Login
Reviews For Roses in Ash

Name: dreamgazer220 (Signed) · Date: 09 Apr 2018 01:00 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Roses in Ash Chapter: Eins

Hello lovely! Here for our review swap ♥

 

It's been far too long since I've read your writing, because I actually forgot how beautiful and lyrical it is.  Seriously.  Everything just flows so well, and your language just paints such a clear picture here.  

 

The first sentence really drew me in, and I loved reading more about Viktor's family.  Since we don't really know much about him in canon, at least from book four, I can imagine it would be fun to paint a picture for him, and you did such an amazing job with it.  I'm curious about the letter and who sent it, but it does seem like a good reminder - and he seems like he could use all of the good reminders he can get.

 

I loved your decritpion of the Wizarding World, and how it's recovering, and I love how Hermione and Viktor are still friends and meet up in a small little cafe every so often.  It seems so very realistic, and I hope that Hermione sees just how badly he needs a friend.  And I couldn't help but laugh at the line where she was saying that she and Ron talked about the war, but Harry didn't; perfect characterizatiosn of all three of them, really, in just that line.  And I love the way Viktor still views her, too; that she's beautiful and clever and that he feels a sense of hope when he's around her.  At least, that was the impression that I got, especially from the last line. 

 

But ugh, I can't help but wonder what actually happened to him to make him so lost in his memories. I loved the way you described the ships and the water, and it makes so much sense - I love that you pulled all of this just from the fact that Durmstrang arrived on ships in GoF.  It's so real and I feel like a lot of people associate him with only Quidditch because of his profession, but his love for water and the sea is very unique to him.

 

Overall, a very interesting first chapter, and I love how character driven it was, and the relationship between Hermione and Viktor.  I'm just going to gush one more time with how beautiful your writing is and how you're just so good at getting everyone's characters down.

 

Amazing job, as always, and thanks for the swap!! ♥



Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 10 Dec 2017 02:15 AM · [Report This]
Story:Roses in Ash Chapter: Eins

As per my usual reviews on your stories, are you ready for a whole string of synonyms that mean "amazing"? Because thats what this is going to be!

 

So yeah, this was a really impressive start. Right from the very first lines, zoomed in on that letter with the curly script (that was a gorgeous description btw.) Viktor's grandfather sounds like such an  interesting person. I love the way you weave together the anecdotes of him being the face of resistance and inspiring others, his very notable death, and the fact that he loved Gobstones... it's perfect. Even heroes have these odd, very human traits and I just love that you included that. Viktor's grandmother sounds like she was a force to be reckoned with as well and I love the way she responded.

 

I love your description of how the wizarding world is recovering, and how things may have been built in the holes left behind by places that were destroyed, but the war is still hanging over all of that in people's heads and in their memories of what used to be there. The war is still really fresh, and I love how you illustrate that.

 

Your characterization of Hermione is spot on. Everything from how she gets so passionate and hopeful (and his thoughts about that were really sweet) to the few lines she says, it really felt like her. And Viktor, I feel so bad for him as he's having such a hard time readjusting to how things are and not feeling like he belongs there, and how the past still hangs over him

 

The ship scene was really well written - you included a lot of detail that brought the scene alive, and it was really neat to see things from this perspective and a little insight on Durmstrang.

 

Amazing chapter! ♥



Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 10 Dec 2017 01:30 AM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Roses in Ash Chapter: Eins

Hello again! 

 

You already know how much I love your writing, so I'm afraid this review might get a bit redundant with me going on about how wonderful your description is. I actually thought this one was interesting because it was slightly less descriptive than your usual. I thought that fit this well though as we're seeing things through Viktor's eyes. 

 

I really like that all these years later Viktor and Hermione are still friends and still meeting for lunch. It seems fitting with their characters. I also like the way that Viktor observes Hermione and the little things he notices about her. 

 

I loved the bit of family history we get at the beginning of the chapter. What an interesting story to hear about Viktor's grandfather trying to kill Grindelwald...and even Grindelwald being a bit sad about having to execute him. I also loved his grandmother's fierce response. What a woman! 

 

Throughout the story, I couldn't help but feel a bit bad for Viktor. He seemed so alone. I mean it's clear that he's lost in his memories, but it's sort of more than that. He seems like he really needs a friend and I hope Hermione realizes that and will be there for him. 

 

Lovely writing as always! 

 

-Kaitlin

 



Submit a Review