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Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 12 Aug 2018 03:46 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breaking point Chapter: Fallout

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Even though I knew that this would happen and this was the form of justice that Bellatrix and the others who tortured the Longbottoms met, there's still something dissatisfying about seeing Bellatrix accept her fate rather than fighting against it.

 

I was so glad to see that not everything went to plan for them, though - and to think that they'd been instrumental in their own downfall, in a way, because they'd been arrogant enough to think that nobody would find them or be able to capture them.  Not allowing themselves to apparate out of the building seems like a gross lack of foresight, and there is something kind of satisfying in that knowledge.

 

I'm still not sure whether or not Crouch is actually really crying and weak in the face of arrest, or if he's trying to play a game.  He's a really intriguing character and I'd love to read more about him in your writing.

 

As much as these four are guilty and deserve to go to prison for what they've done, I don't agree with going to Azkaban without a trial, though I can understand why it came into play.  It's a little ironic that Bellatrix is fine with that situation and law for when her cousin got arrested, and yet when it's her turn she doesn't think it's quite so good an idea.

 

I did spot a typo - in the middle of the chapter you spell Rodolphus's name as "Rudolphus", just the once :)

 

I loved the way that you ended this, though.  You kind of brought the whole story full circle with Bellatrix's determination to serve the Dark Lord and how every thought and action is fixed on him and furthering herself in his service.  It tied up the story really nicely, even if it was annoying to see her react to the situation with some form of dignity, but it fits her character so well, and her belief that the Dark Lord will return and she will serve him once more.

 

Sian :)



Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 12 Aug 2018 03:25 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breaking point Chapter: Broken

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I think you're determined to fully break my heart with this story, Mel, and I'm not sure that I'm really okay with that.

 

I thought that the torture might have ended in the last chapter (stupid of me, wasn't it?) but to see it continued and continued until they reach breaking point is just so horrific.  Bellatrix, Rabastan, Rodolphus, Barty - they're utterly heartless and I struggle to believe that someone could continue to carry out such cruelty to the point that they destroy the person in front of them.  At the same time, though, I know there are, unfortunately, plenty of people in this world like that, and reading about the Death Eaters torturing the Longbottoms makes it easier to believe and process, in a way?

 

There's something wild - almost animalistic - in the way that Bellatrix takes out her emotions and her rage in the form of torturing Frank and Alice.  That fits very well with her character, the volatility and the emotion there - even if she normally masters the emotion rather than displaying it, I suspect that it's most often channelled into fury and she takes it out on other people by casting spells or curses on them.  

 

The contrast between Bellatrix and the other Death Eaters was fascinating in this chapter, as well.  Even though we know that Rabastan and the others are disgusting excuses for humans, Rabastan still points out that both Alice and Frank are at breaking point and there's a suggestion that perhaps they've pushed them too far.  Barty, younger and not in so deep, is even a little shocked by the fact that they've been tortured into insanity.  But Bellatrix sees no issue with it and wants to continue, which elevates her above the others in a way in how heartless and dangerous she is.

 

(On a side note, I wonder whether Barty became a more fervent supporter of Voldemort during his time in Azkaban because of his hatred for his father and because of the memories that he dwelled on there - as I don't imagine this was a particularly happy one - or whether he was just acting particularly well at this point and is letting Bellatrix underestimate him?)

 

Seeing Frank and Alice completely incoherent and struggling to speak or focus on anything was so heartbreaking.  I don't understand how you could do that to someone, and the way that all of their family and friends must have felt when they found out what had happened, and the impact it had on Neville's life, is so horrible.

 

The ending is just as bad - they're consistently evil through this whole story, and it's disgusting that someone would take pleasure in the thought of leaving the two out in a field to be discovered - if they don't die first.  But it's very in character for Bellatrix and the way she thinks about other people.  I really hope that I get to see some form of justice in the next chapter!

 

Sian :)



Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 12 Aug 2018 02:50 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breaking point Chapter: Cruciatus

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Just the very title of this chapter was enough to give me chills, honestly.  I know it's only one word, and I know that I knew what was going to happen in the story, but even so it's just so horrifying to read it and see it happening.  We never meet Frank and Alice Longbottom as the people they were before the torture in the books, but I feel for them just because they're Neville's parents and what happened to them, so this just feels so tragic and heartbreaking to see.

 

Also, it's horrible when I'm glad that the Death Eaters have been thoughtful enough to take the Longbottoms away from their home and to the Malfoys' cellar to torture them, because at least then it's away from their son.  I feel like an awful person for even thinking that.

 

Bellatrix's characterisation is brilliant in this chapter especially.  Her sense of superiority, her enjoyment of cruelty, her determination to get what she wants... It's so chilling to read - I actually had goosebumps as I read this chapter, but it's so well written and depicted so believably.  Each time she sneered at Alice and renewed her determination to try and get the information out of her was another blow to the Longbottoms' and made my heart break a little more for them.

 

The ending, as well.  It just made my skin crawl, it's so horrible.  You've portrayed all these Death Eaters so well - they're truly vile people, with no compassion or anything left except hatred and a lust for power, and they don't care at all who they hurt to get what they want.  In fact, they enjoy it.  Bellatrix "sharing" the Longbottoms and Rabastan licking his lips when she let them join in was just horrifying.  It's such fantastic writing because it has exactly the desired effect, but it's terrible to read about people like that.

