I'm really excited to review this chapter for you, and I hope you'll let me know if you ever choose to continue this story.
First off, what a fun premise! I always love Reformed Draco stories, and this one seems to fit that vein. It's interesting to hear that Blaise and Pansy let him crash on their couch for four years. I once had a friend who lived with me for two months while she looked for an apartment, and that started to feel too long, haha. But it was nice to know that Draco has those people who he's close enough to to be able to live with and trust with his truths.
I also love that he's putting himself through Healer school. I really think Reformed Draco would fit in well as a Healer, so that makes me happy. :)
Now, their letters! Ohhhh man. The first thing I thought of was, "Why on earth would you want to keep your name a secret?" but then I thought, "Well, actually, if you were a war hero or a former Death Eater, that might be understandable." So I can suspend my disbelief there!
(Brief sidenote: 20 Galleons a month DOES seem steep for an apartment. Considering that would be 340 Sickles. Though I think we all know that JKR's monetary system makes no sense, haha.)
The letters themselves are so exciting. I tried reading them as if I didn't know who the writers were, but I definitely knew that Draco had given away his identity in his very first letter! He was awful at hiding any details about himself, haha.
(Second sidenote: At the beginning of the story, Draco says he was kicked out by his parents "four years" ago, but then in his letter to Hermione, he says he graduated Hogwarts "last year" and is only in his first year of Healer school. Continuity?)
I really do think this premise is great, and I'd love to read on if you continue. Well done on the first chapter!
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So I love a good Dramione. It is very much a guilty pleasure of mine (although I oddly also like Romione as well.) Anyway, I saw this and was quite excited, so I thought I'd give it a read.
First off, I always love to see a reformed post-war Draco. I do think the weight of his decisions would've affected him and that he'd have responded by maturing and opening his mind. I don't know if he'd become quite as open as you've painted him here, especially so quickly after the war, but I definitely don't think he'd be the same person he was at Hogwarts either.
Whoa. Lucius and Narcissa disowned him? Over a marriage? That's odd considering they went nuts trying to find him in the last battle. I'd imagine they'd want to keep the family together. It is a very interesting concept though. What would Draco be like if he lost everything?
As soon as you mentioned the ad for a place to live, I had a hunch it was going to be Hermione. When I saw the HG signature, I knew it. I'm so glad you had her figuring it out that it was him. She would've definitely put the contextual clues together.
My only real question is how did he not know it was her? I mean there aren't a ton of muggleborn students and how many of them have HG for initials? I think he'd have had to at least consider the possibility that it was her.
All in all, this was a cute little one-shot! Happy holidays!
Hello, dear! This is a complimentary review for entering the Body Positive challenge and I have to ask... Why is there only one chapter???
I'm a sucker for Dramiome so I had to check this one out. The idea of Draco and Hermione being unwilling roommates is adorable to me. I sort of wish the letter writing had continued for a while, perhaps with Hermione withholding the fact that she figured him out. But I'm also a sucker for slightly sadistic things lol.
I appreciate the intro part, getting some of the exposition out of the way and it felt like I was being spoken to rather than reading which was cool. It moves the story along nicely.
I'm not sure how long they were corresponding, though. It was hard to get a sense of a passage of time through the chapter and there didn't seem to be any breaks when you transitioned from one scene to the next. And the very last bit seemed to shift from past tense to present.
It's still a really good first chapter and again, I must ask, whyyyy is there only one? I need a good Dramiome fix lol!
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Oh, poor Draco, disowned by his family for refusing a combined marriage and without a place to stay or enough money to afford it... You can tell he's feeling lost at the moment. At least he had friends to support him, at least for a little while. From what you say it's clear that the war has scarred them all somehow, and it's nice that they are trying to help each other move on.
And so, Draco is going to share an apartment with Hermione... that should be interesting... I wonder how things will go between them... the exchange of letters was interesting. Actually, it was quite obvious who were the correspondants, I'm surprised Draco didn't realize it sooner. Trust Hermione to make the connection immediately, instead. ;)
Surely Draco is changed a lot, I found interesting that he liked Muggle literature and was willing to learn more about Muggles in general (and I really liked the nod to werewolves and that they are both trying to help them in some ways... I have a thing for werewolves...) I guess that's part of the reason Hermione is willing to give him a chance?
Interesting read so far, I wonder how things will develop from there.
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Ooh, a Dramione, this should be interesting haha. I like the idea that he would be strong enough to walk out and say no to his parent’s after everything they've been through, although I kind of feel sorry that he’s now been left to find his own place because those two are getting married. I guess it’s understandable though.
He’s been in love with her since third grade and he didn’t even recognize her initials?! Honestly, he’s not the brightest bulb is he. He even writes her name in his letter, aha, oh wow.
I like that they’re exchanging letters though especially since the room isn’t ready. Although at least she was clever enough to figure it out. I also like how she didn't say it straight away, she just dropped his name in causally. Very Hermione like.
I’m curious about Draco's reaction, obviously he’s shocked for some strange reason lol, but I wonder if he’s going to play it cool and try to be a bit annoyed he’s sharing with Granger, or be nice for once and make it obvious he likes her? I’m also wondering how you’re going to have the other characters react to this news to? Because this is probably going to be shocking, and I’m also curious as to who the roommates Hermione was talking about are? Harry and Ginny? Or Ron and someone?
This was an intriguing first chapter, it sounds like a good story!
- Shaza :)
I wasn’t the best student of my year, that title belongs to Hermione Granger.
I love the idea of Healer!Draco - it's something I can definitely see going forward, particularly in a scenario where he's bucking wizarding culture. There was a lot that got revealed in just a few short letters, and I think you did a great job of setting up the story with them. :) I'm really glad that Hermione was able to figure out who he was - their initials were huge giveaways - and I'm a little disappointed Draco didn't. He's a pain, but he's not that thick, IMO. Overall, though, this was a solid start to the story. :) Good job!
*nudges* Sooooooooo...What happens next?? ;)
I can't believe Draco didn't figure it out, but trusty Hermione did. He even mentions her name in his letter and still didn't put it together. I look forward to your next chapter :)