hi sian, here with your challenge review! (also counting this for july rvg because i’m multipurpose like that :P)
first off, i’m super curious what emmy’s line of work entails, because it’s got to be something a little shady if law enforcement is considered bad news.
but the fact that they’re both so quickly on the same page, and emmy plays along so well despite being completely thrown into this situation with no explanation or prior planning, definitely shows that they’ve already got a pretty strong friendship. the fact that they both were able to identify lorcan as the reason that they’ve kept their relationship a secret. and she knows that he would’ve somehow made a comment about her inability to cook in his alibi - and with zero preparation, her explanation presumably matches his, despite the fact that she’s entirely making it up on the fly.
you’ve crafted such an interesting story in just this first chapter! very interested to find out what emmy’s line of work is and why exactly she’s so hesitant around law enforcement, as well as finding out whatever lysander did that he needed an alibi for - did he actually do what the law enforcement officials were investigating him about, or is there something else entirely?
I can only imagine this isn’t the end of the fake dating scenario - the officers don’t exactly seem fully convinced that lysander is innocent, and ‘we’ve got no further questions at the moment’ suggests that there will in fact be further questions at some point in the future. so it looks like the fake dating will have to continue for a little bit longer, which i’m 100% in support of. :P
this was a wonderfully intriguing start to the story, i’m curious to learn more about both lysander and emmy and see how this fake dating plot of theirs goes - thanks for entering my challenge!!
Hi Sian! I’m here for our review swap! :^)
Oh so we’re getting right into it? Awesome. Emmy must be a really good friend if they’re playing along with Lysander right away – true friendship indeed. I do wonder what Emmy’s occupation is though; I’m curious to know what line of work they’re in to be consider law enforcement workers bad.
Oof! Why would Lysander need a fake girlfriend? Is he under arrest or something and he accidentally told them that he had a girlfriend? Yikes. Sounds like he’s in something knee deep.
Why is Officer Perks so curious about the relationship? Why does it matter? The comment made me annoyed just as Emmy was. Kind of.
Emmy chose a really bad time to drop by Lysander’s home, didn’t she? I can’t imagine how nerve-wracking it must be to face two law enforcement officers and be interrogated. Probably not what she asked for on a Saturday morning. I’d definitely be a bit more annoyed with Lysander at that point, and flustered at that too. Not as calm as Emmy, that’s for sure.
That must have been sheer luck, oh god. Emmy is either really good at reading the situation, reading Lysander, or just very very good at bullshitting this all up. I’m impressed.
WAIT. I want to know what Lysander needed Emmy to be his girlfriend for. I’m not a big fan of cliffhangers, and god this sort of annoying but it also guarantees that I’m going to be back for the next chapter. You’re a sneaky author.
What the HELL is Lysander up to? And why is Emmy so weirdly okay with this? What is her line of work? Why be annoyed of law enforcement workers? Since they enforce the law (duh) is her job really shady or whatever?
Hm. Emmy is a strangely assured character, and Lysander’s and Emmy’s friendship really shows through in this chapter.
Thanks for writing! xx
Sian! Here for our swap! (And the story, of course)
To mostly echo Emmy at the end of this brilliant opening chapter: What is going on here? Of course, this is a definite fake dating situation. But this fake dating siutation has a lot ore at stake than the typical fake dating situation!
The opening line is a clincher for me. "Line of work" definitely supports my first question of this review. But also prompts for more details: what does Emmy do? And why the presence of law enforcement generally bad news? Right now, I figure that Emmy is in some sort of black market handling business that isn't really for-profit because I think she deals with animals/beasts/creatures who need proper care. But these creatures aren't necessarily. Of course, I am making this assumption based on Lysander's parents and grandparents' occupation, so really, Emmy's line of work can be anything in addition to being differenet from Lysander's work.
But I think Emmy and Lysander are working together because it seems like the presence of the Aurors is also bad news for him. And later on, you know that this is true because all of a sudden, Emmy is confirming Lysander's unknown alibi: they're dating and what they were doing the night before. I love how you show just how close they are when Emmy is able to confirm his alibi with details that are pertainent to their friendship. I want to know more about their history together, and you even hint at Lorcan, who seems to be an added layer of complexity.
Lyander and Emmy don't seem to be totaly off the hook, as you paint the Aurors having some doubts. This isn't over yet. This fake dating moment is going to have to continue for whatever reason(s), and I am left with SO many questions! (Now that I'm on the reader-end of a mystery, I am reminded at how miserable it can be to have these questions with no near answer--but also how fun and intriguing and addicting it is).
