Name: StarFeather (Signed) · Date: 06 Jan 2019 07:54 AM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:A New Business of Harland Borgin Chapter: Chapter 1: The New Business of Harland Borgin

Hi, Barbara. I enjoyed your new story. More chapters coming soon, right?

I guess an unexpected incident will happen after his businees is set out.

I might spot a typo, lieing (lying, right?)

The casino owner's new business reminded me of the Fanastic Beasts movie's circus. Crups or Chapacabra sounds interesting. The description of those magical cages is marvelous. I could imagine each scene visually from your words.


At first, I wondered if the Aurors who forced their way into Borgin's shop, may be Ron and Harry. You depicted their investigation and irritation very well.


I held my breath when the elder Auror entered the cabinet, worrying that something bad would happen.


I hope the money issues with goblin Gutag will be solved soon for Borgin.



Author's Response:

Actually, this is the last story in a series of 4 for the New Beginnings Challenge. I just haven't linked them together yet. (You reviewed it before I even realized it had been validated.)

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