Reviews For Love, Not War

Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 24 Apr 2019 01:24 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Total Strangers

Deana! Here for your requested review!


So Roxi and Draco finally get to have a conversation, eh? I really like how you switch between their points of view, handing off the moment from one person to the other. And their beginning interactions are so awkward! Ahahaha. I definitely cringed at the beginning of their conversation.


I find it intriguing that Draco feels so warm towards Roxi straight away. I imagine Draco would keep up his icy exterior and snobby arrogance for a while longer when meeting someone new, but he does seem rather taken by her. Sure, there's seeing a cute person and reacting in a giddy or flirteous manner. But Draco's reaction to Roxi seems more of the "Romeo and Juliet" reaction, love at first sight (or at least, tender vulnerability at first sight). 


And I get a similar sense from Roxi, too. She's very interested in getting to deep, darker stuff out of Draco and then painting a clear picture of who she is. She seems to be rather spunky, determined to stand out as different, and a tad oblivious (I love how Tonks indirectly calls her out on going into the kitchen, ahahaha). Her story about her father is heartbreaking as well.


There's a lot of vulnerability in this chapter between Draco and Roxi. They feel so compelled to be vulnerable with each other after having only just met. I wonder why? And of course, there seems to be little time for their relationship to develop because VOLDEMORT IS AT THE BURROW. Nooooo! What a cliff hanger!!

Name: crestwood (Signed) · Date: 08 Apr 2019 02:56 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Prolouge: Blessed With a Son

Hi Deana! I’m here for our swap and also EvS team Emerald.

I have been agonizing over whether to skip into where I had previously stopped reviewing after a bunch of reading through the beginning to jog my memory or to just start fresh. As I’m sure you can gather from my appearance on this first chapter, I’ve decided to go ahead and plunge into this story from the start.

I don’t remember enough to justify skipping through - I know the rough character outlines, but I don’t recall almost any of the plot and, on top of that, I’m fairly sure you’ve done some edits to this in the meantime which would make my flimsy knowledge apply even less. But anyway, on the topic of the story -

This is a really gripping prologue. Right off the bat the stakes are made crystal clear: Voldemort is getting stronger and this does not spell happiness on the horizon for the Malfoys.

It’s a chilling image - giving birth in the presence of Lord Voldemort. I can’t imagine that is an altogether comfortable scene.

It feels exceedingly cruel for Voldemort to feel so strongly about his followers having children during the war. I always struggled to find how he was able to grow his following so strong with him having such a need for control. He would be the worst of the worst of bosses haha. But of course, the reason Lucius goes along with what he says in this chapter is the same reason he follows him; fear.

I’m actually not surprised that Voldemort wants to raise a perfect Death Eater from birth. In a way, I wouldn’t put it past him to have counted on this outcome. That feels like something he’d be drawn to - a very extreme form of his need for obedience and control.

Him giving Draco the Dark Mark from birth is WILD. Like, I can’t believe that happens right at the beginning of the story. Certainly sets the tone of the story going forward.

I understand where Lucius is coming from, but he’s being super hard on himself. He literally had NO choice.

He does make a good point about possibly breeding an absolute monster here. There’s sort of every chance that could happen if he actually keeps his vow. There’s a whole host of ways this could go terribly wrong and I literally can’t imagine this doesn’t come back to destroy everyone’s lives eventually. I can’t wait to see where you take this - the introduction alone left me on the edge of my seat.

Thank you very much for the swap, Deana!



Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 31 Mar 2019 05:01 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Breathe In, Breathe Out

Deana, my love! Hi!


Wow, this chapter was so intense! I have to start with how well you've handled Draco's reactions and written his emotions as he struggles with his trauma. I was affected by his emotions just by reading, and I have to say it was my favourite thing about this chapter. It kept me on the edge of my seat, especially when it was revealed that Saleena could help him by erasing some recent memories!


So, we all know that Saleena, Draco, and Roxi are the number one best things about this story, and I think that's why I enjoyed this chapter so much, because it's pretty much just them! They interact like real people and everything about them feels so alive and tangible. I don't know how you do it! Whenever they're all in a scene together, I'm so just invested and always desperate to find out what happens next!


loved Tonks' sassiness towards the Minister! She's the best!


especially loved how Draco found himself so affected by Theodore's attack because Draco saw himself in Theodore. I think that's a believable thing for Draco to believe and to read his realizaion was amazing. I really feel like this chapter was a turning point for Draco in his recovery, and I'm really excited to find out what happens next! Especially with his recent memories removed, I wonder what he'll be like now!


Good luck with April's camp!

Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 24 Mar 2019 04:54 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: An Explination

Hey Deana! Here for your requested review!


