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Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2019 10:23 PM · [Report This]
Story:Beyond The Tree Chapter: Tree

Hey there!

 

I'm here with a review for the Magical Menagerie Review Event as well as the Gryffindor Red vs Gold Review event for January 2019! I was scanning through the lists of stories and happened across this one! It sounded interesting and I love a good spooky story, so I thought I'd check it out.

 

Ooh. This seems very ominous. I feel like mysterious letters with only one word written on them are never going to result in anything particularly good. It's just enough to drag her into something, but without her really knowing what she's getting herself into.

 

I wonder how Jenny knew that this tree was the one she should touch. Did she have a gut feeling about it? Was there some life event that had happened at it that made her think it would be special? What called her there?

 

Yikes! Those words don't necessarily seem threatening, but the whole setting seems so ominous.

 

You did a really good job of telling such an interesting story in such a short span of words. I'm always amazed how much people can pack into a drabble. I was impressed with how much description you were able to include in such a short word limit too. It really helped me imagine the situation going on aroud her.

 

Good job!

 

~Kaitlin

 



Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 19 Jan 2019 04:38 PM · [Report This]
Story:Beyond The Tree Chapter: Tree

Hello! Here for Gryffindor's Janaury RvG and the Magical Menagerie!

 

As a Gryffindor, we had dark-themed drabbles, so it's so cool to see another House use another theme (and it's fate/prophecy--how awesome is THAT!!).

 

I appreciate how you are using some original fiction here. It adds an extra layer of mystery to this whole piece. Jenny seems to be the eldest child here, since she is the one touching the maple tree while her siblings watch. I wonder how many siblings she has and why exactly they are there... I have gleaned that they are there mainly in part because of Aunt Daisy and her cryptic message. Has she passed? Has she disappeared? Or has she sent them onto their destined path? I love all of these questions, sparked from only a couple hundred words!

 

Of course, when the prophecy is revealed, it still does not answer all of my questions, and I am okay with that. You have spend the entire piece building the mystery... only to add more mystery at the end... except, to Jenny, it's no longer a mystery, so she gets the sense of closure that her character needs. That being said, I am curious to learn more, so well done in getting the reader to want more at the end.... and, just saying, I can totally see this drabble as a prologue to a longer piece (hint, hint). ;)

 

Great job with this original fiction! I'm glad I have had the chance to read and review it!



Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 13 Jan 2019 02:29 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Beyond The Tree Chapter: Tree

Hey, I'm here with the Magical Menagerie Reviewing Event! 

 

I immediately like the concept of Oracle Woods in relation to the whole fate/prophecy theme -- I think it ties the theme to the story really nicely and had certainly left me wondering what sort of mysticism can be found in this particular forest. Furthermore, I think it's amazing that Oracle Woods did not disappoint living up to its name. I do wonder, is this forest well-known to the people of this universe, or is it something of a family secret (as the focus here seems to be on Jenny, her siblings, and memories from their aunt)? 

 

I feel like this is definitely setting up for some awesome adventure, as Jenny and her siblings see the message on the tree, as it is something of an omen. I can't help but wonder what the answer is they're searching for and what sort of amazing journey (or hazardous adventure) is going to be down the path. Clearly, given from the message that she sent, Aunt Daisy has either done this before in search of her own answers or has known someone who has. Either way, it's definitely setting something up and I would love to know what that is! 

 

My curiosity is killing me!

 

-Rumpels



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