Reviews For (un)forgettable


Name: you-make-me-wander (Signed) · Date: 27 Apr 2020 12:24 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hi. Here for BvB's Blue Team. I ship Lily and Lysander, so I thought I'd check your story out :)


Your view of the trio was interesting. In part it's contrary to mine, since I see Lysander as the popular one and Lorcan as the approachable best friend, yet it's the same when I feel like Lysander and Lily can't fully communicate or act on their feelings, and Lorcan would be a little bit of a "safe" choice.


The starter sentence was such a contrast when Lysander says it in the beginning compared to the ending. At first it's almost in a desperate, exasperated tone, as if it's a kind of last resort, but in the end it's so soft and resigned and to all hell with how it'll be perceived, I loved it!


Kinda wanna know how Lily would take it and what she'd do, now that she's in a complicated position, but still this piece was short and to the point, and I think Lysander's doubts come across very clearly.


I really enjoyed reading this, and I'll make sure to check out your other works.


Susana    



Author's Response:

Aloha, Susana.

Apologies for taking so long to respond.

I have never read any stories with this trio before so I was sort of feeling around blind and I went by sound. Lorcan sounded hard and Lysander sounded soft, so I went that way. Plus I generally write the more unpopular people lol. I'm glad there are some fundamental parallels to your own writing, though. I feel that makes it a bit easier to connect with a story if it has elements you're familiar with.

Just want to say, I would never start with a sentence like that! I was so out of my comfort zone with this piece, lol! It was a lot of fun and I generally try to use important points like that over again in new and more poignant ways in my stories, so I'm very glad you liked the reuse of it.

I had always planned to write a sequel to this oneshot, but I haven't had a lot of time to write anything lately. It would touch on Lily, but it was more of a redemtion for Patty. She got portrayed in a very poor light for the purposes of this story and she's been screeching in my head for redemption ever since.

I'm glad you enjoyed and I hope you continue to do so! Thank you for stopping by.

-Liz



Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 14 Jan 2019 03:53 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hey there!

 

I'm here to drop off a review for the Magical Menagerie review event on the forums as well as for the Gryffindor Red vs. Gold Review Battle. Ohh. A love triangle with the Scamander twins. This is definitely something I want to read.

 

Aww. Poor Lysander. I felt so sorry for him when he tried to talk to Millie. It's clear that he's really nervous, but instead of being sympathetic, she treats him horribly. I think she did him a favor though. He's really better off without someone like that in his life.

 

I love that Lily stormed up and defended him. What a good friend! Ah, but this is tough because now I know that it's her he's really in love with. That must be so frustrating to see her date his brother.

 

Oh no! This date is a disaster. Patty is awful. How did Lily ever think this was a good idea? I mean I get a playful tap on the arm, but hitting someone hard enough and frequently enough to leave a bruise is abuse. And to then openly mock him for not being masculine enough and to tell him she thought he might be gay as if that were an insult. This just can't seem to get any worse.

 

Uh oh. Lily is confronting Lysander about what's wrong and I have a feeling he's going to confess his feelings for her. Oh no! I understand that he feels strongly toward her and he was all emotional, but I feel like that was super disrespectful towards his brother. Regardless of what he's feeling, I don't think that was okay.

 

Anyway, this was well written and had a very captivating plot. So much happened in a relatively short span of words.

 

Good work!

 

~Kaitlin




Author's Response:

Kaitlin! I was JUST patting myself on the back for replying to all of my months old unanswered reviews yesterday and I sogn in to find a new one today! I'm not gonna complain, I'm just gonna shower you with love. <3<3<3

I really loves this one shot and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I do intend on a sequel or two to straighten some things out. Yes, Pattie is awful, but it was also sort of the way she was raised. She isn't actually meaning offense, which is something I want to get into in the next one-shot when I get around to it. And yes, Lysander... Really didn't think that through. But do they ever? And Millie... Has no excuse. She is awful and I meant her to be. XD

I am so glad that you liked it and hopefully in the near future (after some much needed updates!) I will get around to that sequel. Good luck in the review battle! <3



Name: clairevergreen (Signed) · Date: 09 Jan 2017 11:13 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hello there! I'm here for the BvB Tag :)

 

First, I'm going to apologize, I haven't written a review in months and I'm a little rusty. But here goes!

 

Right off the bat, you have me hooked. I know this is a one-shot, but if you ever turned it into a full length story, I'd eat it right up. You have a ton of characters set up that I'd love to know more about. You have the dynamic between Lorcan and Lysander set up really well and I'd be really interested to see it played out more and in different senarios. The same with Lily and Lysander, I like how you've established that while they're twins, Lysander and Lorcan react entirely differently to people.

 

I am curious about this Hufflepuff that likes Lyansder. If you were going to expand this (she says hopefully), that would definitely be a route that I'd like to see the story go. You have such good characterizations of everyone and the setup here for even just a short story is perfect. I'll stop writing your story for you now, but seriously. This works really well as a one-shot, but it'd also be a kiler chapter one.

 

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this. The twins aren't characters that get a lot of screentime so to speak, but I always love seeing how people characterize them. Awesome job!

 

Claire



Author's Response:

Hel-lo, Claire, and thank you for stopping by! I'm super excited you liked this story and it was topped by discovering that it won 2nd place in the challenge it was written for! Would you believe that this was supposed to be a rom-com? Yeah, that, um... Didn't pan out for me...


To be completely honest, I am only a new fan of the next-gen and, well, I love twins and Luna was my favorite female character... I have heard a lot of people (mostly my friend Jill who is incessant about it) that this should be a longer story and while I am NOT going to do that, I may have some plunnies for one or two one-shot sequels. I'm glad you mentioned the Hufflepuff because I forgot about that person! Perhaps more than one or two one-shots. One for sure! It was almost my plunny for the Christmassy Love challenge...


Please excuse my rambling as I ramble through this reply... ANYWAY. Thank you so much for your review and I'll see you in BvB!


Liz



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