The conversation between Draco and Saleena was hea-vvyyy. There are so many little details and complexities that have gone into Percy's betrayal. It's interesting how Saleena at first states that she understands why Draco kept this information a secret and then continues to probe him for more informiaton on Percy's Death Eater activities. Come on, Saleena! Pick one and stick to it! I know that there's a war going on, but you're not going to win Draco over by going back and forth like that. And also... Draco clearly has been through lots of trauma, so pushing him to relive it in this way isn't the most productive, I think. Also, Draco needs therapy so he can begin to healthily COPE with this trauma. Goodness me, I have never felt so sorry for Draco Malfoy as I do now.


“I just want to know what he did to you, Draco. Is that so much to ask?” 




“Truly, I am. I never should have brought it up. You're right; it was none of my business. Can you forgive me for allowing my curiosity to get the best of me tonight?”


UMM, maybe? It's gonna take some work, Saleena!


But Draco is so easy to forgive her. That goes to show how close of a relationship the two of them have. It's nice to see Draco have someone he can confide in like that (even though I didn't really like her approach in this chaptr).


But that ending! It's rather ominous! "Don't let them change you." Ooooh, I cannot wait to see how she's changed! :P 

Name: javu (Signed) · Date: 10 Mar 2019 05:27 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Spy

So. Percy a Death Eater. This is really AU. I'm not so sure how I feel about how much AU this story is. I guess now I don't really know which characters to trust to be themselves?


I thought Molly's reaction to the news was pretty spot on. It's in line with canon (like her breaking things when someone mentions Percy's name, the boggart showing the deaths of her children, etc). And that her cry of grief could be heard from downstairs is fitting for the situation. I also liked how Molly understood what Draco was saying before Arthur caught on. It was a good showing of a reaction unfolding rather that just plain stating it. 


I also applaud you with Remus. I feel that you write him true to his character in the books. Like how he sort of mediates between McGonagall and the rest of them when they're arguing. And he speaks in a soft voice when he does. It felt very Remusy to me :) 


I do have two questions about Percy. 1) when Percy imperiused Arthur a few chapters ago, how long did that last? Is Arthur still under the curse? 2) Why didn't Percy try to join the Order as a spy? Unless all new recruits have to take Veritaserum? But I feel like he could get grandfathered in. Or that there would be a reasonable chance that he would be grandfathered in. It seems like that was a good opportunity to waste for Voldemort. 


I like the image of the last two sentences. Tonks, Roxi, and Fleur all together. They are all (or seem to be for Roxi) all very independent, strong women. I could see them clashing like nobody's business or being an unstoppable force if they band together!


Alwynse for your requested review ~~

Name: javu (Signed) · Date: 10 Mar 2019 03:47 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: A Drop of Veritaserum

Hey there, here for your requested review!


So we FINALLY get a thorough explanation of what a gypsy is. And I was a bit confused in the earlier chapters because we have gypsies in our world, and I was like, "aren't they just them...? or are they related??" But they seem to be different. Ish. I don't know that much about gypsies, so what do I know.


As for Saleena and how she's tied up all in this mess, I'm interested in where she's going to end up. How will her mother react? How will her Clan react? Will she end up taking charge and becoming Queen? The whole magic without a wand is interesting too. It has me thinking -- what if the Gypsies were the original magical people? And maybe others could harness magic but only with the use of a tool - a wand? That would be pretty dope!


I'm rather surprised that McGonagall did the interrogation on her own. Like, what if Saleena actually was bad and overpowered her and then imperiused her to tell the Order that Saleena passed the truth telling test? It's quite risky. 


My biggest compliment for this chapter is that you've done well in making internal turmoil for Saleena. That's one of the best ways to make readers get into the story. Saleena wants to be dedicated to the Order as much as possible, but she refuses to go back to the Clan. But going back to the Clan is the best way to help the Order. So will she give up something to defeat Voldemort??


A critique I have is about your perspectives. You flip-flop between characters a lot. And since your writing in third person, it's acceptable to change point of views, but personally I think it should be one scene having one point of view. You sometimes have point of views changing every other paragraph. It makes reading it disjointed. Here's an example:


'Minerva could not have been more pleased with Saleena's answer. "Excellent answer," she said. "I suppose that settles it then. Congratulaions, Saleena, and welcome to the Order of the Phoenix."

"That's it? Really?" Saleena could not believe that it was really that simple. "That seems a bit too easy. You mean to tell me that, after all the time I spent fretting over this meeting, that that was all you wanted to know?"'


