So this has a really punchy start, it's really strong and it grabs my attention. I think in canon Cho is more a soft spoken person so it's interesting to see her reaction to such a small thing. it's straight into the action, I really feel for Cho as she's obviously really struggling with her past and it's no wonder. I think this can be a really realistic why of coping with traumatic events. she doesn't even know she's drunk. I love how strong willed Sylvie is because it can be intimidating if someone is accusing you/getting into your face. It's a great way of introducing her and showing her character without knowing much about her.
I just love the idea of the bookshop. I really just love all your details, it's what makes your stories so wonderful as it's just obvious how much care goes into every word. I know you always think that fluff isn't a strength of yours but I totally disagree. The whole romantic aspect of this piece is simply adorable. it's not over the top, it's cute and subtle. The dialogue between them is great, I thought the little banter was really well written and believable. Their relationship is build up quite quickly but it just seemed so natural. I don't know how you do that? it's really impressive. I loved this piece, the kiss is perfection! I'm so excited to see you writing again. it's the best news! <3
- Abbi xo
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I saw your post on Twitter and, well, I'm always a sucker for anything you've written. No different here. You mixed an innocent sort of sweetness with an edgy feistiness and threw in a bit of angst and self-pity. Cho's character is completely believable in all of her dimensions. Sad and angry and confused and more than a little lost. I loved how you took a character who seemed like an antagonist at first and turned her into the focus of Cho's recovery. Cleverly done!
Very neat. Thank you for writing this and sharing it!