Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 31 Jan 2020 11:12 PM · For: You Lied

Hey Tasha!

 

I'm here to leave you a review for the CDMC event- Round 2!

 

Wow. This was a pretty deep drabble. It's so few words, but it really conveys so much pain. Experiencing a serious heartbreak is an awful feeling and based on the way you wrote this, I'm going to guess you've had the misfortune of dealing with it yourself. That pain really came across in your words and how you talked about all of the failed expectations. I know I really resonated with a lot of it too. It reminded me a lot of the way I felt during my divorce.

 

I think the beginning paragraph is particularly poignant. That realization that the character's partner isn't searching for an equal or a partner, but a minion. That definitely isn't love and that's such a painful realization that you're essentially being used by someone you've given your heart to.  

 

That second paragraph about forcing the character to shape themselves into their partner's desires really makes me wonder if the partner is a narcissist. It all really fits the pattern of that sort of behavior.

 

The ending is such a gut punch of emotions too. I mean who hasn't wished they could just completely erase a bad relationship or some sort of painful event. It's very relatable.

 

I would love to see another little drabble about the same person a year later. I wonder if they'd reflect on the relationship the same way?

 

Good work on this!

 

~Kaitlin

Author's Response:

Hi Kaitlin!

I always love reading your reviews and this one is no exception. You're right this is based on a very personal experience and if I'm being honest it's not only about my divorce but the loss of someone I thought was one of my best friends. I'm still working on the healing part but it's getting better every day. I'm learning how to recognize narcissit behavior now and actually ended a relationship recently that was starting to show the same signs that the ones refrenced here did. As much as I hate that you've been down a similar road, I'm glad you were able to connect with the emotions in the piece and that they came through clearly. 

Thanks again for the review!

Peace, Love, and Tacos

Tasha

written for the 2020 HC Finale Sandcastle Event

Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 20 May 2019 07:50 PM · For: You Lied

Hi, Tasha, dear! Here for our swap! :)

Okay, so... This is, once again, so very painful... I'm so sorry for the experiences that led you to write this. :(

I think the way you structured this, the alternance between the promises and the way they were broken, was very impactful. Every "but" is like a blow (to the heart, to the confidence, to the soul), until everything comes crumbling down. Now all I'm left with are the memories. There is so much pain and helplessness in this sentence, like there's no way to move on, or simply it doesn't seem worth the effort.

But I love that you close the poem with the slightest ray of hope, and that even if it seems so hard at the moment, there might be a possibility to turn the page and start to heal. And I know that you will get there. <3

Snowball hug, my dear! And thank you for the swap!

Chiara

Author's Response:

My beautiful snowball hugger, 

Thank you so much for reviewing this piece. I'm glad that you were able to recgonize the emotions. This was definetly written at a low point in my life when I was dealing with a lot more emotions than I knew what to deal with and all of the things I wrote during this time were my way of sorting through them and begin the healing process. I'm happy to say that while I'm still not quite there yet, I have healed enough to look back on the time this piece inspired and take it as the lesson it is instead of only seeing the pain. 

Thanks again for reviewing

Peace, Love,and Tacos

Tasha

 

written for the 2020 HC Finale Sandcastle Event. 

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 20 May 2019 06:50 PM · For: You Lied

Hi, Tasha,

 

One more review to complete the three reviews of your three short pieces.

 

I see that this poem deals with the same subject as your longer work "I Loved You (But You Never Loved Me)", but more briefly, to fit the category of a "powerful drabble."

 

Even though shorter, this poem is powerful.  It is a good summary of the concepts that you address more fully in your longer poem, and yet your word choices are not repetitive of the longer poem.

 

I like the format -- first a short, wide section of longer sentences, looking like a ceiling on the page, and then a tall, thin section of short sentences that have a rhythmic sound because of their parallel constructions.

 

This poem lacks the overall optimistic note that I detect in the longer one, so I am concluding that this poem was written first.  This poem says "I don't know if I'll  ever recover," but the longer work is more hopeful.  It reminds me of something I recently saw in my journal, written about a month after my husband died: "I think I will always be sad."  No, that's not how it turned out.

 

A lovely piece.  Thank you for writing.

 

Vicki

Author's Response:

Hi Vicki

Thank you so much for stopping by to leave a review! Let me start by saying that yes, this piece was written first. This was just to get all the raw emotions on paper more or less so I could start working through them one at a time. By the time I got to I Loved You, I had sorted through everything I was feeling in this piece and did my best to find the silver lining and recgonize the subject for the jerk he was. That other one was my way of calling him out for all the things he did. This one was written to look back on and remember that I never want to feel like this again. I don't want to give someone this much power again. 

Thanks again for reviewing!

Peace, Love, and Tacos

Tasha

written for the 2020 HC Finale Sandcastle Event

Name: RoRoWeasley (Signed) · Date: 15 Apr 2019 12:50 PM · For: You Lied

Hi Tasha! I thought I'd have a read through some of your work as you are April's Hufflepuff of the Month! Congrats and Puff love from me :D x

 

Normally I'm really not a drabble fan as they can seem too short for me, but I absolutely adored this! It was moving and striking, and I was reading with a lump in my throat. If this was written from personal experience, I hope that you have started to heal. If not, I'm still rooting for your character. 

 

Love,

RoRoWeasley x

Author's Response:

Kate, 

Thank you so much for stopping by to review. This was written from personal experience and as a way to begin the healing process. While I'm not quite where I want to be with it, I am in a better place than I was when this was written. 

Thanks again for the review!

Peace, Love, and Tacos

Tasha

 

Written for the 2020 HC Finale Sandcastle event.