You have Minvera being pleased with Saleena's answer. This is from Minerva's perspective, and thus, Saleena couldn't have known Minerva was pleased unless Minerva looked pleased. In that case, Saleena should think that Minerva looked pleased by that answer. And then in the next paragraph, you switch to Saleena, who couldn't believe it was that simple. So if you were in Minerva's perspective the paragraph before, she would have known that Saleena was thinking/feeling that.



Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 01 Mar 2019 10:16 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Spy

Hey Deana! Here for your requested review!


AHHH. I was right, I was right, I was right, I was right! Percy!!!!


But also... nooooooooooo! I really like how Molly and Arthur piece it together after Draco's stalling. Yeah, I suppose he's trying to spare their feelings, but they're going to be heartbroken anyway, so you might as well be direct. Maybe this is where my personality difference from Draco is really apparent, lol.


And I'm also curious to know why Percy chose to become a Death Eater. Was it because he felt intimidated? Threatened? Or did he really convert to pureblood supremacy? Hmmm, so many questions.


Ooooh, if I were Ginny, I would be so angry if I ever found out my family was hiding something THIS HUGE from me, but I suppose that comes from personal experience. I think the Weasleys should tell her, tbh. 


And Fleur! Are she and Bill married? I would be hurt if I wasn't in the room to be told that my brother-in-law was a traitor. Oh my goodness! But I suppose there is not easy way to break the news like this...


Things aren't looking too good for the Order right now. Minerva is also an honest leader. Dumbledore would be the puppeteer behind everything and everyone had be been alive... but I suppose Minerva cannot do that, for she's a different person with a different personality and still incredible skill and worth. And she's given the next steps on what to do... and so now we wait and see what unfolds. Gahhh, war!


(What is it good for?)



Name: Buttercup (Anonymous) · Date: 18 Feb 2019 09:45 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Spy

Hey Deana – Buttercup here for another review :D


I was really saddened that Saleena had to leave Draco – and so was he it seems – his only true ally and probably the closest thing he has to family at the moment. BUT I’m just super pumped to see Saleena interact with the gypsies – that’s gotta be exciting – I wonder how they will welcome her – with open arms or with suspicion? Hmm…


And I LOVE Roxi! She’s got so much spunk. I love that she’s a true romantic and an optimist – I really feel like this is what Draco needs - they compliment each other really nicely. I just loved that she intensively stared into his eyes when they met! And Draco gaping at her baffled by it all. Roxi is definitely the kind of gal I’d want to be pals with – she seems like a lot of fun.


And it totally makes sense that Percy would be the spy although it breaks my heart. I mean, he isn’t really part of the family anymore but darn did he have to sink so low? I don’t know if you can tell, but I actually rather like book-Percy (I know he’s a git, but idk I just feel really sad for him) – I don’t have any sympathy for him here though. The way Draco was hesitant in revealing this bit of information also shows a lot about his character – that sometimes we keep the truth from people to avoid hurting them. It must hurt having your son turn out to be a traitor – and I can totally imagine Arthur and Molly be in denial at first and Molly bursting out in tears, all of this followed by guilt, thinking it is their fault that he turned out that way.


Also I needed to add in that I loved this line: “A Death Eater?” said George in disbelief. “As in hail Voldemort, long-live the purebloods. I have a dark mark, let’s go kill someone – that kinda Death Eater?” hehe, that is such a Fred/George thing to say :D


I think you really manage to capture the paranoia of everyone’s situation – with the false accusations, the denial, the fear. This is such a dark time and I hope that Saleena will play a vital role in overthrowing Voldemort! Along with the trio, Draco and Roxi of course :P


Wonderful job!




Name: sunshine_locks (Signed) · Date: 16 Feb 2019 08:59 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Prolouge: Blessed With a Son

Hello! I’ve been eying this story for a while, so FROGs season seemed a perfect reason to begin reading!


Hm... Why would a well-known family of Death Eaters be concerned that the tides were turning toward the Dark Lord? The most obvious reason would be that they now have a son to raise, and a Dark Lord would get in the way of that.


Uh, why exactly would the Malfoys want a natural birth at home as opposed to one at the hospital? I feel like for the sake of the baby, it might be better to have the son at the hospital. I don’t know it just seems suspicious to me, unless it has something to do with the Dark Lord’s plans with this baby.


Wait, the baby has to go? Is Voldemort going to up and kill this child??? God, that’s—! That’s unbelievably cruel, but we already know what measures he’s willing to take, and what he’s capable of. The baby doesn’t deserve this.


“…our little Draco...” That just put chills down my spine; vile words from a vile person—if you could even call him that.


The Malfoys seem more pitiable than regal now, and I only feel sympathy for them as parents. Must be hard giving away the life of your only son, even if it was to avoid death.


Perhaps death would have been kinder, but still. That’s a freaking baby.


