Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 27 Jan 2021 01:03 AM · For: pixie dust

Hello there!

I've been reading a Next Gen story that features Lily, so I wanted to come and read this one too! I'm surprised by how interested I am in Next-Gen things lately! And this story is no different. :)

I was really intrigued by the characterization you wrote here. I don't tend to think much about Lily Luna, so she's basically a blank slate in my mind. You did a great job of showing one way her character might go.

I was sad for her unrequited love for Teddy. You wrote her emotions very honestly. It was clear that she'd struggled to forget her feelings and failed. But I also think her family has a point in being upset with how she's treated all of them in regards to her personal struggles. They'd be happy to be there for her if only she'd let them.

I hope that maybe she'll get closure in her life now that she's accepted (maybe?) that Teddy will never be hers...Poor girl. Sometimes you just need to hug your cat and cry.

Really good job!

Best,
Emily


*for the Fairyland review event*

Author's Response:

The way I love Lily Luna Potter is probably very insane considering we met her for a few pages as a nine year old in the last book, but I definitely blame it on two things: she's Hinny's daughter, and her middle name is Luna - and the only thing you need to know about me as a human being is I've been simping Harry/Ginny since I was an eleven year and that Ginny/Luna are my entire heart and soul. So I mean, for me, being Lily Luna's number one fan was basically written in the stars. 

I literally stumbled upon a thing on tumblr one night, and this girl, who I was I could credit because she legit brought me to this other level, had a HC that Lily had always loved Teddy and resented Victoire and I, as a fan of ScoRose fics that had her liking Teddy, clung to this more for some reason and I could never ever see her and Teddy being together, but god did I love thinking about it and began to write this fic on a plane ride back home, where I didn't want to go.  

Her family is very valid, but Lily is far too bitter to see the forrest for the trees, and she is definitely her own worst enemy.

Though if you do like this, I reimagined this oneshot in a much longer fic - it's not complete, but I plan on completing it, so it's the thought that counts! It's called Second Star to the Right, and it involves all the elements here, just a bit more... happier!

 

Thank you for taking the time to review, and thank you so much for reading!

xo,

Bee!

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 22 Jan 2019 12:21 PM · For: pixie dust

 

Hey!

 

I thought the emotions of Lily came through very clearly here. You've really nailed that bitterness that she carries with her. It seems to consume her. I feel sorry for her honestly that she felt the need to go across the world to try to escape her feelings but it doesn't seem to make any different.

 

Her family have a good dynamic but they are obviously very close which you show really well in the dialogue that you've used. I've read a few things of yours now and I feel like one of your writing strengths is dialogue. I feel sorry for her family because they don't know the reason why, they just assumed that she left. You can see their pain in their interaction with her. They seem so lost in knowing what happened.

 

I love the part of Lily reliving those memories from her childhood. the last lines really sort up the part. I truly wish for her that she was able to let it go. I was a bit concerned about lily/teddy because of the old different might be a little odd but I found this very realistic. It was a bit more like worship than love on lily side really. I haven't seen much of teddy paired with other characters (even if they weren't 'together' as such) So I felt this was very fresh. 

 

- Abbi xo

 

For: Magical Menagerie/RvG

 

Author's Response:

thank you so much! i genuinely appreciate you taking the time to write all of these well thoughout and beautiful reviews, it really does mean a lot to me!! and thank you so much, i try so hard to make a conversation seem realistic, and to know someone out there likes it is a gem! but the lily and teddy pairing is such a long story, but it's honestly one of my favorite things i think from the harry potter fandom i've ever stumbled upon because so many people tend to gravitate towards rose (and scorose), so we get a lot of rose liking teddy, and all that, but to see lily as being jealous of victoire and being more obsessed than in love with teddy has always given me this weird fascination. sadly, though, whereas this story stands, i don't think lily will ever let go. if she ever really let herself have a partner, i see it always ending in heartbreak (more on their end than her own). but i'm glad you enjoyed!  

Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 21 Jan 2019 06:21 PM · For: pixie dust

Hi!  Here for RvG and the Magical Menagerie!

 

This was a really interesting story!  I don't think I've ever actually read a Lily Luna/Teddy pairing before, or even seen a story featuring the two of them together, so I was really intrigued to see what you'd do with this pairing.  Of course, they're not together in this story, but I think it worked all the better for that.  There was a real sense of longing and bitterness that you managed to thread brilliantly throughout this piece that really captured how Lily felt and how hard this whole experience was for her.

 

One quick suggestion before I go any further - it might be helpful to insert another line's space between each of the paragraphs here, just to make it easier to read on the screen :)

 

I thought the structure of this piece was really clever, and I enjoyed the way that you told this story: it wasn't just Lily thinking about Teddy, but rather a series of interactions with her relatives at the most difficult occasion possible for her that gave you the opportunity to explore what she's feeling about the day itself, about Teddy, and about the life that she doesn't have.  I liked the way that you built up those feelings and the history to them with each different scene in the story.

 

I was actually quite surprised with her interaction with her mum - Ginny's normally portrayed as quite a supportive mother, so it was interesting to see her failing to understand why Lily wants to stay away here.  I think maybe there's some miscommunication going on - Ginny probably just wants her daughter to come home (just like Harry does), but doesn't know how to say it the right way.

 

I felt so sorry for Lily here.  I thought you captured the pain of her unrequited love really well, but it was so sad to see the way that she was distancing herself from her family and living across the Atlantic Ocean because she couldn't stand being in close proximity to Teddy and seeing him in love with Victoire.  She wants him to be happy, but it constantly hurts that he's not happy with her.  I'd love to see a follow-up piece to this - maybe one where she gets a slightly happier ending? :P

 

Sian :)

Author's Response:

thank you so so much (also thank you for telling me the spacing looked off bc i definitely fixed it!), but yes, this pairing is one of those things i don't "ship", but i love to think of a lot. i stumbled upon it years ago, and lily luna has a near and dear space in my heart, so naturally she must be tortured. but ginny is definitely one for the tough love, whereas harry just doesn't want to drive her further away. but thank you for your lovely comments and liking the story, i do have visions of one day writing a not-sequel to this, but who knows! as for now, lily doesn't really get a happy ending, at least not in this story!