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Name: 800 words of heaven (Signed) · Date: 31 Mar 2018 12:56 AM · For: Exquisite

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SLYTHERIN REVIEW TAG.

 

Wow. Aditi, every time I read something that you've written, I am bamboozled all over again by just how good it is. And I a always so excited to see you improve and grow as a writer and try new things. It's very brave, and I wish that I was as brave as you sometimes.

 

Okay, so this is great. I loved it. Rose is crazy. Her reaction is super extreme but it works in this style and tone and creepiness. I was feeling Rose's anxiousness and frustration and angst and it was GREAT.

 

I'd actually love to read this story from Scorpius' point of view. I wonder how he'd view their relationship, and if he's just as crazy as Rose. Also those few moments before his "unfortunate end", those would be interesting to see from his perspective. What goes through his head just before he dies? I think your way of writing would really suit a story like that, and I'd be super excited to see your take on it.

 

Thanks for the lovely (and very creepy) read! Til next time :)



Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 14 Feb 2017 06:25 PM · For: Exquisite

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Hi Angie! Turns out I've read a lot of the stories on your AP, but there's a few I haven't :P So, I'm here with your prize review 1 of 4 for the Your Least Favourite Challenge!

This was SO good! AH! I loved the kind of minimalist approach to each scene, just focusing on the tiniest details like the ticking of the seconds, Rose's heartbeat, Scorpius' smile in her memory. You don't really tell anything. Instead you show all these small things and it adds up to create the whole - classmates moving to friends and then to the point where Rose falls in love and Scorpius doesn't, and then there's a barrier between them. The way you illustrated this was just gorgeous! It was such a lovely style.

Her thoughts are a reckless splash of memories on blank canvas. -- this is basically perfection

When he arrived, I was DEFINITELY not expecting what came next. Of course after remembering it's for the Dark Turn challenge I should have expected it, but you really caught me by surprise there. I had to read the last few lines twice because I got to the end and was like "WAIT 'EVEN IN DEATH'?" That's a pretty severe way to get closure, but I guess she got it :P Totally a dark turn though. And then it kind of colors the rest of the fic in retrospect, and rather than Rose coming across as sympathetic for having her heart broken by someone who didn't fall in love with her when she fell in love with him, it comes across more that she's an incredibly darkly flawed person, who would rather see her lover dead rather than with another person.

This was so well written - I loved the style of writing here and the way you twisted it at the end! Amazing work!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you liked reading this and that the dark turn worked! 



Name: quill2parchment (Signed) · Date: 14 Feb 2017 12:43 AM · For: Exquisite

This was so amazing! You have true rythm in your sentences. I found myself reading them over and over again... Really. I can't say enough good thinks. 



Author's Response:

Wow, thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm so happy you liked this!



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