To live a life without choice—to me—seems unbearable. I know what it is to live without a choice, and it sucks like hell.


This really put a nuanced perspective on what Narcissa and Lucius are thinking of in regards to their son, and I truly feel for the Malfoys now, and I’m hoping that that things turn out okay. Who knows, I guess, except for you?


Great chapter! x

Name: Unwritten Curse (Signed) · Date: 16 Feb 2019 05:25 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Prolouge: Blessed With a Son

Hi hun! I’m making my way through the FROGS Finalists and am so glad that I am finally getting around to reading your story! I have been wanting to read it for a while now, especially since you shared those snippets during NaNo. 


This is such a fascinating premise! It honestly breaks my heart. I find myself supporting Lucius 100%, though. If my baby’s life had been threatened as Draco’s was, I would have done anything to save her. Anything. I can see why Lucius is upset with himself and feeling like a failure and like he has doomed his son, but I would have done the same thing if it meant saving my child’s life. I imagine that Draco will probably grow to resent his father for this, but he can’t possibly understand everything that went through Lucius’s mind in that moment. 


I hope to to be back to read more soon! I’ve got quite a few stories to read before voting, so I’m off to the next one now, but you’ve got me intrigued and I hope to be back. 



Name: Buttercup (Anonymous) · Date: 16 Feb 2019 11:50 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: A Drop of Veritaserum

Hey Deana – this is your super secret snake with the super badass name Buttercup coming to review your super exciting story!


And can I just emphasize how original this story is? The fact that you make the war ongoing is such an incredible concept. And this is one hell of a book already, and everything’s very complex and well-rounded with an more or less equal emphasis on every character. I think you’ve manage to create an exceptionally great characters in Saleena!! She’s guarded and careful, a shell needs to be cracked open so to speak. Saleena shows a lot of courage at multiple points – for example when she stands her ground to protect Draco, I really loved that scene! And her backstory is super interesting, that gypsy-concept is original af and it was great learning some more about it in this chapter. And omg her dynamic with McGonagall is really fun to read and I enjoyed all he bits about the gypsies. The plot really took a turn here!


Another thing that I really admire is your ability to keep the canon characters in character – everyone has their distinct voice from the books – a great example of this is when the trio found out Draco had been taken in by the Weasleys – the way Ron said “who cares – just throw him on the street” is very Ron-like (I love Ron btw. but he really can be a massive git!). Harry well, was Harry shouting and taking charge, but also the most sympathetic since he knows what it’s like to be an orphan. And then came draco snapping ‘the weasley’s excuse of a home” – I could hear his voice so clearly in my head!! I just really wanted to stress how great I thought your portrayal of them is.


Speaking of Draco, he’s also grown quite a lot already and I love when people make him more redeemable than Rowling did. And speaking of redeemable characters – I’m super sad and angry that Percy would rat out his family! There’s really no coming back from that. But my favorite character has to be Arthur! God I love him, he’s such a great man even if he’s not your typical hero, but he’s something much more important: kind, level-headed and always there for his family (and others). He’s hard not to love and I’ve always considered him Harry’s most important father-figure.


I’m just really excited to learn what will happen next – I feel like this is one of those stories where everything could happen! Just overall great job :D


XX Buttercup


Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 12 Feb 2019 09:40 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: False Accusations

HELLO DEANA! Because it took me forever and a half to fulfill your review requests, here is a BONUS review! And because this story is awesome. But I digress. 


I really like the beginning scene. Draco is finally recovering and is regaining his strength. Now that he's more alert, I really get to see the dynamic between him and Saleena. And I love it! They have such an incredible rapport. And I like how honest they are with each other. The Draco I've read isn't very honest with very many people, so it's refreshing to know that there's someone he can speak openly with. And Saleena, showing her stubbornness, trying not to open up, but Draco manages it. Love their rapport!


And that tension between McGonagall and Draco... what a great way to lead up to this Order meeting! Oofffda. So much mistrust. It clear in this scene that the war with Voldemort is really taking its toll on people. There's so much tension! And that secret that Draco's holding onto... oh my goodness! I'm glad that MacGonagall had the sense to bring him and Molly and Arthur into another room...


But I want to end on an excited note. WE FINALLY GET TO MEET ROXI! About time! There have been hints of her here and there and now... BAM! I love how you wrote Draco and Roxi first seeing each other, how you switch from their point of views, how they both have similar (yet different) instinctual reactions. This is the making of the main ship to carry us through the story, whoooooo! :D 

Name: MegGonagall (Signed) · Date: 07 Feb 2019 02:04 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Prolouge: Blessed With a Son

Babycakes! I’m here for our swap!! 


