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Originally left on 03/07/2018
I’ll admit, I was worried this was going to be a divorced child cliche story when I first started but I was SO WRONG! I’m a a child of divorce and relate so well to Carson’s relationships with her Dad and Stepmom. The dynamics between everyone are realistic and believable. This is a great story!
The line of George offering Fred as a son in law had me crying from laughter! It’s so in character for him!
Can’t wait for the next one! I’m hooked!
Author's Response: Thank you; I'm glad you like it! Carson's relationship with her Dad and Alicia is one of my favorite to write and I've definitely tried to make sure that relationship is realistic but also show how special and different it is from some other parental relationships due to how she grew up with them. Thanks for reviewing! I hope you continue to enjoy!
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Originally left on 02/27/2018
I LOVE THIS STORY.
One I’m on house #10 and dad’s on wife #3 (and hopefully still counting) so I identify with this pretty hardcore lol, but also you’ve got a great style! I can’t wait to see what you do with this story, and with Carson!!
Abby Rose
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! Oh my gosh, I can't imagine, but you will definitely continue to relate with Carson as we go on. Thanks for reviewing and I hope you continue to enjoy!
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Originally left on 02/25/2018
Loving this already! You’re a great writer! Looking forward to future chapters :)
Author's Response: Aw, I'm glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing; I hope you continue to enjoy!
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Originally left on 02/25/2018
Hi!! Just wanted to pop into your reviews and tell you that I really like this story thus far. Carson's got a ton of personality and is so fun to read. I can't wait to get to know James and Fred a little better - which I'm assuming will happen in the next couple of chapters! Can't wait for the next update!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Carson is a blast to write so I'm glad she's as much fun to read! We will definitely get to know the boys a bit more soon, so look out for that! Thanks for reviewing!
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Originally left on 02/25/2018
I love this story! You write so well and I find myself at the end of each chapter too quickly! I love everything about Carson’s relationship with Oliver and Alicia. Can’t wait to see what Hogwarts brings!! Looking forward to the next one!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! Carson is a blast to write and so is her relationship with Oliver and Alicia, so I'm happy you like it! Thanks for reviewing; I hope you continue to enjoy!
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Originally left on 02/25/2018
Really great chapter! I think Carson is hilarious and her witty personality makes everything fun. Her relationship with her dad is awesome.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you like it! Carson is so fun to write and I'm happy she comes off just as fun! Hope you continue to enjoy!
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Originally left on 02/23/2018
This is so cute! I really love Carson's character, she's such a spitfire. I'm excited for the next chapters; this looks like it's going to be an amusing and fun to read story. Keep up the amazing work :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you like Carson, she's so fun to write! Hope to have next chapter up some time this weekend/early next week. Just making some final edits!
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Originally left on 02/19/2018
Loved it, please! Keep more coming!
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it!
AHHHH ok the end of this was so ridiculously cute (or should I say... adorably cute? ... lol yeah I'll see myself out for that one). Dumb joke aside, I love how cute and comfortable James and Carson are together - it's undoubtedly the beginnings of a really solid relationship.
I'm glad Meg is okay, and it's good that she's starting to recognize that maybe Tim isn't the person she wants to be with long-term (maybe a chance for Freddy to swoop in?). Also, her process of going into a "serious relationship talk" with a clear plan and then just blurting out the first thing that comes to mind and running away is SO. DARN. RELATABLE. OMG.
Also you're totally killing me with the casual references. I honestly have no idea if it was intentional, but that fish tacos comment made me think of that one SNL skit about ordering lobster at a diner?? If you don't know what I'm talking about I highly suggest you look it up because it's delightfully weird.
