Hey, Nim! I'm here for your entry review to the Poetical Mood Challenge.
There is something about Haiku that I've always loved (and is largely found in Japenese writing as a whole). It's the ability to say so much with so few words. That of course, comes down to choosing JUST the right words to make such a heavy impact. And what I also love about Haiku, is that it not only limits word count but syllabic count as well. Yet, with all the challenge, they have the potential to create some stunning poetry. Which is precisely what you've done.
This first Haiku is so soft and so sweet. There is a sense of innocence and purity and it fits with the Spring season so well. I can also see a relationship at its most initial progression. The sweetness and the shyness, the quiet thrill of developing feelings.
As the season changes, so does the relationship, it seems. Your heart skipping a beat at the melodic rhythm of someone's laugh reminds me so much of falling in love. The summer rain reminds me of the rise of passion, the heat you feel when you're around someone you love -- a warmness in the heart that seeps through your entire body.
Autumn brings will it something new, once again. As the crisp, cool air of the fall season can make you tremble, so can a relationship's progression to a more physical level. The sense of need and desire are apparent.
With Winter comes the grand finale, if you will. Unbridled passion to create a fire in the frigid temperatures.
You did an outstanding job at utilizing the seasons to showcase love and passion. Something sweet and new turns into something fiercely passionate. You hit home with your word choice -- something that's not always particularly easy to do. Your technique of labeling each Haiku, so that it acts as an introductory point OR a single-lined verse brought a lot to the table. You should be extremely proud of this piece.
Congratulations again on first place and be sure to get in touch with me on the Forums to let me know where you'd like your four prize reviews to go.
Here with another Quodpot Match 3 review because this set of Haikus has yet to be reviewed!
I’m actually super excited to check out your poetry. You write prose and description so well that I imagine your poems will be flawless.
As expected, this did not disappoint. Haikus are so tough to write because of the syllable count and the fact that you have very little space to paint a vivid picture. You certainly rose to the challenge.
I like how you built the evolution of the relationship into the description of the different seasons. My favorite was the winter. I’m a big fan of burning/fire descriptions.
Sometimes I find that the flow on poetry can be off because people try to hard to force a specific pattern or rhythm, but these were so smooth. They flowed just the way they should.
I really hope you post more poetry! I will certainly read it if you do.