It’s been a while since I first read this chapter, and forgot just how horrifying it was. I can easily see Voldemort being unhappy if any of his Death Eaters had a child without clearing it with him first. He’s such a control freak, that of course he’d even want to control the reproduction habits of his followers. Absolutely horrifying. 


It’s no secret that even as a Slytherin I am less than fond of the Malfoys. I think Lucius is a slug, and that Draco was an unbearable twit. Narcissa I can just barely tolerate, because she saved Harry’s life. So the fact that you made me feel sympathy for all of them is a testament to your writing. No parents should have to go through what the Malfoys just did. And no child should be damned mere moments after being born. It’s truly tragic, and I really did feel horrible for them. 


Ya know, knowing how this story goes, like Lucius is obviously going to break is Vow. Yeah, he’ll raise Draco to believe purebloods are superior, but Draco obviously isn’t going to become a full fledged Death Eater. So won’t that cause his father to die, because of the Vow? Obviously I’ll find that out, because I swear I’m going to finish this within the next few weeks. 


I think that Lucius is right to think that Draco may end up hating him. I would 100% hate my parents if they damned me like that. Maybe it would be better just not to exist at all. But hopefully it’ll all work out for him in the end. Which I’m assuming it will. ;) 


I’m sorry it’s taken me ages to review this. I swear I’ll get my shiz together, and get back to this asap. Love you, my dear!! 


Hugs and love, 

Other Wifey <33 


Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 28 Jan 2019 12:10 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Healer


So Hello Saleena! So you really dived straight into the story with her, the scene was quite long but I didn't feel that it dragged at all. I was very much interested what 'you people' meant. I think you kept that going quite nicely and it all got unravelled throughout the conversation even though I'm not sure what three gifts might be or how she uses them. I like there is still a element of mystery around that.
I like how most of the information that we get about Saleena is through the dialogue. It is very obvious that you've painted her as very strong (she can stand up for herself.) She seems to have a strong moral compass in regards to the tribe that she disagrees with and against voldemort. It's an unique background I think.

Her connection to the Malfoys as long running is good like I'm just wondering what she had to do to Draco as a baby. 

I always think it's interesting that Molly Weasley always seems to superstitious about attractive women or ones that are good with men. She didn't like Fleur or she was unsure on Hermione when she thought Hermione had Harry and Krum on the go. I'm not sure what that's about but it's a running them right? I think it's pretty in character that she would be slightly disapproving of Saleena at least until she gets to know her more. 

- Abbi xo

Magical Menagerie/RvG    

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 28 Jan 2019 04:56 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Letter


Hey Deana!


So I like the beginning because it really gives us all the concepts and context for the story and it puts the reader right in the middle of the story so they have good ideas of whos whos and whats happening. I'm sad that Percy isn't more part of the family but that's something that was kinda touched on in canon. I know this is AU but it seems like some elements of canon you've using so it'll be interesting to see how develops in the next few chapters.


The part when Arthur gets the letter, I think you captured very well his instincts about something being off. It is a sign of his experiences and the war that is brewing. I thought it was a small but wonderful bit of characterisation.


Lucius' letter: you've done wonderfully here at capturing all his emotions. You can really feel like his emotions and that desperation that he feels wanting what is best for Draco and his pain at Narcissa's death. I thought some of the wording was interesting because he says 'she died to save him' which is of course what happened with Lily and Harry so I'm wondering if some protection or something will come into play later in the story.


I thought the way you wrote Molly was really good, you've really nailed that fierce protection side to her. She is very aware of her responsibilities to her family and also her own moral values. I liked the way you wrote her inner monologue when she is deciding about Draco. The dialogue in that end scene was exceptional done, the back and forth between Molly and Arthur was very well played. I'm glad that Arthur could stand his ground to convince her as it sounds Draco really needs help.


I think this story looks very interesting and has a lot of promise. I think the concept seems unique from what I've read so much. well done!



- Abbi xo


For: Magical Menagerie/RvG


Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 26 Jan 2019 10:02 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: A Drop of Veritaserum

Deana! Here for the magical menagerie, gryffindor's rvg, your requested review, yolo, and for the story of course!


So this is a big chapter in terms of background information vital for one of your major plots. Wow! I appreciate how you give a nod to our beloved JKR and use Hermione reading text aloud to give us a lot of necessary and crucial bits of information. I think your Gypsy plot is an interesting addition to the HP-verse, and it is something that I can see happening. A group of magical people NOT wanting to live in secrecy? I'm excited to see you explore that. I'm also intrigued by the sexism within this society as well, concerning males. I'm all for female empowerment, but I'm curious to know why males are seemingly made subservent. Then again, the author of that text is clearly an outsider from that community, so maybe the written facts are slightly off from the truth. 


