I'm here for a review for the Magical Menagerie review event on the forums and also for the Gryffindor Red vs Gold Review Battle for January! I happened across your story as I was searching for something to read! The concept sounded interesting, so here I am!
Wow. This was a very depressing read. I mean at first I didn't feel all that sympathetic. The main character came across as quite spoiled in the beginning. The way she responded to some of the financial decisions her parents made was quite insensitive, but then when they really do lose everything, she becomes quite sympathetic. It's hard to imagine going from wealthy to making your own clothing out of flour sacks.
It's nice that she sort of finds some comfort at the Salem Witches Institute. I imagine it would provide a much needed escape from reality for the main character, just as Hogwarts does for Harry. It must be such a drastic change from the drab, dreary world surrounding her as a Muggle.
It was sad that she got ripped away from Salem just as she started to settle in and regain some happiness in her life. Seeing her crying in a dirty alleyway was pretty heartwrenching. I hope that she finds her way to Hogwarts and maybe is able to build some semblance of a life there.
Again, this was sad, but good work on this!
I just wanted to come by and say congratulations for winning 'Puff of the Month in April! You totally deserve it! I validated this story when you first posted it and noticed it hadn't received any reviews, so I definitely wanted to come by and let you know what I thought!
I think you really took an important topic here—poverty—and integrated it into the Harry Potter universe very well. It's so interesting to consider historical events as they relate to canon. (For example, on a completely different mood, I saw something once that mentioned that the Spice Girls would've been popular in the Muggle world while Harry was at school, haha.)
Anyhow, so I really enjoyed considering the magical world in relation to the stock market crash and how that would affect Muggleborns (and perhaps even the magical economy as well).
I also want to compliment you on the depth of feeling in this story. You captured the emotions of your OC so well. Change and loss are even more difficult for children to experience, especially when they're due to bigger political or social causes that aren't easy to explain. But you showed a young person with so much depth and hurt, and it was hard to think about a child with that much weight on her.
Finally, I think you integrated the past scenes and the present very well. The past perfectly complemented and explained everything that Edith had lost without being too explicit. Those moments were well chosen and resonant.
Overall, this was really lovely! Great job!