Hi Kaitlin! I had to check out your Star Trek fic too. This is also for the February R vs G review thing, team Red.
The tone of this piece is so different from Isabella and I was immediately struck by both its starkness and its beauty. I thought its frankness was effective. Although I’ve watched other Star Trek series, I haven’t seen any of Discovery, and that didn’t seem to matter while I read this piece. You communicated the basics of what happened and I know enough about Klingons to know how terrifying it would be to have one trying to crush my throat.
I am impressed with how you managed to evoke a lot of sympathy for the male in this story. You communicated all the mitigating factors that make me sorry for him, even though he hurt his partner. I think that can be very difficult to have sympathy for aggressors, even though they frequently have some sort of trauma in their own background that leads to the aggression. How tragic that this relationship ended in such a way, especially since it seems that the male will be much worse off without it. The poem that inspired you to write this piece is also stark in its beauty. I think you created the same mood with Tether. The final line you wrote, about the male being trapped forever in that moment when he hurt the female was particularly gut wrenching. I wish there were a way for them to work it out, but it seems from this piece that that would be impossible. Well written and I can’t wait to read more of your work!
Hi Kaitlin! I'm here for our swap, and sorry for the delay ♥
So even with my limited to nonexistant knowledge, I was still able to grap the essence of this story. I'm always so impressed with your writing, but particularly in such a short piece like this. Using 'you' and 'he' rather than distinguishing character names was definitely wise, because it really put the reader in the position and made the story all the more powerful.
I honestly feel a bit bad for the male character in this. He clearly loves his partner so much, but it's all destroyed in a single moment because he lost control of the monster inside of him. It's clearly wrecking him, and while there are a lot of powerful lines in this piece, it's the last one that really stands out the most. That's what love is; him never asking his partner to relieve the moment, but it will haunt him forever, and that's what makes this all so heartbreaking.
You did an excellent job with this, and good luck in the challenge! Thanks for the swap ♥
Hi, Kaitlin. Thank you for offering reveiw swap.
I googled about the names, Ash, Michael and the Klingon. Ash is a beautiful ebony lady and Michael is a handsome ivory(?) man. And the Klingon is a villain...like Voldemort or Fenrir Greyback? It seems to have power to control its victim. I wonder what exactly happened to Michael. He seems to have protected Ash from somethihng horrible and at the same time he tried attacking her, affected by "the Klingon". It's full of mystery. I would like to know more about the cause in detail.
The description about Michael floating in space is just beautiful and uncertain. The universe itself is uncertain and you use it very wisely in the story.
It's sad inside the space, one love was finished without their inner desire or hope. I wish there will be a way for Ash and Michael to get together again. Because I read the phrase, "You were his companion, his only confidante."
Or the phrase, "you were his tether to reality" indicates there is a chance for them to go back to the relationship before they broke up?
Though I don't know the Star Trek Fandom very well, I could enjoy your story. :) A lovely piece of your works!
Omg. Omg. This is great. my feelings. Look at them. They're just lying there, all over the floor. I am a blubbering mess. The latest trailer for season 2 just dropped, and I haven't seen it yet, but this lovely little story has me sooo in the mood for it (and Jan 17!).
This is my first Star Trek, fanfic, and boy, have you set the bar high. I love these little character explorations of huge moments. Michael and Ash's relationship is one of my favourites. It's just so complex and nuanced, and there are like, so many layers (insert Shrek joke, here). In just a few hundred words, I think you've captured a lot of that.
I haven't stalked your AP recently, but is this your first Star Trek fic? If so, are you planning to write more? And on a scale of 1 to "I'm joining Star Fleet", how excited are you for season 2?
This is such a lovely, wonderful, little fic! Thank you so much for the dedication! I am truly honoured!