Sure, I have many questions. But you have effectively set up a great first chapter with just enough information for the reader to glean what is going on, but then also for the reader to echo Emmy's question at the very end of the chapter. I know that this story is well outside your comfort zone, but I want you to know that I loved this chapter and that I am proud of you for posting this. I truly look forward to how the rest of these shenanigans play out! :)
Here for our review swap <3 Fake dating is one of my favorite tropes ever, so I'm really excited to see your take/twist on it.
I immediately like Lysander a ton. He's obviously up to some Shady Shit but something about him is just so charming and frustratingly likable? I'm a little amazed that Emmy just went along with it so well, especially because Lysander didn't give her any kind of explanation and there's police officers! I think that serves as a testament to how close they are, which makes them ship them even more. Friends to lovers is my catnip, and especially when in combination with fake dating.
I think you did a really good job setting up intrigue with this chapter. I obviously want to know what Lysander did that would prompt the Sally and Eloise to come by, but the first line really caught my attention, making me extra curious about Emmy and her "line of work". I get the sense that Emmy's a bit of a morally grey character, which makes me all the more intrigued about her and like her all the more. I enjoy the element of mystery in your interpretation of the fake dating trope; it allows for more layers and nuance, and I'm really interested to read more!
Thank you for sharing this, and I'll definitely be keeping my eye out for future chapters ^-^
hey sian, i'm here for our swap!
aw, that first line was great because i'm instantly intrigued by the main character - like..what exactly is emmy's line of work that law enforcement is a problem for her???? i love that we don't find that out in this first chapter because 1) it means i want to know MORE and 2) i do think it's sort of realistic since we're reading things from her POV and right now there's no need for her to tell anyone what she's doing.
lysander is obviously also involved in something dodgy but i love the fact that the two of them are able to play along and act like a couple without any previous agreement - it shows how well they know each other and how close they are, especially since emmy doesn't even think twice or blink before casually giving lysander an alibi for whatever. she has no idea what the whole thing is about, but she's such a good friend (and i assume lysander is the same when it comes to her) that she goes along with his plan ^_^
i'm always sucker for the friend-to-lovers trope and i also love how you incorporated the fake dating into this - it's not something i usually see done with the trope (at least i haven't read it like this in a long while - when it's used as a police alibi), it's always fun to read fake dating shenanigans but when you sort of turn it on its head, it's awesome :D
i'm very excited to see where you're going with this fic - this first chapter was a really great into and a great hook ^_^ also, emmy just seems like a cool character :D i really like her snarky thought-comments :P
btw i know you mentioned that this was totally out of your comfort zone but i honestly wouldn't have known that from reading this first chapter – it reads very smoothly and you’re doing a great job!
I'm so excited to be here and so glad that you decided to post this because I'm obsessed with it already. I love the first line because it's such a great hook that draws you into the story. I have so many questions just from the first time. I love how teasing that statement is. It's always great to be place into the action straight away. I always felt like it's really effective and engaging to get right to the point as such. I liked that pacing.
I already so want to figure out what is going on, what is Emmy into? how did she get into doing it? It obviously sounds she may not be on the right side of the law. I love this concept that, morally grey character is where it's at. Emmy seems really quite rational like she's really clever. I thought all the dialogue between her and Aurors was really well done like Emmy is ready for them in a split second. Emmy has so much potential as a character! I can't wait to see you build on her character over the course of the story.
it's nice to have a shout out to Sally-Ann Perks, I'm glad that she's doing something with her life. I had always wondered about that. I do love a cheeky little link up like that. I hope she's living her best life chasing after Lysander and Emmy.
I already think the idea why they are fake dating is so interesting like I think you've been really clever to put a bit of fresh take on that trope by doing something a bit more unexpected. I'm really backing this to be something really fun and special. I'm really looking forward to getting Lorcan and other characters involved in the story too. You always flesh out characters so beautifully!
This is such an super exciting project, you've got on a hook wanting to know what is going to happen next. I'm so here for everything that you've created in this first chapter! great job, well done!
Yessssss you're writing a fake dating fic! Omg and it starts out so mysteriously. What do the aurors want with him?? I'm impressed with Emmy's acting ability and keeping it together as much as she could. She shows so much trust for Lysander in this chapter and I can tell their friendship is such a solid one. I love this so far and will definitely be back for more because I am trash for fake dating fic and anything you write is always amazing! <3