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Wow, you know, I don’t think I’ve ever seen a fic about a character with epilepsy, so I thought that was really cool that you broached this topic and handled it so well and tactfully. At first, throughout the first chapter, I only thought James was just being unnecessarily bitter and grumpy about the Quidditch for way too long, but I had a lot more patience for him once I realized there was more to it than that. You wrote the process of the seizure really well, too, and how much it took out of him and the panicked reactions of his family, it feels like a very accurate representation (at least I imagine so).
Another thing that is really interesting about this fic so far is the way you’ve blended the magical and Muggle world in terms of the hospital, like, how common is epilepsy among wizarding folk? The things that the Healer suggests as possible causes are mostly things that Muggles would suggest too, so at least there doesn’t seem to be a special form of epilepsy that wizards get, but anyhow I’m really curious to see how that unfolds and whether there’s something special that magic can do for treatment/medication or seizure prevention.
This is such an interesting and original story idea so far, I really like it! Good luck in the Chalices!
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Poor James! That is scary stuff!
Giving Ginny a phone is a nice idea, I guess there aren't always fireplaces around for wizards to speak face to face, a la Sirius.
The emotions in this chapter just jump right off the page, and it's heartbreaking to see the Potter's dealing with something so shocking completely out of the blue.
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Hello there, RoxiMalfoy from the forums here! First of all, let me just say that I am super impressed with how much you have so obviously put into this story!! I seen that there was a sequel to this Novel as well, and just knowing that you already have so much planned/written out for this world that you have created for your next-gen characters makes me SO excited to read on! I feel like this epic adventure is about to unfold, and I cannot wait to see what happens next! ;)
Your descriptions of all the Potter children were great, but I think Lilly was my favorite. Your attention to detail when you were describing her looks and personality were fantastic!! I especially like the bit that you included about her being so straightforward. I myself have been told by others that I can be too honest at times as well, so I feel like I can relate to this Lilly a bit in that aspect. The boy's were great here too. You have captured their sibling bond extremely well here, especially when they were arguing in the beginning over who was better at Quidditch. I couldn't help but to laugh when James kept hitting Al with his broom, haha!! He really is a sore loser, isn't he?
And there's Harry and Ginny! I never thought of them spending so much time away from home, but I suppose now that the kids are older, I guess they would spend more time getting more involved in their careers. It's a new perspective on them, different from anything else I've read, but I like it so far. It definitely sets the mood, because you can tell right away that the empty household has a negative effect on the kids. Your imagery in that scene was really good, and it continued to grow throughout the chapter as well. I really loved the part where you talked about Ginny, and how well she knew each one of her children individually. She reminded me of Molly in that paragraph, and it made me smile. =)
And then we got to see a little bit of James' rebellious side. While his response to his mother did bother me a bit, I do find it rather believable that Harry & Ginny would have a difficult time disciplining their children. Although, I am glad that they do all seem to be well-behaved for the most part. It wasn't like James to normally disrespect his mother, he just wasn't feeling well and he was in a bad mood, like he said. And given what happened next, I can hardly say that I blame him. Poor James!! GAH!!! That ending, holy cow!!! Talk about a cliffhanger!! Now I definitely HAVE to read more to see what happens next. Regardless of whether the flag is hidden in here or not, I shall be adding this one to my favorites list, and coming back to read more as soon as my crazy schedule will allow it, I promise!!
I really loved this; from beginning to end! Your attention to detail, and your descriptions of everything were just amazing!! I was able to visualize nearly everything throughout this entire piece. And the little table with everyone's name, age, and corresponding Hogwarts House that you included at the end was so nice and informative. You have seriously put a lot of time and thought into this, and it shows!! I can tell that this a lot has gone into this story, and I am really excited to find out where it goes next!! Thanks for such a great read!!
NOTE: OMG, yaayyy!!! I am SO HAPPY to see one of my most favorite fanfic stories EVER posted here on HPFT!! You have no idea how happy seeing this story show up in the Recently Added list has made me!!! I've already added this to my favorites list! I can’t wait to start reading it again!! ❤
Ahh! Yay, thank you so much!! It means so much to me that you found this story here and are so excited for it! Yeah, after I read that HPFF was closing, I knew I had to find an alternate method to post my stories. I can't believe I didn't find HPFT sooner! But thank you so much for the review, really. And I know it was carried over from HPFF, but I'm doing some editing and revamping as I post it here, so this is still incredibly helpful feedback for me to read. Thanks so much again! Looking forward to hearing from you again! :) <3
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Hello hello! Lovely to meet you! I'm here for the Chalice Review Spree! It amazes me I hadn't discovered you before now, because your work is so great.
The brotherly relationship between James and Albus is perfect. I love your interpretations of the next gen characters, too. Even though the way you've described them is a bit of a shopping list (and I have a terrible memory) I'm sure over the course of the story their personalities will shine through through their actions :)
And what a cliff hanger! I know what has happened to him because of your author note, but ahh!
Hi!!! Thank you so much for carrying over your review. That means a lot to me that you took the time to do that. And thank you for the feedback! It's all very helpful! Hope to see you back again. Thank you so much!