And the conversation between McGonagall and Saleena is so intense! I had to read over a couple sections of it a few times to identify the many complexities you've layered into it. There is definitely a lot of trust issues between McGonagall and Saleena, and I can understand both of their perspectives. Good job to you as a writer for teasing out this gray area--this is one of my favorite things to write and read about! There is no easy solution. Saleena should probably amend her statement to "I'm willing to go as far as I can go" because the quickest solution IS to become Queen... though I think Saleena's insight might be valuable, so I'm okay with the compromised decision for her to at least finish her training and start to gain the trust of her people back.


Ahhhhh, so Saleena might not be a fairy in THIS chapter in particular, but in my heart of head canons, she IS. Lol.


Another great chapter, Deana!!! :D 

Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 25 Jan 2019 01:02 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Healer

Hello again Deana! :)


Alrighty so in this chapter we get some good background info on Saleena Blackwell. Initially, I thought she was going to be a veela, which is what your description made me infer, but it's a nice deflection tactic and brings interest by faking us readers out! :P Her mother's clearly got some issues, both personally and familial and I hope we get to see more of that and also perhaps more of what being a Gypsy entails. Also, she has a Gift?? I'm very curious to see what this actually means in the context of her job, as Saleena mentions having used it before a couple of times, the major one being on Draco as an infant. What did she do???? The only criticism I have for this chapter is that when Saleena goes to the Weasley's house, she seems very flippant about the situation and why the card was activated in the first place. Her professionalism isn't quite there, for me at least, so that kind of took me out of the story. Otherwise, I enjoyed the conversation she had with Molly and Arthur, and I look forward to seeing how this all plays out! Great second chapter! :)

~MadiMalfoy x

(Magical Menagerie 3: Team Wolpertinger)

Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 25 Jan 2019 03:19 AM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Letter

Hey Deana!! :)


You popped this into my thread so I'm just gonna double dip for the menagerie as well :P So I know this has been on my list for a while, and I'm sorry I'm just now getting to it. This is an interesting story because it's a Draco/OC set in a slightly AU world where he's had this curse of being a Death Eater since he was born, etc. but it's also somewhat still within canon-era Wizarding War, which is very tough to do. It's already QUITE dark and honestly, I am actually SO here for it. Voldemort branding an infant though, just, wow. You really went there right away! What I'm actually rather surprised about is Arthur's willingness to believe the letter from Lucius Malfoy so quickly and with minimal doubt, whereas Molly is absolutely not having it. Their argument reads very well though and it also helps the reader logic through why the Weasleys should take him in. One thing I'm VERY curious about is what kind of poison Voldemort gave Draco -- clearly Severus knew enough about it to slow its spreading but didn't have enough knowledge or resources to stop the process completely. And who is this OC Saleena you've now introduced as a Healer? Very very intriguing so far, and great start to your novel!


~MadiMalfoy x

(Magical Menagerie 3: Team Wolpertinger)

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 21 Jan 2019 02:08 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: His Side of the Story

O/ Hello! Magical Menagerie whatnots and things! 


And battling dragons is something she does in her free time, I see. She seriously cracks me up, taking on Lucius Malfoy the way she does. Understandably, she doesn't have the whole story, but even if she did, Lucius probably needed to be put in his place, anyway. And what she does know doesn't leave a very good impression of how Lucius has treated Draco, to be honest. I think it's adorable that she's so hostile stepping up against him in Draco's defense, even if he doesn't need defending at the moment. In fact, I'm fairly certain it's Roxi who needs all the defense she can get in this exact moment, ha!  At least he's going to help her out of that mess she got herself into -- being Voldemort's prisoner is not something that should be on anyone's to-do list. 


With all that aside, though, the talk between them was an excellent way to reveal all of Lucius's motives and how he's dealing with everything that has happened with Draco. What's more is that I love how Roxi continues to be an amazing person and argue with Lucius over her escape, not wanting to get him killed because Voldemort would know it was him who let her go (and also not wanting to punch him and take his wand). Plus, Lucius having the spare wand so that Voldemort will believe him, he won't actually be left defenseless, and Roxi would have something to take back with her as proof for Draco that she met with Lucius was pretty genius. 


Lucius is right, too -- Roxi's fear of heights when she's just faced him head on briefly beforehand is hilarious. There's just so much going on with Lucius and Draco's story! When Draco and Lucius finally reconnect they are going to have so much to work through, and ultimately I'm curious to see if Draco will be able to eventually forgive him after everything, despite having good intentions and trying to protect him. That's some deep stuff to have to process. At the very least, Roxi is free now, which is a huge relief! 


So, so good! I love how spunky Roxi is! Ahaha!