Anyways, I had fun catching up with this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response:I know exactly what you're talking about! I love that skit (and John Mulaney, he's freaking hilarious!)! But actually, the fish tacos part was inspired by one of my brother's best friends, who LOVES fish tacos and wants to order them anywhere we go, whether it's a diner or somewhere that's like known for fish or seafood. (He left a hilarious Yelp review for a restaurant once talking about how LIT the fish tacos were when we went to Florida two years ago that our families still reference). And we're all like dude, seriously, fish tacos at the diner? So when I saw that SNL skit, I was dying! I agree, it's delightfully weird!
I feel like I've been hinting for a while that something is up with Meg so it's great to get that out there now! She'll definitely have her moments coming up, with the aftermath of her running away.
Glad you enjoyed this one as well! Next one is mostly done so should be up relatively soon-ish! Thanks for the review :)
I have two whole chapters to review!! Aka I definitely need to catch up on this story.
Ok, first things first: the argument between Freddy and James. Perhaps I'm reading too far into it, but I wonder if James is a little jealous and that was part of it?? Given that, you know, James started getting mad at Freddy because he was going easy on Carson. But then again they're teenage boys and tend to randomly get mad about the dumbest things too.
Ah, yes, Friendsgiving. I love Friendsgiving. And it's so delightful with this huge cast of characters. I'm dying picturing the boys in obnoxious patterned suits, and it just totally sounds like something they'd pull.
Loved this chapter!!
Author's Response:In my head, James getting mad at Freddy was a whole combination of things--jealous of how easy Freddy's relationship with Carson is, mad that he's going easy on her (because Freddy's thinking of other things besides Quidditch and feeling totally guilty about Carson's pre-Hogwarts life, even though he had no part in that), mad that he's not taking Quidditch serious enough--and that all culminated in him just going off. Freddy, of course, has no idea that James has all this built up in him, but isn't going to just stand there and take it while James yelling and suddenly they're fighting not fighting about Quidditch but about Christmas and which of Nana Weasley's scones is best because that's how relatives are. But also because teenage boys are dumb, that too definitely.
Glad you enjoyed the chapter (and Friendsgiving, which is always a blast!) Thanks for the review!
-Sarah
Back again!
Can you teach me how to write witty dialogue? Prety please? You are so good at it and my dialogue always feels so boring and forced. Probably because I'm a painful introvert in real life and I hate talking to people (only half kidding). Hehe. Seriously, though, I love the banter. Carson is hilarious and I'm so glad that she's making friends at Hogwarts.
Speaking of which, it's commendable how you can handle so many characters in one scene and still manage to make them each have their own unique personality. I am very envious of that skill as well.
So Carson is at Hogwarts now. I am ready for the drama that is sure to ensue! I wonder what path she will take. Will she be a good girl at Hogwarts? Will see get into trouble? Will she join Quidditch? I hope she joins Quidditch--it's in her blood! Is Freddy on the Quidditch team? If he is, then she absolutely has to join. I love their friendship. It's adorable.
I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response:I'll teach you witty dialogue if you teach me how you to write description and emotion! Haha the banter is so fun between Carson and her friends so I'm glad you've enjoyed it so far! More to come for sure! I hope you enjoy Carson just as much at Hogwarts with all kinds of new fun! Freddy and Carson's friendship is so adorable and I love writing it so you can definitely look for more of that! Glad you enjoyed and thanks for reading again!
-Sarah
Dawww…. I wanted to see George show up with a completely inappropriate cake. I’m a big fan of cake, and doubly so if it’s a work of art.
“Keep your pseudo-alcoholism away from my other kids, alright?”
Not sure she will be able to comply, but it’s a nice thought. I love how the dialogue showcases the easy relationship between this girl and her dad. Good stuff!
And uh oh, what did fourteen’s letter have in it to bother her so much??
“Yes!” Dad fist pumps as Professor Longbottom removes the hat from my head.
Ah, that was really cool that we got to see a private sorting ceremony. How cool was that?? Really cool. Let me tell you.
