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Name: dirigibleplums (Signed) · Date: 10 May 2017 04:59 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Two Earthly Kingdoms Chapter: To Anger A God

i never know what to put in reviews on your fics bc they always blow my mind. like. this was beautiful <3



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Honestly, I never know how to respond to things like this because all I do when I get them is blush and smile like an idiot, and I don't know what to say. But thank you so so much - this means so much coming from you with your beautiful writing, and I really enjoyed writing this (more than I thought I would) so it means so much. Thank you <3 <3 



Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 29 Apr 2017 09:47 AM · [Report This]
Story:Two Earthly Kingdoms Chapter: To Anger A God

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Laura! ♥

Um... wow?

Seriously, I feel like I say that every time I read and review one of your stories but this time I'm just so blown away, because this is incredible, absolutely incredible. I've wanted to read this for the longest time and I'm so glad that I have, but the problem is this story is so amazing that it's the sort that has me torn between putting down my pen and never writing again and trying to ever emulate something like this, which is essentially impossible for me. It's just... wow.

I don't even know where to start in this review, and again, I know that's something that happens a lot, but... everything about this was amazing. There's just so much thought and attention to detail in this story, and everything about it was just perfect. From your choice of characters to your choice of words and allusions - I seriously can't think of anything that could have been done better in any way. This is just amazing.

Your descriptions ♥ You know already that I absolutely adore your writing and your descriptions but I feel like here you really took them to another level entirely, even better than your writing always is, and literally every single word seemed to be so carefully chosen and fit and flow so well with the story that I'm just blown away. Each word just built up this fantastic work and I don't know how you came up with this, but I'm in awe. One day I'm going to get you to teach me how on earth you have this talent for descriptions and imagery that's so unfair on the rest of us and share a little bit of it with me :P

The allusions through this - I mean, the whole story was kind of a retelling in a way I don't think I've ever seen before, and you just worked everything in so seamlessly that it's brilliant (I'm in serious need of some new adjectives for your writing. See what you're doing to me here?). It didn't even read like a story - like a fanfiction - with the structure, but the sort of saga that you'd find in mythology, with the interludes and the different parts all building up this sense of other-worldliness that made me feel like this was all happening so far away, and yet at the same time your storytelling was so compelling it felt like it was happening right now and it was the most important story I could read. I realise I'm not even making any sense right now, but I'm kind of struggling to find the words to do this piece justice in a review, so you're going to have to bear with me, I'm afraid :P

Snape as Orpheus worked so incredibly well. I hadn't even considered the possibility before of tying Snape, of all people, in with mythology - there are certain characters who really seem to fit and link in so obviously and Snape isn't one of those I'd have considered if I hadn't read this. But the way that you told his journey through life - his desperation for glory, the attempts to win his kingdoms, the lure of the underworld and the adoration for Lily, all of it - fits so well with Orpheus's figure and you told his tale so well. His life seemed so incredibly dark - the description added to that, like there was this shadow and mystery surrounding him, a strangely dark glory about him - and tragic, in a way, as though no matter what he did he had very little control over the outcomes of events, and the way that people viewed and treated him. Just so much of this worked with Snape and all of the other characters, and your characterisation of him was just fantastic. I'm not the biggest Snape fan at all, but this piece understood him and his motivations so well - you captured his personality perfectly, and it's such a great portrayal of his character, tied up in this amazing piece.

This is just a tiny thing but I also love the way that you don't mention names either, at least of the main characters. Lily is never named through the whole of the piece, in spite of that fact that Snape thinks about her so much and wants her as part of his rise to glory, and then Snape himself is only mentioned twice, I think - it's just something so small but the fact that you told this whole story without naming people like that and yet the reader still perfectly understanding who they were reading about and everything that was happening really demonstrates your skill and talent as a writer.

I have so much more to say but I don't have the words to say it right now, and I've rambled and not made sense for long enough here, unfortunately. This is such an incredible story, Laura (and please can teach me how to write like this, even a little bit, yes?). Good luck! ♥

Sian :)    



Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 11 Nov 2016 12:42 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Two Earthly Kingdoms Chapter: To Anger A God

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Hi Laura!

Here for our swap!

I never really know what to say when I read your stories, because your writing is just so beautiful and so powerful and poetic and stately... And this surely is no exception.

Your take on Severus' psychology is so fascinating. You really digged into the darkest depths of his soul, and it was so fascinating to read, even if a bit scary.

The Greek mithology theme also worked beautifully. It gave the story this sort of abstract and aulic dimension, makes it even more powerful and emotionally strong.

Wish I could leave a longer and more thoughtful review, but I really have nothing better to say than wonderful job, you are a real goddess of the pen.

Sorry again for the short review. And thanks so much for swapping and for the wonderful read!

Lots of love,

Chiara



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