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Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 17 Jul 2019 05:33 PM · [Report This]
Story:Draw, O Coward Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi Gina!

So, I had this story listed in a document I have of my Favorites from HPFF. I finally made it back here to read and review, and I've reminded myself just why this story made that list.

Gina, this is amazing. I can't imagine being able to write a story that works both forwards and backwards. The way you executed this is so impressive. You were able to show so many aspects of this scene in reading it one way, then so many more in reading it the other. Absolutely amazing.

The characterization of Hermione and Draco (?) is fabulous. Hermione's desire to trust and believe in someone is so essential to who she is, and she doesn't even raise her wand to protect herself. Because that would be showing doubt in Draco, and she doesn't doubt him. Stunning. And then his own misgivings about his mission. His fears, worries, and trauma are all on display in stunning prose. Well done.

The writing itself is so solid in this story. It shows such a mastery of language. It's succinct, for the challenge it was written for, but not sparse. And you use words in creative combinations to fit the forward/backward structure.

Wonderful job setting the scene here and showing the emotions and characterization in so few words. I'm so impressed, and I'm so happy I was able to find this story again to read and review.

Well done!

Best,
Emily



Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 22 Jan 2019 05:58 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Draw, O Coward Chapter: Chapter 1

Hey Gina!

 

Just stopping by to leave you another Magical Menagerie and Gryffindor Red vs. Gold Review for January 2019! I love stories told with unconventional methods, so I thought I'd stop by and check this out!

 

This is so cool how this story is told forwards and backwards. Each direction sort of changes the story. In the forward version, we see a main character who has to commit a murder but doesn't seem very resolved to do so. He seems to be struggling with it in fact. In the backwards version, he seems much more sure of himself and steps forward to kill her without a whole lot of hesitation. Very interesting.

 

One thing that I really appreciate here is how smooth the story reads in each direction. I've read a couple of these forwards/backwards stories and even written one myself, so I know that isn't an easy task. A lot of the time, people jam in weird sentences to try and make both narratives fit. With this, everything fits. Each line is necessary in both directions.

 

Also, kudos on using such a small word count so effectively. Sometimes small word counts can make stories come across as lacking detail, but this was a very rich, complex story. I didn't feel like it was missing anything at all.

 

Really good work on this! I'd love to see you attempt another story in similar fashion.

 

~Kaitlin



Author's Response:

Thanks for stopping by, Kaitlin! I'm so grateful for your support. Your review makes me want to attempt another story like this. I wrote this for a 500-word challenge way back when and I think it was the short word count that made me feel like I could attempt something so crazy as a back-and-forth story. ;) It was a lot of fun (albeit challenging).



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