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Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 03 Oct 2018 10:36 AM · [Report This]
Story:White Horse Chapter: More

Hey Sian!

 

So this has a really punchy start, it's really strong and it grabs my attention. I think in canon Cho is more a soft spoken person so it's interesting to see her reaction to such a small thing. it's straight into the action, I really feel for Cho as she's obviously really struggling with her past and it's no wonder. I think this can be a really realistic why of coping with traumatic events. she doesn't even know she's drunk.  I love how strong willed Sylvie is because it can be intimidating if someone is accusing you/getting into your face. It's a great way of introducing her and showing her character without knowing much about her. 

 

I just love the idea of the bookshop. I really just love all your details, it's what makes your stories so wonderful as it's just obvious how much care goes into every word. I know you always think that fluff isn't a strength of yours but I totally disagree. The whole romantic aspect of this piece is simply adorable. it's not over the top, it's cute and subtle. The dialogue between them is great, I thought the little banter was really well written and believable. Their relationship is build up quite quickly but it just seemed so natural. I don't know how you do that? it's really impressive. I loved this piece, the kiss is perfection! I'm so excited to see you writing again. it's the best news! <3

 

 

- Abbi xo

 

 

RvG - Team Gold

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Hi Abbi!

 

I'm really glad that the start of this story grabbed your attention.  I really wanted to play with the characterisation of Cho and the way that she might be affected by the Battle of Hogwarts and what she experienced in the year leading up to it (which, of course, we don't actually get to see in canon).  She's not dealing with it very well but I definitely wanted to contrast her behaviour here with Sylvie, and I'm glad that you liked her character too.

 

The bookshop was so much fun to write!  Unsurprisingly, I often end up in bookshops like this and when I visited Edinburgh I found myself in several that reminded me of this one, so it was quite easy to write from memory, but I'm glad you liked the descriptions of it!  And the fluff and romance was so difficult but I'm pleased you thought that it seemed natural and worked - that's a huge relief! 

 

Thank you so much for stopping by and taking the time to review, lovely!



Name: cambangst (Signed) · Date: 01 Oct 2018 12:49 PM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:White Horse Chapter: More

Hi, Sian!

I saw your post on Twitter and, well, I'm always a sucker for anything you've written. No different here. You mixed an innocent sort of sweetness with an edgy feistiness and threw in a bit of angst and self-pity. Cho's character is completely believable in all of her dimensions. Sad and angry and confused and more than a little lost. I loved how you took a character who seemed like an antagonist at first and turned her into the focus of Cho's recovery. Cleverly done!

Very neat. Thank you for writing this and sharing it!



Author's Response:

Hi Dan!

 

This was the first thing that I posted (and wrote) in quite a while, but I've had a head canon along these lines in my mind for years now.  I'm so pleased that you liked the way that I characterised Cho in this story and pitted her against her love interest.  It was fun to try and develop that relationship and I really enjoyed writing it.

 

Thank you for stopping by to read and review this!



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