Hey Branwen! :) It's so hard to pick what to read from your page these days - I swear your author page has exploded while I wasn't looking, haha - but this one sounded so funny I couldn't resist it :P
Awww, bless the little Slytherins! :P I have to admit, I'm kinda torn between finding it really funny, and finding it kinda cruel, given that the kids ended up in the Hospital Wing and that Devil's Snare really is a dangerous plant (because, yk, dangerous isn't really funny...). It's so sweet how easily they were convinced, though - how willing they were to believe that maybe, maybe it was still somewhere in the castle and that maybe it was still guarded by Devil's Snare. Though how they got from that to that obviously it must be hidden behind the Devil's Snare sitting in a greenhouse is beyond me - seriously, you'd think they'd realise it'd be hidden somewhere more intriguing than just behind a few plants :P
I do love your James and Roxanne, though - I think I've read a couple of stories with them in before - they're so clever and so mischievous, definitely inherited from their Weasley parents! The creative streaks you write in both of them, with how they think up the tricks on the spot, taking something someone said and twisting it, is so, so clever and such genius. I don't think I could do that and I'm pretty good :P Also, it's a small thing, but I really like as well how Roxanne is good at Potions - most of the time for the Next Gen kids its DADA or Transfiguration, occasionally Charms, so it's a nice change :)
Roxanne's voice in this is so strong, too, and her character comes across so clearly - from the way she doesn't really bother to learn the Slytherins' names, to her disdain for kids who wear robes to school still, to how she's so aware she's the teacher's favourite. But then, you should know by now that you have a gift for characterisation :P
This is, as always, a great, funny, witty one-shot (but I didn't expect anything less!) :)
I'm really enjoying these Baby Roxanne and Baby James stories! Once again, Roxanne's prejudice against Slytherins is a major theme in this. (I get the feeling that nearly every prank she participated in was motivated in part by her desire to see Slytherins humliiated.) Where did she get this animosity towards Slytherins? Did George teach her all this? I can totally see him doing that.
I thought it was really funny how obvious the two of them were being. You can tell that they're not terribly experienced in the art of pulling pranks on others, despite the fact that they really enjoy doing it. Though, I suppose the people they were tricking were also really, really young, so there's that.
I remember from CINAS how Roxanne never seemed to enjoy taking the blame for anything, and I can still see that reflected here! Which was really cool. Even when she's confronted by Professor Longbottom, she's still grouching about the fact that the Slytherins told the truth about what happened, and blaming them for taking the bait. It's quite adorable, honestly.
your characterisation of children is always so good! I know you've got a few stories based around the next gen and you're so consistent with their characterisation. They always feels just like they should, children. I love this cheeky little piece because it's something that I could totally imagine them getting up to at Hogwarts!
I love how there is still rivalry between the gryffindors and slytherins that Roxy and James are slightly wary of them when they cook up this little gem of a prank! I thought the dialogue between the characters really highlights the dynamic between Roxy and James how they are really playing the other kids is really funny which fits in especially with what we know about James from canon. I loved that Roxy is his partner in crime. It does amuse me that children would think something as important would be hidden in the greenhouses though I guess it was hidden in the castle the first time!
I really enjoy the end scene when Roxy and James at deny all knowledge at the end of the one-shot. I love that Neville was seeing through that! It seems like this will be one of many adventures and mischief for these two! ;)
- Abbi xo
I feel like I say this every time, but your HP universe is so, so impressive. And I really love the way that you've explored the characters that appear in your novels as younger children. It's so fun to read about James and Roxanne as children, getting up to all sorts of mischief. It's clear from this story that they arrived at Hogwarts as a pair, and they're not going to let little things like Hogwarts rules stop them. I bet their parents were kind of glad that they would have other people to torment, instead of their brothers and sisters and cousins :P Of course, the first year Slytherins would be an excellent target for James and Roxanne (and I like the way that ties in with their reactions to Scorpius later on in Curiosity Is Not A Sin).
They work so well together - it's like they're so practised at mischief already that they just bounce off each other and follow their suggestions. I liked the way that it escalated so quickly - the way that they start sowing the seeds by talking about the Philosopher's Stone so that it seems legitimate, and then start reeling in the Slytherins about it.
I really liked the dynamics here - I mean, James and Roxanne still obviously consider that the Slytherins are excellent targets for their pranks, but the open hostility between the two houses that there was before isn't here. I mean, it's not exactly nice of them to trick the Slytherins into going to the greenhouses, but it did make me laugh and feel very in character - and clearly, the Slytherins here have enough respect for them and their families that they haven't yet learnt not to trust a single thing that these two say.
I loved the touch of Neville being the one to deal with it, too - it was so clever because it felt like everything had come full circle, with the link back to Harry, Hermione, Neville, Draco and Norbert the dragon. I bet he had a bit of a chuckle inside remembering that memory, the same way we did.
This is such a fun story! Roxanne gets precious little glory in general on fanfiction websites (and I don't know why that is, but it's a shame), so it's great to see her co-star in this one with James Potter. Is this set in the same AU as The Wrinkles Of The Road?
Love the bit of inter-house banter. Gosh, some of those Slytherins are quite gullible, aren't they? As if the philosopher's stone, if it still existed, would be hidden in a greenhouse (even if the hothouse contained Devil's Snare)! Honestly, snakes. Something as sought after as a component of the Elixir of Life and a key to immortality, is either going to have been destroyed, or extremely well-hdden and protected.
It made me laugh when James and Roxanne mentioned Harry having touched the stone, as though they themselves had been the ones to find it. However, I suspect it's not that they wish to bask in someone else's reflected glory, but rather they are setting up for a prank. The school had better watch its back in the future, that's all I'm saying!
I love the fact that, after earning themselves a detention and docked points, the lesson James and Roxanne took away from this wasn't to avoid misleading students in the future, but rather to avoid getting caught again!
You really do write creative and engaging stories! Thank you for another great read :)