Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 01 May 2019 07:01 PM · For: Chapter 3: Funeral

Hi Jenn,

 

It seems like old times, all those years ago when we reviewed each other's stories on MNFF. I went back and read them again, as a trip down memory lane.  So I was eager to read your OF story.

 

This story was more complex than your older stories, so I had to focus carefully to pick up all the references and inferences.  But that's part of the fun -- being challenged to get below the surface.  Each of your characters is so distinct and so fully characterized, bit by bit and revelation by revelation.  And the particular culture of the society in which these characters move is well depicted in numberless little details, all of which are important in creating the picture and moving the story forward.

 

I liked the attachments -- the holographic will and the letter from Abe -- and was impressed by the research that went into the writing of them.  I have been wracking my brain to remember if you studied law, but if I ever knew, that memory has slipped away.

 

Thanks for giving us this original story with great characters and great atmosphere.  I enjoyed reading it.

 

Vicki

Name: StarFeather (Anonymous) · Date: 21 Apr 2019 05:50 AM · For: Chapter 1: Swing

Hi, I happened to choose this story for my sunday reading, grabbing a chance at the forum activity, team blue!

Though it took a long time to figure out which dialogue which chracter spoke and the meaning of each idiom, the technical term or the other phrases, I enjoyed reading just like I tuckled with Cormoran Strike series J.K.Rowling wrote. Of course, I remembered the American TV drama, 'Suits' as well while reading.

 

You set unique characters, the protagonist seems to be destined to be paired up with a distinctive and quarrelsome veteran attorney. I also thought interesting their offices were in the same building (if I am right with my understanding from reading) in Mitchel's work place, the incident was developed and would be inside the building.

 

The first client introduced in the latter of this chapter, is still alive (right?) and they have to plan for his relatives' conspiracy (?). In each dialogue or the descriptions, you reflected today's America, a melting pot of races into this story. Quite an ambitious work!

 

K

 

Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 17 Apr 2019 05:54 AM · For: Chapter 3: Funeral

Hey there Luna! I'm here with your entry review for my Broadway Musical Song Challenge! :)

 

So your choice of song was "I Dreamed a Dream" from Les Miserables, with the specific version being Anne Hathaway's from the movie version, which I also found to be particularly moving. The premise for this is rather intriguing -- I've not really read many legal thrillers, but this has definity piqued my interest for further reading. Your character introductions are unique and sets up the "thriller" part of this fic and draws in the curiosity for how each of these people are going to play a role later on. I will admit though because I read this initially when it was later at night I definitely kept confusing Mitchel and Michaelson because my brain sucks :P Once you started referring to Michaelson by his first name of Robert, it got easier, so have no worries, I figured it out eventually and backtracked to reconnect the characters to their proper scenes!

 

The dramatics with the housekeeper Pippa when Ezra goes to the house and they have a long chat and are late to the funeral was a nice touch. The short monologue Ezra gives for Abraham is touching as well and I liked how you drew in historical events to ground the story in the real world, and also the racial tensions still happening in the South in present day, as it heightened the mood throughout the story. I'm not sure exactly as to "who" is "dreaming" per the song, but I think you've written the story well enough to where it could be done for several of the characters in Beaufort.

 

Great job with this piece! I'll have the results posted soon. :)

 

~MadiMalfoy x