Penname: you-make-me-wander [Contact]
Member Since: 01 May 2018
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Hi there :)


I'm Susana, the Wanderess witch. I'm 29 and I'm Portuguese. I'm a Languages, Literatures and Cultures major and I work full-time as an Insurance Mediator. When I'm not working or studying, I'm most likely reading or procrastinating (yep, I'm a Ravenclaw), and I have the cutest dog named Hera.


I look forward to make new friends, participate in the community, and sharing my works and love for this magical world with all of you.


 


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All the truth about Jimmy Portman

Stunning banner by abhorsen

 

Destiny is the result of people's choices. And any single choice can change it completely.

 

In this AU the Marauders are still alive and free (more or less...), Neville Longbottom is the guy with the scar, and Harry... Well, just read and find out!

 

Golden Chalices 2018 winner: best dialogue

FROGS 2019 second place: best family

Golden Chalices 2019 winner: best completed multi-chapter


Rating and Advisories (required): Mature Audiences (Domestic Abuse, Sexual Content, Substance Abuse, Violence)

Content Warnings (optional): Dying/Grieving

Genre: Angst, AU, Drama

Tropes: Family, Fate/Prophecy, Friendship, Parenthood, School
Completed · Published: 01 Jul 2017 · Updated: 26 Jun 2019 · Words: 104924 · Chapters: 36 · Reviews: 804 · Likes: 233 · Reads: 5328

Series: Jimmy Portman's Universe



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 17 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 13: An unexpected guest


Hi Chiara. I'm back for Jimmy o/


One of my favourite moments of the books is always the return to Hogwarts. There's just something so... familiar about it, I guess? I just love it!


I'm still intrigued about Neville's distrust towards Peter, and I can't wait to find out more about it. And I feel like Peter and Jimmy are due for a good, long talk, but with Jimmy returning to school now, I wonder when it'll happen.


Ooh Mary is still peeved about Peter being Peter Portman, and I hope it'll eventually help get some sense into him so that he can come clean about what he's done. Although my heart goes out to him and Jimmy, because truly it seems he's raised him well despite everything.


Poor Mary, surprised and astonished by all the things she doesn't know about her son (and perhaps wishes she didn't know). And wow, did Mary say all those things about Peter knowing he was away? Or hoping that he wasn't, so that he'd hear her? She went off pretty fast, damn... I can understand her ressentment and hurt towards everything that Peter put her through, but being so harsh when she couldn't be sure whether he was still listening or not... It was tough.


And I'm guessing more and more, times like this will come when Peter gets closer to be discovered, and I'm all here for it. A little bit of chaos never hurt anyone ;p


Can't wait to find out how things will go from here forward for Peter and Mary, and to get back to more adventures with Jimmy, I've missed this story!


Love,Susana    



Author's Response:

Hey, Susana! So lovely to see you back! <3

There is something special about the return to Hogwarts, I agree! :)

Neville has some suspects... not necessarily well founded, but still he now knows that he's shaking hands with a Death Eater, so of course he would be distrustful... and yes, Jimmy and Peter need to talk, but who knows when it'll happen and how it'll go... :/

I think Mary is peeved about Peter's decisions in general... which is understandable, honestly... :P he needs to come clean, but it's not so easy... and yes, he did raise Jimmy well, at least!

It is quite shocking for poor Mary, discovering all these things about her son that she didn't know. I'm not sure if she was hoping that Peter would hear or not, I think in that moment she was mostly concerned in making Remus see that he was being irrational. But yeah, she probably wanted Peter to hear those things, and feel some shame, maybe. And I think Peter needed to hear that, too!