I liked coming back to this story and seeing all of these characters being comfortable with each other. You built up such a nice sense of family with Carson and her crew, and it was fun to see, in a lighthearted way, the differences between Carson’s dad’s life, and her mother’s. I can see why she’s shrugged off the mom. I hope she’s able to make more friends once she gets to Hogwarts. I thought it was funny that she asked to change houses once she found out that Fred and James were in Gryffindor. Hahahaha! I bet she’ll give them a run for their money.
Fun fun fun!
Pix
Author's Response:Haha Alicia knows better than to let George show up with a cake. There were children there! Who knows what he would have come with? When I pictured her sorting, I went back and forth about how it would happen. We never saw a transfer in the books, obviously, but I'm sure they'd happen? In the end, I went with this, and I was happy with how it came out. Glad you liked it! You're the second person to bring up that last line recently and I'd totally forgotten about it until now. She'll defintiely keep them on their toes!
I'm glad you enjoy her new crew! Even without meeting her mom, you can definitely see the difference bettwen her life with dad and her life with mom, and how much happier she is here. She's got a few friends already and some more to come. Hogwarts next chapter, hope you enjoy! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
-Sarah
Hi! TAG! You’re it! I haven’t gotten to this story yet??? Whyever not??
Anyway, I’m here now.
First off, I like the name of your main character. You pull us right in with this bouncing thing, and then hit us in the face with how unfair life has been to her. It doesn’t get her down, though. She’s still living through it, and it seems that at the moment, she’s with the parent who “gets” her. All is good, and I can tell that Oliver has done his best with her. They seem to have an okay relationship. Nice.
It was a nice touch that they redecorated for her before she came. That’s definitely one way to win your way into a teen’s heart. :)
The practice session was fun. I especially loved this line:
“What a nice, polite group of young men you have here,”
Haha. I wonder how much trouble she’s going to cause in the future. Your lighthearted style makes this piece an enjoyable read. I like that she now has a friend, and things can move forward.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Pix
Author's Response:Hi! Glad you enjoyed it so far! Carson is definitely the type to just keep going but living with the parent who "gets" her will be a nice change. She and Oliver have a pretty unique relationship since she's spent so much time bouncing between him and her mom but they make it work! I hope you continue to enjoy! Thanks for playing tag and reading/reviewing!
-Sarah
Hey Sarah!
I'm here for gryffie tag - are you sick of me yet!?
So I loved this chapter, I thought it was awesome to get into the story more and have her at Hogwarts. The first section is hilarious, the mean girls reference was spot on too! (loveeee that movie!). I thought all of that as with Carson's family life is adorable!
It was really good to see Carson's interaction with characters of her own age. She does work really well with a range of characters. I thought you had some great dialogue in there which created some great banter and the dynamic between the boys' friendship was great. Carson seems to fit in nicely. The friendships with the boys already feels very natural.
I thought the introduction of Meg was the star of this chapter. I thought you did a great job at describing her. I was honestly expecting her to be Dominque was I was quite surprised that you brought in another OC to be one of Carson's friends but I really like that. I think the introduction of Meg also developed Carson's character a bit more and flesh out her relationship with her mother when she said '. In short, she looks like the daughter my mother always wanted.' - ouch! that's tough but I'm glad that Carson views Meg as a friend! Meg is a hit with me so far!
I can't wait to see all of these relationships developed because they are all so promising and interesting.
- Abbi xo
Author's Response:Abbi! Hi again, never sick of you! It was so fun to finally bring in people Carson's age and have her meet other people besides James and Fred. The boys do have this great dynamic and I'm glad you think she fits in nicely.
Meg is such a great character and I'm glad you like her already! Her introduction definitely shows some more of the deeper issues Carson has with her mom and goes to show you can't judge a book by their cover. Meg's personality wins her over fairly quickly. Thanks for coming out again to read and review. Hope you continue to enjoy!
-Sarah
The Gryffie Review Tag gave me an excuse to come back and read another chapter. And it's just as delightful as the first!
