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Name: Veritaserum27 (Signed) · Date: 07 Nov 2018 09:42 PM · [Report This]
Story:The Sound of Sacrifice Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi there!  

I'm trying to make BvB in November one of the best ever.  Since you were the first person to post reviews, I thought it only fitting that you shoul get one too.  And then I saw that your newest story didn't have any reviews yet!

You hit one of myy sweet spots.  I absolutely adore missing moments.  And I'm a sucker for any story that offers a unique perspecitve and a new way of looking at the story.  This amazing one-shot delivered spot-on with both of those requirements.  A sentient pumpkin that tells his tale from beyond the grave?!  Yes, please.  And thank you very much.

I love how you drew the reader the picture of how this moment in time was so very important to Harry and his cause.  You drew us a picture of Harry's timeline and how very important this pumpkin's death was to his cause.  I was moved by your words.

The story was nearly flawless.  I noticed this typo in the line:  "Would Dumbledore have killed Potter than night in an attempt to strike at the Dark Lord? "

 

I think you meant to type "that," not "than."

 

What I really adored about this story is the sweet undertones brought about by your chosen words.  I've actually started feeling sorry for this pumpkin.  But then, I start to feel brave.  The pumpkin knew it had a respnibility, a job to fulfill.  I felt like I was taking my place alongside the pumpkin in the sacrificial role that was played and the waterfall effect that it had.

Overall, great job with this story!

 

~Beth



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