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20th August 2015:
Hi, Gina. Me again.
I had time to read for a while so I stopped by.
Then I found this A-to-Z challenge in your works, I jumped in immediately. I’ve been very curious what theme you’ll write about. Then I found you set the story at the Psychiatric Institute and you named it after Felix Summerbee, who invented Cheering Charms, it’s a good idea.
You set Lucy, a daughter of Percy as a main character who needs hospital treatment. The first sentences are wrapped in gloomy mood and we worry that she nearly committed suicide. Faultless students sometimes fall into this kind of predicament you described. I guess life was so hard for her to carry on. You expressed her feeling and people around her through alphabetization, it’s a quite difficult theme but you accomplished it. I thought the story was ended at the last paragraph beginning with Z but you restarted going back to the first alphabet, adding the process of her getting out of Summerbee, the pleasure to be free and the sorrow of parting, the contrast is awesome!
In the first half, we notice Norah Vane has a special feeling for Lucy. And then you wrote about her emotion straight at the end, which is also cool!
Here for gryffie review tag! I thought this piece was interesting, we see a lot of people write about mental illness but really you did a twist on it, it really worked for me. I thought the first line was very gripping as it's such a powerful statement which in the second line you flip it on it's head.
I think Lucy's journey here is so important as something worth writing about. Summerbee is her extreme version of growing up and realising that things aren't as they seem. I love how we see Norah through Lucy's eyes, how someone that seems so 'normal' can be at Summerbee. I thought the connection that you captured between them was great, it both dramatic and natural. It was like this awakening. This one-shot as a questioning identity honestly works.
I like the little details about her family here, like Hugo saving up for the tickets to the World Cup. it's like nothing in her world is really what she thought it was. I thought the scene with Norah in her bed was really turning point for Lucy. It was powerful but understated, it makes me really want to know more about Norah and her story. I hope that she finds some peace.
I also wanted to say well done for completing challenge with restrictions of the wording, I thought the piece flowed beautifully and smoothly done. I loved the detail about the title being inspired by creator of Cheering Charms too! you obviously put a lot of the thought into your writing.
- Abbi xo
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Greetings to you, lovely Gina,
I have come here to read of Summerbee.
I trust you fared well in the challenge arena,
With this entry of the young Lucy.
I'll admit first I was sad,
To hear of Lucy Weasley's pain.
And then of course I was glad,
She found a friend in Norah Vane.
I thought you captured well,
Life in such a place.
On times like this have some had to dwell,
But I think you handled it with grace.
And of course your style is perfect,
As your writing always is.
It is why this story was my pick,
One of the best I've read, indeed ‘tis.
If someone asks for a story of A-Z,
I will tell them of this one right off the bat.
And of course they will believe me,
For I am the Sorting Hat.
This was??? such a lovely story??? And you handled such sensitive materials so gracefully and delicately?? I really really enjoyed this and it made me feel very peaceful, (as someone with some Mental Health Stuff) that you didn't shy away from the topic, but also didn't over-describe or go into anything gratuitous. So! Thank you for writing this, it was a real pleasure to read and I'll have to check out anything else you've got up!
Thank you so very much! I, too, deal with Mental Health Stuff, so it was important for me to write this story accurately and sensitively. Glad to hear it was an enjoyable experience reading this piece. :)