I am officially obsessed with Carson. She is hilarious and so well developed. That she calls her stepfathers by number is so comical, but also sad. It gives good insight into why she is so sarcastic and snarky--she's probably harboring a lot of hurt from living in a home where her mother was clearly unstable and didn't pay Carson a lot of attention. I'm really glad that she's in Gryffindor now; I had a feeling she would be. Her comment at the end was perfect, though. Gave me a good chuckle.
Carson's relationship with her dad continues to amuse me. I love that Carson is somehow in charge, but not. I hope that makes sense. Like, she's used to living one way, so she brings those habits with her (like drinking in front of company), but she doesn't entirely disrespect her dad for trying to make her more respectable. It's endearing.
Also, I SMELL ROMANCE. The way she describes James, it's clear she thinks he's a BABE and I can't wait to see them all in the same House together at Hogwarts. Oh, the escapades! The drama! The hilarity!
Fantastic chapter, my dear. Your writing is so easy to fall into. I can't wait to come back for more!
Author's Response:Aww, thank you! Carson is such a blast to write and I'm glad that it shows! Her relationship with Oliver is definitely unique and I totally get what you mean by saying she's in charge but not. She's defintely got him wrapped around her finger!
No doubts our girl would be a Gryffindor. I'd forgotten about that last line until you mentioned it! Classic little bit of Carson sass, but as Neville said, she's got a few friends around, so she'll fit in alright once they start Hogwarts! I hope you continue to enjoy Carson and her wit and interactions as we continue!
Thanks for coming out to read and review!
-Sarah
Hi! I came here from Gryffindor Review Tag.
It's a heartwarming family and relatives gathering. It's great to see Harry and Ginny with James from their young relative's POV. Uncle George and Fred together and the other families, it must have been brigtly noisy with liquors, but fun!
It's unique that you expressed Carson's characteristic like she doesn't care her complicated family history or her stepfather, tells her other relatives and family about them comically. I guess she has some struggles to accept them all but she doesn't show them at all.
The most highlight of this chapter is the sorting house scene. I like the conversation between the Sorting Hat and Carson. "Certainly witty enough for Ravenclaw", I agree with the Sorting Hat.
I feel that from the bright tone dialogues. She is so talkative, which gives us impression that she has a lot of wits. I knew that she would be sorted into Gryffindor finally just like her father, yes, Oliver Wood's daughter is no exception. :)
I can't wait to see how she will interact with James at Hogwarts. I reckon Quidditch will be involved in the process, I'm sure.
K
K
Author's Response:Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it! It's kind of fun to write about all the adults and canon characters form the young kinds POV; it's such a cool take to see them from! Obvioulsy we're getting mostly Carson's take on Oliver in this, but I'm glad you you liked seeing Harry, Ginny, and George with James and Fred. I think that's defintiely Carson's personality, to hide those inner feelings and struggles with humor on the surface and I think that's definitely where some of her wit comes in. The Sorting Hat is right; she's definitely got the wit for Ravenclaw, but I don't think ther was any doubt she'd be a Gryffindor like her dad!
Thanks for coming out to read and review!
-Sarah
Hey Sarah,
I'm here for Gryffie review tag. yay. :)
So I really liked this chapter, you have some really great family interaction and again I found it so light and fun. I'm so pleased that you keep the family theme going here and most of your dialogue was based around that. I thought the section when she is talking with Parker and Erin is so cute. I think you wrote their character's ages really well. Lovely characterisation, I thought the little details like Erin trying to dress like Carson was really nice because it just feels like realistic and like something siblings do.
I feel bad for Carson when she is talking about all her stepfathers, she has had a lot of them! she's coping pretty well considering how much change that was when she was younger. Oliver and Alicia seem way more stable. Again, the Carson/Oliver relationship is great because they are obviously close and almost got a friendship going too. It is a very layered and complicated dynamic already. You've managed to develop it a lot in two chapters.
