance. Off to go sob now.

 

Aww. Sirius writing to Remus. I wish Remus would charge downstairs and hear him out, but of course we know it won’t happen. I think it’s interesting that Remus doubts Sirius’ guilt so much that he never tells anyone about his animagus form.

 

The ending was very much a sweet invitation. It makes me happy to think they might have a few happy moments together before they die. Gah. off to go sob some more.

 

Good work on this! 

 

~Kaitlin



Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 11 Sep 2017 10:46 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Twelve years Chapter: Twelve years

Hey melian! Long-time-no-chat! I'm here for MAGIC ! 

So, I really love how you set this up.  Sirius has been in Azkaban for so long that times have drastically changed regarding same-sex couples, which sends him into a nostalgic mindset of what could have been between him and Remus.

I also really enjoyed how you introduced the thought of Remus into this, explaining that Sirius hadn't been able to think about him for the better part of 12 years because the thoughts of Remus were happy thoughts.  It's so sweet and so sad at the same time.

When Sirius contacts Remus for the first time while Sirius is stalking Peter at Hogwarts, it's absolutely heartbreaking! The simple, cold, 'Not Now' kills me inside a little, but I can see where Remus wouldn't want to speak to the man he believed was a traitor and the direct link to the rest of his friends' death.

And I also love how you wrapped it up with Remus finally sending Sirius an invitation to speak -- after over 12 years.

Great job! 

-Rumpels



Name: poppunkpadfoot (Signed) · Date: 31 Aug 2017 07:10 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Twelve years Chapter: Twelve years

Hey Mel!

So, I'm finally here reviewing for my challenge. First and foremost, I really want to apologize for the wait. I definitely wanted to get here and get the results out much sooner, but alas, here we are :(

 

But moving on to your story. First I want to say that I thought your use of second person was really good, especially considering this was your first time using it! I sometimes find second person a little distracting, but not here. So really good work there!

 

In terms of the actual content, this was really touching! I think Sirius's awe and disbelief at seeing same-gender couples in London came through particularly clearly. I felt a pang in my chest imagining him sitting outside the bar, just watching and watching, and dreaming about being pardoned so he could join in. And then tearing himself away to go find Harry, not letting himself get totally lost in it.

 

Not gonna lie, I was surprised by Sirius's decision to send Remus a note, and even more surprised by Remus's reaction to it. But the more I thought about it, the more it didn't really seem impossible or implausible. You could definitely make the argument that, in canon, Remus is drawn down the the Whomping Willow because of Peter, not Sirius's presence at Hogwarts. And I suppose I can also justify to myself why Remus wouldn't go to Dumbledore. So, suspending any disbelief I might have felt about that scene, I really enjoyed that moment. Sirius getting all excited at the prospect of lessened discrimination against werewolves was so sweet! And that he was willing to risk being found out by Dumbledore to get that message to Remus really says a lot.

 

I love that you end this on a hopeful note. Obviously we know what ends up happening in canon - :( - but the position Sirius is left in at the end of PoA is quite a disappointing one to say the least. And you didn't shy away from that, but you did give Sirius that hope and way of moving forward.

 

I know that this was out of your comfort zone in more ways than one, and I want you to know that I think you did a really great job here. With the wolfstar, the second person, all of it!

 

Thanks for entering my challenge!

 

-Kayla



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