 

I'm glad that Bellatrix was on edge because everything seemed too easy at the start of this chapter - I'm looking forward to seeing her get her comeuppance now and some semblance of justice for what she's done to the Longbottom family!

 

Sian :)



Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 12 Aug 2018 02:37 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breaking point Chapter: Information

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Hi again!

 

Ughh, this is so compelling.  It's a testament to your writing skills that I know what's going to happen, and I know it's absolutely horrifying and horrible, and yet I still want to read on and see how you portray it anyway.  The short chapters actually work really well for this story, too, because it's like we're taking steps towards the main event and seeing how detached and methodical Bellatrix and the other Death Eaters are in working towards their aims.  It's so chilling to read, but it's a very effective style of writing.

 

Bellatrix's sense of superiority comes through very clearly in this chapter.  I don't think she'd have included anyone else in her plan - maybe not even her husband - if she'd thought of it before Rodolphus suggested amendments.  The way she treats Barty and thinks of him really emphasises that she thinks she's so much more capable than anyone around her; the only person she considers above her is the Dark Lord.

 

Barty's information was so interesting - I can definitely see why he'd be a valuable asset to the Death Eaters when he's got access to information like that.  The fact that the Aurors are already being trained to deal with a world without Voldemort seems a little short-sighted when they still have to round-up known Death Eaters and will be dealing with similar threats for some time.  But it provides an easy window for Bellatrix and the others to attack.

 

The fact that they discuss the Longbottoms having a young child and then still decide to attack them when they're at home is just so heartbreaking.  I know it's exactly what happened to Harry but having to watch Neville go through the same thing, even if he's too young to remember it properly, would be horrible.  It just brings home how cruel and terrible these people are. 

 

Sian :)



Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 12 Aug 2018 02:16 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breaking point Chapter: Culpability

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Hi Mel!

 

The beginning of this chapter was an interesting change from the end of the last chapter; there was quite a strong contrast between Bellatrix's emotion and despair at learning the news that the Dark Lord has gone, and the determination to go after people and find out who was responsible.  It says quie a lot about how volatile her mindset is (though I don't think Azkaban would have helped that) and what her reactions to events usually are.

 

Bellatrix and Rodolphus's relationship continues to be really interesting.  She's always portrayed as a very brilliant (terrifying, but brilliant) witch, and very powerful, but in this chapter it does seem like more of a partnership.  Bellatrix is more hot-headed while Rodolphus seems more measured and logical, and waits to do things rather than jumping into them head-first.  They seem like a very formidable couple with that combination.

 

I'm not sure if it was intentional or not, but the part when Bellatrix was determined not to mention her sister and Rodolphus decided not to irritate her by mentioning Andromeda either reminded me a lot of Petunia and Vernon talking about Lily.  That kind of humanises Bellatrix in a way - it doesn't make me feel any more sympathetic towards her, but it does make her more relateable to other characters in the series.

 

It was so chilling to read about them planning the attack on the Longbottoms, especially because we know what devastation it caused.  They talk about what they're going to do in such a detached way, as if they have no emotional connection to their actions at all, and it's really sinister to read.  I'm looking forward to the rest of the story, but apprehensive at the same time...

 

Sian :)



Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 12 Aug 2018 11:29 AM · [Report This]
Story:Breaking point Chapter: Devastation

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Hi Mel!

 

How did I not know you'd written this story?  You write this era so well, and I'm fascinated to see your depiction of Bellatrix.  She's terrifying, but she's such an interesting character to read about - and to write about, I imagine.  

 

This was a great first chapter.  The exclamation of "NO!" as the first word really grabbed me and drew me into the story - it fits so well with how dramatic Bellatrix seems to be as a character (I would say emotional, but that's only in certain circumstances, so I'm not sure it always applies) and really jars the reader into paying attention.  It's not the reaction most people would have had to the news of Voldemort's downfall, but for Bellatrix it's the worst possible news she could have heard.

 

The conversation as the two processed the news of what had happened was so interesting to read.  Both of them seem disgusted and upset by what has happened, and it's clear that they're both supporters of the Dark Lord - which ties in with what we know they go on to do to Neville's parents. 

 

But what fascinates me most is their relationship.  I've never been quite sure if it's a marriage of convenience or love, but it's always seemed clear that Bellatrix's chief concern is pleasing the Dark Lord and being second only to him.  I'm not sure if there's any love towards Rodolphus on her part, or from him towards her, but both of them seem to be devoted to the Dark Lord in similar ways.  The fact that Bellatrix's hopes for the future have all been lost with the news that the Dark Lord has gone shows where he is placed compared to Rodolphus, at the very least.

 

The outbreak of emotion at the end was interesting to see - we don't usually get any glimpses of vulnerability from Bellatrix's character, so it was really great to see you explore that side of her, particularly the fact that even her husband was a little surprised that she was showing the emotion and leaning on him for support.  The resolution at the end to find out what had happened and exact revenge is chilling in light of what we know they do after Voldemort is defeated...

 

Sian :)



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