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Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 12 Jan 2019 03:02 AM · [Report This]
Story:The First Born Chapter: See the Ground

Hey Madi!

 

I'm here with a review for the Magical Menagerie event over on the forums! I happened to see this in the recently posted stories listing and thought I'd give it a shot.

 

Wow. So this is a really interesting concept, sending a large group of teenagers back to a ravaged planet to try and re-settle it. I wonder why they chose to send children. (I'm unfamiliar with this fandom, so forgive me if this is common knowledge.)

 

Even more interesting is the concept of forced birth control on the female teenagers. I mean I get that they're preparing them so that they won't get pregnant when they inevitably start forming relationships, but it does seem rather drastic.

 

I thought the nurse did a good job of dealing with the pregnancy news. It must be a bit frightening to deal with someone who is so young and in such a stressful environment and then to tell them that they're now going to be a parent. I can't even imagine.

 

I did wonder about one small detail. You had the nurse tell her not to have any intimate contact until the end of her pregnancy. Is this something specific to the world? Because as far as I'm aware, physical contact doesn't actually create any risk for pregnancy. That's sort of an old wives' tale, unless you have certain high risk health concerns.

 

Anyway, either way, this was a very interesting concept and overall, I thought you handled the teen pregnancy trope quite well. Will this have more chapters later? If so, I'd be interested in reading them.

 

Good work!

 

~Kaitlin




Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 09 Jan 2019 03:07 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:The First Born Chapter: See the Ground

I'm procrastinating and I saw a The 100 fic pop up on the new chapters on Twitter, so I put the two together (which means this review was brought to you by fate). 

 

Your setup for the pregnancy is sound -- I mean, you put a bunch of teenagers in an unsupervised area and things are bound to move passed the bounds of PG-13 at some point, and even with precautions -- well, nothing is ever 100%. I really think you did a good job at showcasing the amount of nervousness in Jenny and Bradley in facing a potential pregnancy, especially being so young and in not-so-optimal conditions (what with wars and food shortages and overall danger). 

 

Clarke did an awesome job at being professional about it, too -- it probably helped a lot given the situation. I imagine I would be really nervous in their situation. Also, I'm really glad that Bellamy was so calm and rational about the situation, and so willing to make accommodations for the baby-to-be. I think a new life on the planet might even be a good omen ;). 

 

Anyway, I think you did a lovely job! 

 

-Rumpels



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