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Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 08 May 2018 12:31 PM · [Report This]
Story:Decay Theory Chapter: Chapter 1

 

Hey hey, I wanted to come by and read the other entries for the 2018 Fic Feud Event, and here I am!  I hope you guys had as much fun writing as I did with my partner.

 

Ok, so the gift SURPRISED me greatly, which is really something. I don't surprise easily.  Well done! I love that Pavarti loved it, and I can't wait to find out WHY her sister would give her something like that.

 

And then things get interesting.  I almost expected Pavarti to get bitten by the spider, and the way my twisted mind works, I half expected someone to die at the end of this chapter.  Padma clearly had something going on with her at the end with that crack in the wall that raises all kinds of questions.

 

Ah, something DID die!  LOL. It was the fire. Haha.  Well, that worked out. I know it wasn't funny, and you wrote it so smoothly, so just excuse my crazy brain.  The camaraderie between the two characters, the sense of family was really well-done. The description of the mantel and the flames, and the realization that there was something there which may not have been there before, was all really well written.  I also loved the humming with Parvati, and how they just had that moment by the fire. So peaceful. I wish that I had more peaceful moments in my life too.

 

Nice start. You incorporated all of the elements really well.  I didn't think anything stuck out of place here. And you set up some interesting things that I'm very curious about.   I can't wait to see what your partner did with the rest of this story!

 

Pix

 



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