I thought the introduction of James was good, I enjoyed that it was quite low key too. She didn't have tons of interaction with him but it's a good base for future chapters without going to over the top. I think you got a great balance of this. I love how light, fun this story is but seems unique for a very trusted formula. Great job!
- Abbi xo
ps. never indoubt that my girl, Carson was a lion ;)
Author's Response:Hello again!
Thanks again for coming out to review! The family theme is definitely going to be a recurrent one and I love building and exploring those relationships. It's been super fun working with her siblings in these and I'm super happy you think I wrote their ages well because that's defintiely something I was worried about (it's been a while since I was around kids that young haha)! Oliver and Carson's relationship is definiely unique but that's one of the things I love most about it. It definitely stems from her upbriniging but really does allow for a bit of a friendship.
I'm glad you've enjoyed this again and hope you continue to come back and keep enjoying it! I loved your little ps at the end of this review; it definitely made me smile! No doubt our girl is a lion- we'll see her in action there shortly!
Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Sarah
Hey Sarah,
I'm here for review tag!
So I haven't read anything by you yet so it's a treat to be here! I was a bit worried about the length of this chapter because it's very long for the first chapter. I didn't need to worry because your writing style is so light, it didn't feel long or an information dump. Everything flowed so nicely, I really liked how much focus that you have on the set up of her family.
I love the dynamic between Oliver and Carson like when he is being protective of her introducing her to Brett, you've created this blended family really nicely. I'm glad that Carson gets on with her family that she is now staying with. I think that's a bit different as a lot of the time new American girls hates England and stuff. I find Carson to be very fun while not being too bratty. I think that's great because it's another trope that you've avoided.
I can't wait to see where you are going to take Carson's character, I hope you continue to have development of those family ties even when she is off to Hogwarts. I think you've done a great job at introducing Carson to the audience and she's very likeable from the start and set up her issues going forward! :)
- Abbi xo
Author's Response:Hi Abbi!
Thanks for coming to review! I'm glad you liked the first chapter and enjoyed the set up and flow. Carson's relationship with Oliver and the rest of the family is definitely something different but it's been super fun to explore and I'm glad that both she and that dynamic come out that way! I saw you reviewed chapter 2 as well and I'm planning on responding to that next!
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Sarah
Hi! I came from Gryffindor Review Tag. Such a short period for nomination on the forums, isn't it? I'll do my best.
Okay, your story is honestly, very interesting. I've never encoutered the fic about Oliver's daughter. Iit's rare to happen to read Oliver centric stories, so I really enjoyed chapter 1. The episode how he got the first life partner is interesting, sadly, he had to say good-bye to her. Then he could meet Alicia, it's great. They have already had three kids and Carson seems to get along with them very well.
How she met Uncle George and his son Fred is a good start. I see the face of James Potter (?) on TDA artist's banner. I expect her new life at Hogwarts, (maybe the last year for Fred and James?) will be full of adventure including Quidditch (I love stories based on Quidditch!) plus, perhaps romance?
This is a very promising story!
K
Author's Response:Thanks, glad you enjoyed it so far! I agree it's rare to read Oliver centric stories and it's been fun to explore this family dynamic. There's definitely a lot of Quidditch to come so I hope you come back and enjoy the rest as well! Thanks for coming out and reviewing!
Sarah
Hi Sarah! Here for the Gryffie review tag (and also because I was super excited to see an update on this story and prob would've reviewed it anyways lol).
Ok, so this isn't something I've actually addressed before in earlier chapter reviews, but I really love how you've made Carson both a sporty person and someone who can be girly at times (i.e. the shampoo line in this chapter). Too often it feels like more athletic characters are only written as girls who don't care about their appearance, but it's obviously totally possible to be both things at once - so yeah, anyways, I really love that about Carson.
