Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 12 Jun 2018 09:12 AM · [Report This]
Story:שיבה (shiva) Chapter: שיבה (shiva)


Hey Emma,


I'm here to review for my 'new beginnings' challenge, I'm a bit later than I thought I might be getting to this so I'm sorry! I've read the prequel to this to get a bit more context to enjoy this story!


So, I love the concept of Jewish Hermione. I think it's so interesting that you've brought your own culture into your stories. I really enjoyed this piece and the other piece because I felt that I was also learning something new and getting a bit more educated. You do a great job at having handy little glossary at the top so those less familiar with some of the Jewish terms. It's something that makes your writing unique. 


I thought this is so emotional, I thought Hermione's thought progress was brilliantly done in this story. I thought you captured all her thoughts in such a realistic way. her worry about their 'new life' and their reactions. I thought it was very in line with Hermione as a canon character as I imagine she's quite a bit 'worrier/over thinker'. My favourite things is probably how she recounts the memory of going for ice-cream after she got into the grammar school and how happy she was. I can totally imagine this happening and how her life must have changed so much in that time.


I thought the use of getting her parents back with a unique cultural element is a great use of the theme of the challenge. I like that it's almost getting a 'second chance' type of beginning and it was super sweet ending. 


Thanks for entering my challenge!


- Abbi xo 


Name: StarFeather (Signed) · Date: 26 Mar 2018 06:05 AM · [Report This]
Story:שיבה (shiva) Chapter: שיבה (shiva)

Hi, I came from the forums, the Review Tag thread.

It's impressive that you wrote the very moment Hermione's parents' memories came back in five years. I guess how hard time Hermione had spent. 

She must be worried so much when she was waiting for the moment seeing the purple tinge on their faces wondering if the tea  she brew for three months (what a long period! I feel for her.). 


Wait, "As she Obliviated them after the Quidditch World Cup back in '94," does it mean Hermione in your story cast Obliviating Charm right after the book 4? I was a little confused, I thought the story began right after the book 7, after Harry beat Voldemort. 


This part is very intriguing: Throughout their drink, Rabbi Goldstein made small talk about their work, the fake conference, asked if they knew various Australian Jews. When Rabbi Goldstein discovered they had a friend in common, he lit up, delighted, even though this was all fake, it was all false and they were just waiting for--


I missed something here? or is this a sequel to your other stories? I expect much more information coming.  :D





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