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Name: crestwood (Signed) · Date: 05 Apr 2019 03:22 AM · [Report This]
Story:The British Academy of Magical, Scientifical, Humanities, and Social Studies Chapter: one: the vast formlessness of the universe

Hello Emily! I’m here to review for The Ensemble Challenge -


I’ve got to say, the title of this fic is absolutely on point. First and foremost. Beyond that, you really do just know exactly what to write to get me to geek out. The beginning of this chapter sets the scene so well with these little details--the personality of Euterpe, (and his name) the risks of sending paper through owl post, Scorpius’ avoidance of his situation.


I cannot stress enough how much I like the idea of exploring alternative Wizarding schooling - I’ve certainly played fast and loose with the typical Hogwarts fic formula, but you’ve gone and created an entirely new school and I am so excited to see what you’ve come up with.


You’re also incorporating my favorite: Wizards doing Muggle stuff. I, um, can’t get enough of this. I could feasibly make an iceberg metaphor of my own in regards to this first chapter.


I don’t know why I appreciated the detail of the orange juice going off balance when Chloe apparates onto the bed, but it was very important to me. Especially once he fails to vanish the stain.


Twelve subjects would break me to my core. I was never very much able to focus on my four in high school, so there’s no doubt I would not do well at the British Academy.


“Those little capes might suit me” had me laughing aloud, as well as all the different emphasis on the phrase twelve subjects. That’s such a subtle quirk of speech that does not get utilized even remotely often enough.


Kaede! The vast formlessness of the universe! Oh my, I love.


Why is everyone coming to my house, indeed, Scorpius.


It makes a lot of sense that Hogwarts would send students to their school - I’m impressed that you realised they wouldn’t send any back with the awful Hogwarts curriculum. Like, thank you for thinking of everything.


Scorpius is absolutely the perfect character for this story. This totally sums up basically every reason I’ve got for being so interested in him. Like, of course he has a lot to live down and of course he’d want to get away from the mainstream British Wizarding culture. And now having it come to him is such a good story hook, I can’t imagine a better one.


Chloe’s past with bullying is really an amazing idea to give Scorpius someone else to identify with in his group with a personal reason to oppose this change with all they’ve got.


Two days pass like wildfire - I love this.


As if them taking the Knight Bus to school is not awesome enough, their being earlier because they’re unused to being able to apparate is just icing on top.


I don’t know why I have a thing for characters in ensemble fics playing cards, but I do. I don’t know how you could have possibly known that? Are you in my head?


I’m unreasonably sad that he goes by the name Greengrass. I get it, but it’s sad that he’s got to.


Of course it’s Albus and Rose. Of course it is. This is going to be good. I have no clue where you’re going with this, but I know it’ll be good.


The final line is just a cherry on top. I literally feel the same way, Scorpius. I’ve fallen into this story and I think I live here now. Needless to say, this was exemplary. Such a genius example of ensemble storytelling - thank you so much for entering this in the challenge! So, so happy that you were able to get this in at the deadline.

 

Joey



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