Peter is playing with fire, that's for sure. When and how he'll be discovered... well, you'll find out if you keep reading! :P

It was so lovely to see you back! Thank you so much for the great review! <3

Love,

Chiara





Gert lush banner by down-in-flames

 

Slices of Weasley family life through the years, featuring Arthur and his kids

(and particularly the one who is the spitting image of him, in more ways than one)

 

1st place in Noelle Zingarella's Origin Story Challenge

HPFT Featured Story April 2020


Rating and Advisories (required): Teen Audiences (None)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: Drama, General, Humor

Tropes: Careers, Established Relationship, Family, Marriage, Origin Story, Parenthood
Incomplete · Published: 30 Jan 2020 · Updated: 24 Jul 2020 · Words: 25867 · Chapters: 9 · Reviews: 130 · Likes: 50 · Reads: 18531

Series: Perfectly Imperfect Percy



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 13 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 2: 1982


Hi Melanie. Here for your requested review for Chapter 2, and I'll double it for BvB's Blue Tem :)


Once again, I'm loving your characterization of Arthur, and particularly this ingenuity of his that we've been so accostumed to. Loved it when he thinks about the twins that "toy brooms only went so high, and kids bounced, didn't they?". It's so Arthur!


About the situation with Cedrella, I can totally see Arthur being a little like those people who will a problem to go away if they don't give it attention. He doesn't really mean harm about it or anything, he's just generally not confrontational (unless like what happened here, which I'm guessing was an one-off). So it makes it more relatable when he says he's decided to simply not talk to his mother for the time being lol and it's understandable that he happened to lost it. I can only imagine how many jibes he's had to take over the years.


I laughed out loud when I read about the seven. "Now you're just being silly about this" XD 


Also I'm loving the way you're writing Bilius?! I wasn't expecting it lol my favourite line is probably "Meanwhile, Septimus will knit himself a scarf out of Yes, my dears and outlast all of us". I'm enjoying his sense of humor and the way he helped Arthur see the bigger picture.


On another note, I love your creativity. Some of your lines are just so amazing and on point, it makes me reminisce about that feeling of... Welcomeness (is this even a word? -.-) and warmth that was reading the books and delving into this universe for the first time! It's a great skill to have and you write it beautifully <3


Imagining Percy sharing a room with the twins... The chaos it must have been lmao and as for "dreckly", I live by it, so I can't really fault Artur there ;P


This was a lovely chapter, and again I can't wait to come back to Arthur and the boys' antics. A lovely read, Melanie :)


Susana    



Author's Response:

Hi Susana!

 

I do get a very passive, non-confrontational vibe a lot of times from Arthur in the books, though on the other hand we also see examples of him getting heated. I can't remember whether I mentioned this in my response to your chapter 1 review, but the apparent happiness and good humor of the Weasley family aside, I'm trying to be realistic about the stress and difficulties Arthur (and Molly) might have encountered, and I can imagine there are only so many times you can hear, "Wow, that's a lot of kids," before you want to deck someone. I've heard from people who only have 4-5 kids that they get really annoyed with little comments like that over time.

 

I'm so glad you like Bilius!! Haha, he was fun to write (the whole family dynamic was an interesting thing to dive into). That line, also, is probably my favorite in the entire chapter. :D

 

Your comment about the welcomeness and warmth similar to reading the books was just... I think the most wonderful compliment I've ever received on my writing?? Thank you!

 

Thank you so much for your comments, and I'm really happy you're enjoying this!! 

 

Melanie





Rosie Banner

 

Rose hasn't seen or spoken to Scorpius since graduation, but now he's in her office covered in blood and they need to work together to save her cousin. It doesn't help that the rest of her relatives keep being attacked and the two of them have somehow ended up as the chief suspects. 

 

Gorgeous banner by Beyond the Rain


Rating and Advisories (required): Mature Audiences (Violence)

Content Warnings (optional): Addiction, War

Genre: Action/Adventure, Romance

Tropes: Law/Politics, Love/Hate Relationships
Incomplete · Published: 21 Apr 2020 · Updated: 11 May 2020 · Words: 8121 · Chapters: 3 · Reviews: 34 · Likes: 18 · Reads: 240

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 12 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 3: Breakfast at Gwendolyn's


Hey Emma. Here for your swap :) I'll take the chance and double this review for BvB's Blue Team once more.


I thought Louis was going to be the first to find out about Scorpius being at their flat, but Ron almost did. His embarrassment was hilarious when he realized there was a very real possibility of Rose having a one night stand there, and it was so Ron it made me smile. Also the banter between Ron and Rose was on point, exactly how I see it.


