Hey Pix!! :)
I absolutely love the premise of this story here because it is quite frankly, hilarious. POV of a lamppost and one that's located in Diagon Alley across from Quality Quidditch Supplies? Perfect. You've done a fantastic job of using the scenery as a good descriptor here because it is just a lamppost -- it doesn't have "emotions" as we know it, so it's very well done. Having the different types of people walk by underneath its bright light, both students and adults and professional quidditch players alike gives the story more depth. The lamppost has a goal of becoming a Keeper (see what I did there? :P ) and it's honestly quite funny! And then the clumsy Chudley Cannons players lose grip of a bludger and it's coming straight for the lamppost, oh no!! TBH, I'm really not surprised that they were so clumsy -- they are the worst team in the league for a reason! I love how it thinks about dodging this way and that out of the way of the bludger even though in reality it is an inanimate lamp and can't actually do that. I think if lampposts could move, that would be a right mess for sure! The accent you've given the lamppost throughout all of this is great too -- it makes it that much funnier! Great job with this piece, Pix!!
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I... feel sorry for a lamp post? I didn't think that was possible? First time for everything, I guess lol. I'm glad it got to feel like it was flying in the end, though. It was a bizzarely happy ending.
This is definitely one of the most original stories I've stumbled upon on this site. I think you crafted a plausible perspective for the lamppost; it makes sense that it would dream of flying, given its staring at owls and a quidditch shop all day long. I also liked its rationale of never being looked at; the shoppers are never looking up at the lamppost, but they look up at owls and quidditch players. Everyone (everything?) yearns be acknowledged and noticed, and it's fascinating that you explored this shared human experience through an inanimate object - and so well, too!
Now, that being said - as sad as I felt for the lamppost, there were some things in this that I couldn't help giggling about. I loved all the lamppost puns ("gassed up" and "all fired up" really got me lol.) And I cracked up at the part when it said it was trying to dodge the bludger but the it was like "it was all in my head." I was DYING! :D Thank you for making me laugh!
All in all, this was a comical, yet bittersweet read! Well done!
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Heyya! Lee Jordan here on this fine, fine evening, ready for the start of your fic! Quidditch? Chudley Cannons? This is so up my alley. Anybody can be a Quidditch fan, even the Diagon Alley lampposts!
And speaking of the lamppost, how awesome is that? Great and totally unique POV, and he likes flyin' too! My mates Fred and George are a pair of killer Beaters; no rival team is safe from their Bludgers.
Soarin' like a Hippogriff in the clouds? That's the life. That's how I like it, too! Your lamppost is pretty expressive for a lamppost - dreamy sort, isn't it?
I'm glad your post likes crowds - so do I! Nothing better than seeing the Quidditch stands packed with jostling crowds and people throwing each other off the railings -- errr, well something like that -- while I stand in the commentator box entertaining them with my awesome commentary! I guess it must be lonely as a post that everybody ignores. I'd hate that, you know?
Chudley Cannons approaching Diagon Alley -- there they go -- past the Emporium -- into the Quidditch shop. You think they're going to get the new model of racing brooms, the Nimbus 2001?? Maybe then they wouldn't suck so badly in the league, huh?
Ouch, the post got a BLudger to it's head. It's lucky it's a post! And gosh, is it lucky it was just one of those run of the mill Chudley Cannons players that threw the bludger, not Fred or George. If one of them had hurled a bludger at the post, I doubt it would still be standing.
The post will definitely make a great keeper! Send it over for the Quidditch tryouts - maybe we could have a few folks fly straight into it and knock themselves out!