Name: starbuck (Signed) · Date: 21 Jan 2019 12:11 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Prolouge: Blessed With a Son

i was very surprised with the start of this chapter - i wouldn't have expected anyone not to celebrate draco malfoy's birth but as i continued reading, i can definitely imagine narcissa being full of rage at lord voldemort. seriously, how much of an evil dark lord can you be to force a mother to give birth at home with only lord voldemort and a house elf for company? i could imagine her wanting to scream at voldemort but trying her best to keep quiet so she wouldn't make him even angrier. being held hostage just because you're pregnant and about to have a baby is really messed up.

i'm almost close to pitying poor lord voldemort at all these children making it difficult for him to take over the world (draco, harry).

okay, back to the serious stuff - i really feel bad for lucius and narcissa, i can't even imagine how they must be feeling with voldemort deciding that draco should die. i can understand why they accepted voldemort's terms for the unbreakable vow. but voldemort just had to go and put a dark mark on a baby! he's truly a madman.

i think the whole concept for this story is totally original and very interesting - draco having absolutely no choice in the matter, his parents being forced to force the dark arts on him. i think that the consequences of this night will be huge.


Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 21 Jan 2019 12:03 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Captive

Hey, hunny O/ Magical Menagerie Madness afoot! 


Roxi's master of disguise dialogue is probably some of my favorite from this. This whole scene makes me laugh because I can just imagine Roxi arguing with Draco about seeing Voldemort, of all people, and Roxi's so spunky and sure of herself while Draco's losing his mind because it's Voldemort for crying out loud. And I love that instead of worrying about his own safety (because let's face it, Draco is in a terrible position at the moment to handle an attack from the Death Eaters), he's more worried about the Burrow and about Roxi -- I think it reveals a good bit of depth about Draco's character and who he actually is versus what people want to believe of him. 


Roxi forgetting her wand is catastrophic -- she clearly needs lessons in wand safety with Moody, that's for sure! And I love how Tonks immediately blames Draco for not stopping Roxi, like he didn't think to do that already. That stigma he's carrying really is a powerful thing, my goodness. At least Tonks is quick enough to admit that she overreacted there for a second -- I mean, she's naturally worried that Roxi is sneaking around, wandless, trying to sneak a peek at Voldemort. 


And George is sort of right -- it kind of does serve Percy right for betraying his family and everything. Plus, does he actually expect to still be welcome in 'his house' after everything that he's done? While I'm glad he doesn't set the house on fire, those bushes being set ablaze revealed Roxi's hiding spot and got her caught which is terrifying. Well, except that she's definitely a spunky little fighter and doesn't give into them without a scuffle at least. Her attitude is going to get her in trouble, especially when she uses it against Voldemort -- my goodness. 


The entire scene with Lucius and Roxi leaves me conflicted, too. Like, yeah, Lucius's motives in keeping his son safe are commendable -- it's clear that he loves Draco very much and desperately wants to keep him safe. However, I'm still so angry at him because it's all his fault to begin with. Had he not joined Voldemort, had he not made promises he couldn't keep and been so determined with his blood prejudices, the whole thing could've been avoided to begin with.  I mean, now of course it's a little late to turn back...but ugh! And Roxi is taking on a dragon by confronting Lucius Malfoy. Best of luck to her! 


O/ Ahh the cliffhangers.



Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 21 Jan 2019 10:31 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Total Strangers

And I'm back (for the Magical Menagerie) O/ *cue fanfare*


I'm super excited that we get a chapter in which Roxi and Draco are getting to know each other (and three things in common right off the bat is pretty gosh darn good). I think my favorite of those "in common" things they have is the sarcasm because their leveling cracks me up sometimes. Plus, it's nice to see a bit more of Roxi in general because I feel like we're getting some solid, concrete characterization in this chapter with her similarities (and differences) to Tonks in the eccentric way she dresses and overall quirkiness (and a touch of adorable clumsiness to boot). I also love how easily they're falling into conversation (well, after maybe a few hiccups and Draco looking at Roxi strangely). 


I also greatly appreciated the bit where Draco is defending Snape, who has been looking out for him for so long, despite what the Ministry or other members of the Order might think. Also, I think it's only natural for any young boy to look at their father growing up and want to be just like him. I mean, Lucius Malfoy is powerful, rich, and influential -- characteristics that are not innately bad. Plus, I'm assuming that Draco was somewhat shielded from the Death Eaters and that society while he was growing up after Voldemort had been defeated. Speaking of, I can imagine that Narcissa and Lucius were both in a state of great relief, believing that their only child was going to be able to get out of Voldemort's deal from the Prologue. It must've been heart-breaking when he returned. 


