I absolutely love this. "Friend that is a by" LOL THAT IS SO SIRIUS!
Please do bring more of your unpublished stories out. They're absolutely hilarious <3
Taylor! Here for our swap.
Okay... okay... okay. I have a cheesy grin on my face. This fic is so cute on so many levels.
But also... MY HEART TAYLOR, WHAT IS WITH ALL THIS FORESHADOWING OF DEATH AND DESPAIR?!
James is absolutely adorable in this story. I love how you expose his vulnerabilities. It makes him even more loveable. You really build up his nerves and anticipation in asking out Lily Evans, after all, his feelings for her have grown exponetially and there is so much at stake here.
The signs on which he is reflecting are so blatantly obvious, meaning that Lily likes him and is flirting with him, that of course I can totally relate to him second guessing EVERYTHING. Because if it's obvious, then CLEARLY you're misreading the situation, am I right?! lol, we've all been there (or most of us anyway), and it's both fun and agonizing to watch him squirm (and cheer him on, of course!)
Lily's reaction is amazing. I LOVE how she already assumes that they're dating, and I LOVE how she doesn't second guess herself about it. She's so confident in her feelings for him and in their relationship, she doesn't back down into an embarrassed "Oh, aren't we dating?" This is such a great way to have the "defining the relationship" discussion, too. James is such a blubbering, loveable idiot here, and Lily is a gem. I love them together. :)
But, as you might have noticed near the beginning of my review, I did catch your little snippets of foreshadowing and despair. Sirius going to Azkaban? Lily being the death of him? Merlin, Taylor. You really know how to pull the fluffy rug from underneath our feet. You might has well titled this piece "Dumb Jily Thing, and by the way, Lily and James are murdered in 4 years' time and Sirius is blamed for it." ;) As much as I love reading your fluff, I LOVE how you threw in some heartbreak in it!!!
Oh, my Merlin! I love this! I love it so much! Dunno why I took so long to come here after your request, honestly... I really needed some Jily fluff/humour tonight! <3
And I'm an idiot, because I was so into James' head that I didn't see this coming at all. Although, I was like, they are having lunch together at the lake... isn't that a date already? But I sort of shrugged it off... well, whatever...
But anyway, James is such a dork! And I love him for that! His nervousness is just so cute, and I loved all the scenarios he created in his head... (although that bit about Sirius ending up in Azkaban for avenging him made me sad... that, and James thinking that Lily would be the death of him, but still worth it... I know this story is hilariously silly and that those details are meant to be silly too, but I can't help but read them as tragic foreshadowing... you know what I mean, don't you? Also, I'm sorry...)
Lily's reaction was so perfect! Honestly, both of them were just perfect! You captured their characters and their relationship so well, I love it! I'm sure I could say a lot more about this, but I can't think of anything, except this was so funny and sweet and adorable and I'm in love! <3 <3 <3
Thank you so much for requesting, dear! It was an absolute pleasure! Please, send all the fluffy Jilys my way! <3 <3 <3
Yes, this is a bit of humorous fluff, but fun to read when one has been overdosing on an endless stream of angsty stories. A nice reminder that teenagers are not all spiraling down into the drain of despair. And yet that statement leads one to remember that these two happy teenagers will be heading into an environment of fear, danger, and death in the not too distant future.
Begone, you tragic thoughts, and let us enjoy the moment -- James overthinking the whole issue of their dating status, and Lily lovingly amused by his clueless wishfulness. It is fun to see James's transformation from anxiety to utter happiness in such a short time. If only life were always so rewarding.
I'm here for our review swap and for the Gryffindore Red vs. Gold Review Battle - February 2019! (On a side note, how is it February already? What happened to January?)
I think you might be one of the very few writers who could make me excited to read a James/Lily piece. You write them so well together and in such a convincing fashion. I love all of the different scenarios you've come up with for how they end up together.
The beginning of this really shows how James has matured. Instead of arrogantly and incessantly asking Lily out, he's nervous. You can tell her really wants the moment to be meaningful and special to her. The amount of thought he's putting into it is really cute.
I love the idea of them having a picnic together (although I did think at that point that it's odd that they'd have a lakeside picnic as a friend get together since it seems like a date activity). It's cute that the elves load James up with so much food. That seems so fitting for elves. Maybe James can save the leftovers for some latenight Marauder snacks.
It was fun watching James was trying to figure out how to finally ask Lily out. Cat stories aren't very good tangents to "Will you go out with me?" I'm glad he finally just blurted it out.
OMG. I laughed so hard at Lily's response. James truly is oblivious. I thought his description of the picnic date seemed odd for a just friends get together. It seems just like him to not notice that he'd been dating the girl of his dreams for several weeks. That is amazing.
As soon as he asked Lily not to tell his friends, I knew there was no way she wouldn't. I mean, I'd imagine she'd want to take the mickey out of him just as much as they would. That's way too funny to keep a secret.
And Sirius the next morning, yes! That was the perfect way to end it.
This was lovely! Your writing was really smooth and moved at a nice pace. The way you moved between James' thoughts and what was actually happening was easy to follow. Overall, a very nice fluffy sweet piece of goodness!
Hi Taylor! Here for February's RvG.
Ah, fluffy Jily! I'm always happy to read stories like this one where you're not torturing your poor readers with breaking down relationships or killing off favourite characters or something :P
James was so adorable in this story! Right from the very beginning, when he was building up to asking Lily out and he was so nervous about it - it was just so cute to read. I know we see him asking her out in the flashback in OotP but it's so clear here that asking her out this time really means something to him, and reading about all the different possibilities that he's concocted in his mind was kind of hilarious. I swear, James overthinks things more than I do, and that's saying something.
I want to know just exactly what he thought was going to happen when he asked Lily out that one fifth of the versions in his head ended up with someone in Azkaban. Does he have experience of that being a consequence of asking someone on a date??
Although the Sirius one I can kind of see happening, to be honest.
Then learning about what James and Lily had been doing in the last couple of weeks - the kisses on the cheek, hanging out away from other friends or outside of Heads duty - was so hilarious. The poor boy has been trying to pluck up the courage to ask her out for this long and he hasn't even realised that they're already going out. I can definitely picture the cocky James that we see in the flashback being so unsure and oblivious when he eventually gets to go out with Lily that he doesn't even realise it's happening at first. It takes the phrase "can't believe my luck" to a whole new level, doesn't it?
Lily's reaction is just priceless, too. I would have loved for someone to have a camera in that moment and capture the look on her face as she just bursts into laughter when she learns that James hasn't even realised that they're dating. I kind of feel like that moment probably captures the dynamic of their relationship pretty well.
'friend that is a boy' is probably my favourite part of this story, and of course Lily won't promise not to share the fact James didn't know that they were dating - there's far too much potential there! I really liked the last few lines, and the way that it just captured the dynamic of the relationship and Lily's friendship with the other Marauders so well.
This was really cute and I loved reading it - thank you for some fluff after all that heartbreaking you've been doing recently with your writing!