Great fic, Pix! You got real talent there, creating such a cool personality and character for a plain old post, an inanimate job. I enjoyed this interesting point of view and hope you keep at it! Maybe write another from the viewpoint of a Quaffle?
this story (drabble?) was so cute but also a bit sad - at least the ending where the lamp post contemplates how it would be a great Keeper, i wanted it to actually be able to move around or bend since it's conscious and magical.
i loved how you manged to give the lamp post a unique voice and actually made me feel for an object!
a really original story, i don't think i've ever read anything like it (i do have a soft spot for stories from animal/pet POVs so i think this falls into a similar style). you did a great job at writing it! :D
I don't know what got into me, but I wrote a small handful of these stories during this time, where the main character was an object instead of a person. It was fun to try to get into their perspectives and sort things out. In the magical world, it's also fun to think about whether the objects actually have sentience. I mean, anything could happen. :)
Thanks for the review!
Hi Pix! Here trying to make my way round some of the POGs nominations!
I can certainly see why this has been nominated for most original story - it's so unique and creative! Stories told from the point of view of a (seemingly) inanimate object are so interesting, but the only one that I can think of having read at the moment is one from the perspective of a building. A streetlight is such an interesting and unobvious choice to write a story about, and this was a really fun read.
Your writing was really clever in the way that it took me a few sentences to work out that this was told from the point of view of a streetlight, as well - the voice that you used felt so natural that I could easily have believed it to be a human character, which shows how well you captured the character of the streetlight (which, to be honest, feels a little strange to be saying :P).
I really enjoyed the way that you went from revealing what (who?) the narrator was to using their perspective to describe Diagon Alley, because of what they can see. You tied that in with why the post wants to fly so well, because of his constant view of Quality Quidditch Supplies - and then he gets his own taste of flying and Quidditch when the Bludger escapes from the shop.
My favourite thing about this story was probably the way that you managed to create a really individual voice for the lamppost, and the abbreviations you used so that he was talking really colloquially - the way he'd hear people talking all around him to friends and family. I thought that really helped to build up your characterisation.
The ending was both cute and sad at the same time, but I really enjoyed it, and the way that you managed to tie the whole piece together so well. This was a really original story!
Haha, I wrote several 'items as characters' this year. For some reason, I was drawn to them. I know this isn't a normal thing to do, which is why I wrote it so transparently. No one really has a clear idea of what a lamppost voice is supposed to sound like, but Kevin did a great job of it. The link got destroyed, but I think it was back in March when he read it on YouTube. So cool!
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Hello! Here for our swap! :)
I really didn't know what to pick, so I decided to go for this story, since it looked so lonely...
And I'm happy I did, because this is such a unique and creative idea. I've never written anything from the POV of an inanimated object, so I think it was such an interesting perspective. Also, I think that a lamp post which wants to learn to fly is just so cute. I don't know, it seems such a naive and sort of childish thought, and I love anything naive and childish... :P
I really enjoyed the description at the beginning, and how the lamp compared its light to the sun. And I loved how it sort of just want people to notice it, to give it some attention. It's cute. (Did I already say that?)
The little episode when the Chudley Cannons accidentally throw a Bludger to the lamp and break it is so funny. Well, it's sort of sad, but the outcome, and how the lamp post "reacts" to the Keeper removing the Bludger, is so nice, and I love that it thought it had caught the Bludger that night and that it could be a good Keeper. :) It's actually a bit sad, because there is still this loneliness behind it all. But the lamp post did get its moment of glory in a way. Or at least so it thinks, but that's what matters. ;)
This was such a cute little piece and so creative and I had fun reading it! Thank you for the swap! :)
Lots of love,
Thanks for stopping by. This was a quiry little thing I wrote for a challenge on another site. We had to write three stories of varying lengths within a two-week deadline, so there wasn't all that much time to sit around and think about it. This one had a max of 500 words, and the prompt I chose was "Diagon Alley", one of my favorite places. I wrote a piece about the Hogwarts Express once... that was... interesting... and I think this one came out better than that one had. Whew!
I'm not sure how 'mature' an inanimate object would be if it were sentient. I mean, it depends on the location and what happens around it. A lamppost sees an awful lot of things pass it by, snippets of the world, so I'd imagine that it wouldn't have all that much context for the befores and afters of things. And this guy here, he has a job to do, and yeah, he's a bit lonely.
Thanks for reading!