Name: Vilja (Signed) · Date: 26 Jun 2017 05:03 PM · For: Chapter 1

Oh, how could you put such a message into so few words! This is wonderful! I always find it so hard to write about physical disability, it might just be a perspective taking problem, but I even changed one of my characters once so that I can leave out the wheelchair from the story. But what you did here is great, and absolutely believable. And it’s not just the story that you tell, and the feelings that you convey, but also that you have me guessing what might be happening here. First I thought that the story was about a Muggle (somehow we don’t see wheelchair people in the wizarding world, there are no kids with wheelchair at Hogwarts…). But the you mention Quidditch, and that’s a wonderful hint. He still could be a Muggle married to a witch, but I don’t think that anymore at this point. When you mentioned James (and the two young kids) I was instantly thinking of Harry, and there we go, you also have Ginny in there! That’s all so nicely worked out! Now I’m just wondering what might have happened with Harry. Was it an Auror’s mission? Was it an accident? I wish you had told me that. But even without that your ending to the story is very powerful. People do learn to adapt, no matter what.

Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 18 Jan 2017 12:33 AM · For: Chapter 1

You have such a unique writing style, the way each paragraph is so short and direct, mostly all as just one sentence. It makes it almost like a hybrid of poetry and prose and that's really cool.

 

And I really enjoyed this story! It has a very positive feel to it, and how after Harry's been injured (given how Mad-Eye Moody was missing limbs after being an Auror so long, this is pretty believable that something similar might happen to Harry) and lost the ability to use his legs (or lost his legs?), he has adjusted to that and what has become his new normal.

 

I love that you wrote just a very mundane sort of scene, emphasizing that this is routine for Harry now: he has chores to do, his son listens to loud, obnoxious music and thinks his dad is uncool, Ginny is going to a Quidditch match - just such domestic, normal things and it's through that that you really show how comfortable Harry is in that routine, and that he's happy with how he has lived his life. It's brilliant! Really well done on this fic, Hayden.