Reviews For Painted

Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 31 Oct 2016 06:23 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Painted Chapter: Chapter 1

Review transferred from HPFF 5/18/15:

Congrats on challenging yourself to write such a short story. You really effectively used the few words that you had, and it had a very powerful impact. You did a really good job of covering so much material and time in this piece in a natural way - it's very impressive.

The range of emotions that you captured relating to her paint was also really fabulous: The peace it gave her, the rage and pain it helped her filter.

I enjoyed the repetition you used. It gives the story a poetic rhythm, making it feel natural to be so short and enhancing the sense of inevitability leading to her death. I particularly liked that you switched up the wording from Lily Evans to Lily Potter, keeping the repetition from losing its significance.

And ending the first paragraph with "She felt alive." Hello, feelings.

And the last sentence was PERFECT. Except that with Avada Kedavra she wouldn't have bled? But PERFECT,


Author's Response:

SAAAAAAMMMM!!! Thank you for my first review on the new archives!!! <333 


I realized I responded to this, so I'm going to transfer my response. :p 


"Hey there! 

Oh wow thank you so much! I really, truly appreciate that! ♥ It was really tough trying to get everything into 500 words, so this really makes me happy. :D 

Wow, I don't even know how to respond to this, because it's just all so lovely! All I want to do is squee and say thank you over and over again! ♥ 

I'm sorry about your feelings haha. :D 

No, she wouldn't bleed with the Avada Kedavra, but when the spell rebounded, it kind of exploded, so I imagined that it may have happened then. If that makes sense? 

Gah, thank you so much for this review!! I really, really appreciate all of the kind words and am so thrilled that you enjoyed this!! *hugs* 

xoxo Meg "

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