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Name: dreamgazer220 (Signed) · Date: 02 Sep 2018 11:30 PM · [Report This]
Story:Good Things Come in Twos Chapter: Summiting the Mountain

Hey, Madi! I'm here with your review for the Prefects' challenge.

The beginning you've set up here is really adorable. I love seeing Harry and Ginny in a happy relationship, talking about normal things like work and vacation rather than having to deal with being the Boy Who Lived. It's refreshing, and I think you've done a good job at setting the tone for the story in the opening paragraphs. And I really loved the first hint that something else is on Ginny's mind -- the topic of importance that she wants to discuss. I want to know what it is! :P

Also, Harry and Ginny washing dishes together muggle style is everything. ♥

You had a lot of strong details, which made it a lot easier for me to visualize the story as I was reading it, which is something I always enjoy. I thought it was really cool that you used the magic of the Patronuses and spells to make fire; it felt really natural for them. :) I especially loved the fact that not everyone recognized Harry and Ginny through their travels and they had no complications, but were recognized on the Alps; it felt realistic to me.

I'm pretty sure I'd love camping a lot more if magic was involved!


So I thought Ginny's coming out came as a slight surprise, but you were able to make it work and you handled it well; I'm glad they had the chance to be open with each other before taking their relationship to the next level -- nothing quite like hiking in the mountains to give you time to share your deepest thoughts. I thought Harry's reactions were true to character and he was very sweet.

Harry's proposal was sweet and romantic, not over the top -- very much like I'd imagine he would do.

Just a small thing: I would've liked to have seen a bit of the Charlie/Harry conversation, just because I love Charlie and I'd be curious to see him playing the roll of the big brother to The Boy Who Lived, but I can understand why you took left it as an alluded conversation.

This ended on a very cute and fluffy note! Harry and Ginny deserve all the happiness and I'm glad they had this chance to be normal and have a great vacation.

Thanks for entering the challenge! ♥



Name: potionspartner (Signed) · Date: 18 Aug 2018 02:00 AM · [Report This]
Story:Good Things Come in Twos Chapter: Summiting the Mountain

This review is for the quadpot, match 3


First I like your title, a spin-off of bad things come in threes but so much more positive. I also like the Weasley dinner. You effortlessly waved familiarity into it with Molly’s cookies, Charlie’s burns and George’s newest jokes.  You’ve also set up a bit of a mystery here with two mysterious conversations, first with the trio then an hour long one with Charlie. Something is up and I wonder if it will all happen in the Alps. The conversation with Arthur clues us in a bit more. (Although, if I was Harry, I would be a bit annoyed that my future father-in-law just thrust this ring on me, didn’t even ask. Supposed he had already bought a ring or was planning on using one he found in his Gringott’s vault, etc.)


Also, nice touch with the town of Grindelwald-good detail to tie it back to the books. The proposal was simple and a bit bumbling but perfectly Harry.


I was a bit confused about the conversations at the Weasleys. Why did it take 30 minutes and an hour to discuss, what I’m assuming was the proposal and perhaps the characters could have shown a bit more emotion after the talks (ie relief by Harry or a good-natured arm around him by Charlie.)

 

Sweet story about their engagement. Thanks for sharing it with us.  



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