ALSO. The amount of work that must've gone into coming up with all these Quidditch stats and names is impressive, plus you did an awesome job of incorporating explanations about what all of the numbers mean without it feeling too forced. And I wish Carson's date with Drew had gone a bit better, because he seems like a nice kid, but yeah, def not the right guy for Carson. I also loved that she turned down Tuesday night because of Taco Tuesdays with James - just a little detail but I feel like it's an important one because it shows how much she values those nights? Anyways, loved this chapter and can't wait for the next one!!
Author's Response:Haha thank you! I borrowed A LOT from hockey and baseball to help make up Quidditch stats but I'm so glad everything makes sense (since they'll obviously play in a lot)! I'd actually always pictured her date with Drew going well until it came up and I realized that she would tear him apart? Carson is many things, but unapologetically herself is definitely one of them. I love that you caught her turning down Tuesday! She obviously couldn't give up Taco Tuesday. They're definitely important to her, even if she still isn't quite sure just how important. Thanks for reviewing; glad you enjoyed!
Here for the Review Tag and SO glad I stumbled upon this story.
I am incredibly envious of your writing style. It’s so light and easy and I just lost myself in it. This is an incredible first chapter, too. It has the perfect balance of backstory and action. Also, you seem to know a lot about Quidditch because the details are perfect.
Now I’m rambling.
I really like Carson. She’s a great narrator. She has a total teenage voice, but it’s not over-the-top. She’s endearing and funny and her backstory is intriguing. Sounds like her life in America was less than ideal, with a revolving door of stepfathers. I already love her teasing relationship with Oliver, so I can tell she’s better off with him.
Her new friendship with Freddy is killing me! I love it! I love that she is in charge of every situation. She always seems to get her way, but not by manipulating people. Just by being charming. And nosy. ;)
I am very curious what House she’ll be in at Hogwarts. I’m leaning towards Gryffindor. Of course, I am biased. But she seems to the be the brave type.
Thos is such an addicting story. I will be back!
Author's Response:Thank you! That was such a sweet compliment and really means a lot! Carson is definitely interesting and a lot of fun to write! I love that you described her as charming and nosy; that's her at her peak haha! I'm glad you liked the story and hope you continue to enjoy whenever you have time to come back!
Thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Oliver and Alicia are too funny.
Author's Response:Thank you! Oliver and Alicia are so fun to write. I wish they could pop in more often, but you know, school and such. Thanks for reviewing, glad you enjoyed!
I seriously love Oliver so much, and I think it's really interesting to see his relationship with Carson contrasted with his relationship with his parents. And Funeral Bingo makes me think of that one scene in Brooklyn 99 where they do Thanksgiving Bingo (which I literally watched like 24 hours ago so that was good timing lol). And as always, Carson and James just mesh so well together and I love that he knew exactly what she needed in that setting. Anyways, great chapter as always!!
Author's Response:I hoonestly forgot about that episode, but such a good one haha! I just knew the three of them would need something to keep them going and what better than a game to push at their compettive sides? I always pictured the basis of Oliver's relationship with Carson to come out of his own relationship with his parents. That no matter what the distance or whatever was happening between him and her mom, he wouldn't let it affect his own relationship with Carson and even if he didn't know exactly what he needed to do, he'd figure it out, but anything was better than doing what his parents would have done. Thanks for reviewing, glad you enjoyed!
Oh please write soon...grear chap :)
Author's Response:Glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing!
I've gotten so behind on reviewing this story, ahh! Anyways, fab chapter, as always. I just love all the little things in this chapter - Carson's friends making shirts that spell out CDUB, her and James getting nerdy about Quidditch stats, and the fact that the wizard version of rock paper scissors is cloak stone wand because omg that makes so much sense. But now I'm just trying to figure out what the heck happened at the end there - gotta love a good cliffhanger, haha. Can't wait for chapter 11!
Author's Response:Haha I was definitley trying to figure out what the wizard version of rock paper scissors would be and then that suddenly came to me! Carson and James are going to get so much nerdier about Quidditch stats; it's going to be fun! Glad you liked it; Thanks for reviewing!
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