Reviews For Dream walker


Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 17 Dec 2017 03:20 PM · For: Beware the dream walker

I don't know too much about poetry, so I don't know if this is written in any particular form. But I just wanted to say that the rhyme scheme and short lines helped to serve the scattered-like, confused, dark tone of the poem very well.

 

My interpretation of this is that the "dream stalker" is like a cousin to the Grim, that they both bring a sort of death to people (the dream stalker brings sleep, and the Grim brings a permannet death), which is why the speaker says "I’m death’s daughter" in the last stanza.

 

Dreams are drawn from our subconscious. When we live in dreams, we live in a world where things are pulled out from so deep within our brains that we didn't even realize they were there. Sometimes our dreams show us the ugly truth about ourselves, and dreams are where you can't hide, because you have no control over it.

 

The language use in this was absolutely perfect. <3



Author's Response:

Hey there! Let me tell you a secret - I don't much about poetry, either. Seriously, the last time I wrote poetry it was for high school English and Ronald Reagan was the President of the US. I honestly just wrote what my muse said, tweaking words here and there until it felt right.

In my mind, the dream stalker is dark justice or vengeance personified, seeing into the person, knowing their secret sins. But you're right - dreams are where we are at our most unguarded. Any barriers we have up to keep others - or even ourselves - from seeing what stains our souls, well, those barriers dissolve. That itself can be worrisome.

Thanks for the lovely review!

~Alexis



Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 03 Dec 2017 06:00 PM · For: Beware the dream walker

Whenever I read poetry on this site I am absolutely in awe. 1) How can you do this? 2) What was I doing, not having read this a long time ago?

 

The rhythm and word choice in this were amazing. There were so many little sets of words that flowed together really nicely while adding unexpected juxtapositions and new ideas. I particularly enjoyed “sin stalker” “no suitable defense/thinking there’s no need/ for recompense”

 

While this poem is super lovely (in a dark way!), it’s subtle in a way that I can’t be one hundred percent certain of it’s meaning. At first I imagined the speaker as a literal person, maybe obsessed with revenge on somebody particular, or just people overall. There’s definitely that obsessive stalkery  tone. But as the poem went on, it made me think of deeper, more insidious thoughts, like the voice was the things that depression or another mood disorder says to you, trying to bring you down and convince you that you’re worthless.

 

Either way, it was a very interesting piece and you did a great job with it!

 

Sam.



Name: M C Crocker (Signed) · Date: 18 Sep 2017 07:24 AM · For: Beware the dream walker

Eeek!  A new poem? How in the world did I miss this?  This is amazing.  I love the darkness of this and the story you weave is just so powerful.  I feel liks there is more to this than just the poem.  A story floating just beneath the surface.  

 

I absolutely love the pacing and sound of the poem.  You have communicated the ideas and images very well and your skills still astound me.  Wonderful job on this poem lovely!



Author's Response:

Did I forget to tell you about it? *headdesk* Sorry, dearest!

This poem was inspired by a song in one of my kids' video games. It just got stuck in my head and I found myself writing out the words. There's a bit of comeuppance in there, of righteous wrath and a warning to those who hide dark deeds. Unfortunately, my muse didn't give me more than that. So no story beyond what you've intuited. 

And thanks for the praise! You know poetry isn't my strong suit, so this review means a lot to me.

*hugs*

~Alexis

 



Name: StarFeather (Anonymous) · Date: 17 Sep 2017 08:50 PM · For: Beware the dream walker

Hi, Alexis. I came back to your poem grabbing a chance HC activity on the forums, MAGIC BINGO.

 

Overall, I sense this poem describs Severus Snape. The first verse says “You’ve been hiding from”, I guess Snape had been hiding for years, loving Lily. He must have been thinking if there’s no need for recompense or not.

 

The second verse says “Clothed in Black” it’s like Severus Snape. (I hope my guess is right. It’s fun to guess who. :D)

 

“A sin stalker”! I’m sure he is! Oh? “The prey”? I might be wrong, it’s like the third Cormoran Strike novel, “Career of Evil”.

 

The third verse says, “Lurking in the dark”, I’m convincing again, it’s like a bat which is like Snape. “Secrets you’ve stored away” implies secret feeling for Lily and his missions.

“The lies you once wove now fall apart” means Lily’s death?

 

The fourth says “I’m death’s daughter”, oh my guess is wrong. I’m very confused. Who is this person? I really enjoyed this guessing game, Alexis!

 

K



Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 17 Sep 2017 07:52 PM · For: Beware the dream walker

Alexis! I'm here for MAGIC!

I haven't had to explicate/review a poem in years, so bear with me and hopefully I won't be too far off the mark.

Verse one: I love the idea that you can't hide from your sins, no matter what. You need to pay for what you've done -- making up for all those sins -- and there's no hiding.

 

 

Verse two: I'm going out on a limb here, but I think that a 'dream walker' implies that whoever this poem is about can see into your subconscious, which might connect back to the first verse, where there's no way to hide your sins because of this.  I also love the line 'clothed in black nightshade'.  As nightshade traditionally is symbolic of death, I think the allusion of her bringing death with her is quite strong.  Then, of course, the verse as a whole speaks volumes.  She's the one who can see the things you've done wrong and she's after you. It's beautiful and epic.

 

Verse three: I like the way this verse describes the sins being revealed (all laid stark, which was awesome by the way), and everything begins to crumble upon revealing the bad (the things we all keep inside ourselves, the things we don't want other people to see).

 

Verse four: This wraps things up nicely.  I like the idea of her being 'death's daughter' and 'on a dark crusade' to find those sins and make you pay! Truly when a person's facade is destroyed, then it can also destroy them

 

I loved this.  I mean love love loved this!  The word choices were excellent, creating some really powerful imagery and it flowed together so nicely! I can't spin a poem if my life depended on it, so I definitely applaud your talent!

Great job!

-Rumpel



Name: The Basilisk (Anonymous) · Date: 24 Aug 2017 08:08 PM · For: Beware the dream walker

Alexis, my dear! 

 

I'm hear to leave a few presents for the Pass It Along Challenge. I had to stop here as I saw it was a poem. I have a particular fondness for poetry, especially when it has such a dark tone. This was sinsiter and magnificent!

 

The flow of this piece was lovely and the rhymes were flawless. You did a lovely job of matching the length of lines so that nothing felt off or out of place. 

 

The word choice within the poem was nice as well. It's easy to fall back on to the same words over and over in poems, but you varied them with ease. 

 

The ending was particularly chilling, even for a cold blooded creature like myself. 

 

Lovely work, my dear! 

 

-The Basilisk



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