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Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 28 Jan 2019 12:50 PM · [Report This]
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Hi Gina!  Here for RvG and the Magical Menagerie!

 

About three different people have told me that I need to come and read this poem, so I couldn't miss the opportunity.  I've always loved your writing, but I don't think I've ever read any of your original fiction before, and now I'm definitely going to be coming back for more!

 

This was a really beautiful poem.  Sometimes I find freeverse a little jarring with the way that it breaks sentences up, but I think the effect worked really well in this piece; I think you really captured the way that the narrator's thoughts were meandering and darting around to different memories that came to them as they talked.

 

I really like the ambiguous nature of the relationship that's told through this poem.  At first, it seems like the recipient of the letter is someone who's a penpal, but there are certain moments and memories throughout the piece which made me wonder whether the relationship was stronger or meant more; whether it was an absent friend that the narrator was writing to, or someone they'd once had a relationship with.

 

The variety of memories that were shared in this piece were really lovely, and they definitely helped to build up a picture of a shared history and a sense of nostalgia that really made the narrator (and me) smile.  The ending felt poignant, and a little sad - I found myself wondering whether this "penpal" had been simply ignoring the narrator since they went away... or if they actually had a choice about writing in response.  The ambiguity of this made it appear so powerful and effective, and I loved the many interpretations that a reader could take from this.

 

Sian :)



Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 22 Jan 2019 07:04 PM · [Report This]
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Hey there!

 

I'm back for another Magical Menagerie and Gyffindor Red vs. Gold Review Battle January 2019 Review! Again, I'm here to get my poetry fix in. You write such lovely pieces that I just couldn't resist.

 

I see a trend towards freeverse in your poetry so far! That's cool because you write it so well. Sometimes, I've found that freeverse can be choppy or chunky, but yours is so smooth and free flowing. It makes it very easy to read.

 

The subject in this is so lovely and bittersweet. This was clearly a very cherished friend, but it sounds that by the end like that person might've sort have disappeared from your life. The memories are still very fond, but there's a tinge of sadness in the memory of the sticky hands and the way you say you would settle for a letter.

 

As always, your descriptions are so lovely in this. I don't know how you come up with such beautiful ways to describe such normal things, but it's really a gift. In particular, I love the way you compared wispy hair on an older person to your memories of dancing.

 

Another beautiful piece!

 

~Kaitlin



Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 20 Jan 2019 03:52 PM · [Report This]
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Hey Gina,

 

I love this. I thought it was really beautiful, I thought the narrator had this great voice that has a lot of sadness but at the same time that seemed to be so much happiness within those memories. You use such wonderful language that it feels like I've got such a vivid picture of their relationship. All those references which obviously the reader knows about just makes it so personal, those little moments that make up a life as a whole.

 

you've done a great job here, I thought it was so deep. It felt almost like I shouldn't be looking at this because it's too deeply personal. just that longing in the poem. I really want to reach out to the writer to say that I'm coming back and I'll be there for them. It honestly makes me feel like I want to just hold them.

 

this piece was so wonderful because it was so delicate but so vivid. The world needs your writing. honestly. it does. so poignant.

 

congrats on this lovely piece.

 

- Abbi xo

 

For: Magical Menagerie/RvG

 



Name: M C Crocker (Signed) · Date: 03 Dec 2018 02:48 PM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
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This was a lovely piece.  I love how you opted to tell the story of what was happening in the friends absence.  It painted a whole world for me in just a few simple words.  I also love the emotion in this that brings about the familiar memories of friends who are far away.  I love the longing that is found here as the author seeks out to hear back if only briefly from the dearly missed friend.

I really enjoyed this read and again the imagry was sublime.  Thank you for such an elegant read.  Also sorry for the delay in your reviews for winning my challenge.  I hadn't forgotten, life just got busy.



Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 14 May 2018 11:06 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
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The lyrical melancholy in this poem is beautiful. Every image, every word, has a tinge of fondness to it, or a wistfulness, and I can feel it, and I love it. The familiarity you manage to infuse into such a short piece is so marvelous; the speaker obviously knows the implied audience so, so well, and the casual references to names that we as readers may not know but that the speaker’s audience certainly does just makes this poem so much more.

 

If I read this poem in school, it would be one of my favorites. It fits in perfectly with the standard of the published pieces we read, while also having a subtle emotional quality that just draws me to it.

 

You did such a beautiful job with this! I read your other pieces and thought they were equally beautiful. This one touched me most though so I came here to leave a review, but I’ll definitely be back to give you a proper response to the other ones. <3

 

~Eva



Author's Response:

I about died when I read this review. I can’t tell you how nervous I was to share this poem, and to hear that it’s up to par with published works? Yep. Dead. Thank you for your kind words and for being just generally awesome!



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