I think that Draco's misunderstanding of Roxi's intentions was probably a natural reaction, given everything he's gone through and given what the majority of people are sure to think about him. And I get Roxi's curiosity about Voldemort, too. She's been separated from the war (having been living in America and all) so she hasn't witnessed his reign of terror first hand. It's only natural for her to be curious about the man that everyone is afraid of.  And the cliffhanger when Voldemort comes to the Burrow is terrifying! Roxi gets her wish, after all -- but I'm not sure these are the exact circumstances she was hoping for! 


Another fantastic chapter, love!



Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 20 Jan 2019 11:40 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: An Explination

Hey, bb! I'm here with the Magical Menagerie reviewing event! O/


I definitely agree that telling Arthur and Molly about Percy first was a good choice. What I love more about the Percy angle you spun was that it opened up an opportunity to Voldemort to further infiltrate the Ministry -- it's so deceptive and so perfect that I'm pretty convinced that Percy never would have been found out if not for Draco. Also, Percy being the Secret Keeper and having his memory wiped to avoid the detection via Truth Serum was really ingenious on Voldemort's part (which further emphasizes the fact that Percy may have never been found out). You do a great job at maintaining Voldemort as an evil genius! 


I can also see why Saleena wants to see Draco's memory of Percy hurting him -- not that she wants to see him in pain, but moreso that she wants to know and understand. I'm continuing to love the fierce protectiveness that Saleena has with Draco (like I said, she's basically his awesome Auntie by default). As such, I'm totally down for her messing up Percy's face if she happens to cross paths with him (because she totally could). But I can also see Draco's point in not wanting to relive the memory of the Cruciatus Curse -- and Percy's inclination to torture is just awful. Canonically, he's already really estranged from the rest of his family, for the most part, so it makes sense that with his strive for success and power that he could be swayed by Voldemort (which you did a brilliant job showing in The Ultimate Betrayal). 


And just like Saleena cares for Draco, he cares for her in return and it's a really sweet thing. I love that he reminds her to not let the clan change her while he's away, sort of reminding her to stay true to herself (which I think she really needed to hear at this point). 


Lovely job, hunny! O/





Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 19 Jan 2019 06:24 PM · [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: Trustworthy

Hey Deana! Here for Magical Menagerie, Gryffindor's RvG (Gold!) and your requested review (and for the story, obvs)!!


Okay. This chapter has a lot of very, very important information compacted into it... and it's soooo intense! You have laid so much groundwork so far with this novel, and now you are starting to build up on it, of showing us the complex world that you've created.


Remus and Tonks are quite adorable in this chapter; they bicker like an old married couple. Tonks feeling threatened by another Auror is interesting; you did a good job in creating tension between them (gee, I wonder who this knew American Auror is... hmmm, lol!!!). I can't wait to see that tension unfold (and hopefully resolve).


Professor McGonagall is amazing in this chapter. She is austere and no-nonsense as usual, and she has such authority and respect. I love how she has emerged as a strong leader in the shadow of Dumbledore's death. I totally get how she can be wary of Saleena, especially with all of the secrets that she's hiding. Which brings me to our Queen-to-Be... there's a lot riding on how she's going to proceed in this War. Order Member, potential Queen, target of Voldemort, Healer... I'm stoked to learn more about her role and to see her development as a leader. I also think it's precious that she has stood up for Draco, too.


Overall, another great chapter Deana... I'll be back again soon for chapter 8 (and the remaining chapters of course!!!!!).

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 11 Jan 2019 05:22 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Love, Not War Chapter: The Spy

Hey, hunny! I'm back for more Magical Menagerie Reviews!


It's understandable that Draco would be a little hesitant to want to say who the spy is, despite knowing he must, because of everything that the Weasley's have done for him! It must feel like he's the one tearing apart their family (to him, I mean), when he's really just calling out a rat. And of course, as expected, learning that it's Percy who is the one who has been betraying them and spying for Voldemort must've been absolutely devastating for Molly and Arthur. 


I feel so bad for them. It taking a bit for them to resign to the fact that he is, in fact, the spy makes sense. I would try to deny it as much as possible too if it had been my child. And the rest of the Weasley clan reacting so badly to the news makes sense, too. Having one of their own go to Voldemort has got to be a huge betrayal (and now the Ultimate Betrayal's title makes a lot of sense). But George is right, Percy has been deviating from their family for a long time, like his family wasn't good enough for him. 


And with Saleena leaving, things are looking frightening for the future, too. Plus, I agree -- it wasn't right of them all to just accuse Roxi because she was from a different country. She was brought there to help, after all! I think Roxi and Tonk's personalities are going to be great fun together -- I can't wait to see more of the partners in action!


See you soon!


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