Gwendolyn is an interesting character. I wonder if her ties with her mother and her attraction to Louis will make her a trump to the finding-Albus's cause, or if not how else she'll fit into the story.


I feel like maybe there should be a little more focus on worrying about Al's disappearance. After all, Scorpius was hurt pretty bad, Albus might not be faring any better and he was even taking, he's got to be in some serious trouble. Still I'm sure that'll be the focus in the story sometime soon, perhaps when Scorpius (maybe along with Rose?) starts looking for his best mate.


In any case I'm eager to see how things will go with Scorpius sharing the flat with Rose (and Louis), and their search for Albus and the people who hurt them.


Make sure to request a review when you update, I definitely want to keep on reading the story.


Susana :)    



Author's Response:

And hello again! I'm so glad the Ron scene made you smile. i get a bit nervous writing the really big canon characters because I love them all so much and don't want to get them out of character, but I don't think I could have written a Rose story without including a few Ron moments. I'm so pleased their dynamic is the way you see it too.

 

More on Gwendolyn soon! I'm happy she's caught your interest.

 

Totally see your point that they've not spent that much time actually worrying about Albus. I think Rose and Scorpius are both people that are used to being very busy and right now they're using their 'we're going to solve this and sort everything out' mindsets to avoid properly allowing themselves to feel fear and grief, but yes, that will come...

 

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing all these chapters! I really appreciate it and love hearing your thoughts <3

 

Emma xxx



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 11 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 2: Chivalry


Hi Emma. BAck for more of your story, as well as for BvB's Blue Team!


As soon as Rose thinks that someone dangerous might have gotten into St. Mungus and assumes it might be the person/people who are after Malfoy, I kept thinking if it wouldn't be Malfoy himself. While now that I've read the chapter it seems he was a victim of what happened, I can't stop thinking how that would be a cool twist, if he wasn't ;p


I can only imagine Freya's horror at coming home to find her living room looking like a crime scene, especially after having gone out for drinks. I'm sure she'll have a fright, but again maybe not? (Rose did say she didn't mind gore lol)


I liked that at first Rose wasn't so sure about whether to trust Scorpius or not. There was a lot to process in a very short amount of time and with the peril or possibly having someone looking for them and definitely Scorpius bleeding out, and Rose was smart and cautious about it. Still, at least for now, she chose to give him the benefit of the doubt, and I'm guessing in time we'll find out whether if that was a smart move or not. 


I definitely want to see Louis' reaction to Scorpius being there, and I'm eager to find out more about Albus' disappearance! Also, of course, to unravel what's the past between Scorpius and Rose, as there certainly was something there at one point.


Can't wait to come back to the story :)


Susana    



Author's Response:

Hi Susana! Yay thank you for coming back! 

 

I think 'smart and cautious' are very good words to describe Rose I'm going to keep them in mind for future chapters. She's careful but she still gets a bit of a thrill from solving problems and mysteries (although of course would rather they didn't involve her family.

 

Some Louis scenes to come very soon!

 

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave these lovely reviews xxx



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 10 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: An Unexpected Patient


Hey, Emma. Here for BvB's Blue Team and to check out your Scorose (one of my OTPs)!


First of all, I'd never thought about the Floo being disconnected for lack of payment, but that was creative. Also, can I have the same bag Rose does? I could definitely use it for my books as well xD


I'm intrigued about Rose's past with Scorpius, but right now more so about what happened to him. Is he running from something (or someone)? And what's with the Hospital's alarm bells all going haywire? I'm curious to see what you've come up with for this story, and I'll come back to read again for sure!


Great start :)


Susana     



Author's Response:

Hi Susana! Thank you for such a lovely review! So glad Scorose is one of your OTPs. I've not written them before but have always been tempted, so am enjoying writing this one.

I'd love Rose's bag too!

Really appreciate hearing your thoughts,

Emma xx




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Orphan


Characters: None

Pairings: None

Representation: None

Story Type: None

FFT Groups:
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Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: None

Tropes: None
Incomplete · Published: 01 Jan 1970 · Updated: 01 Jan 1970 · Words: 0 · Chapters: 0 · Reviews: · Likes: · Reads: 0

Series: facingthenorthwind sampler, Slytherin MFWHATA Winners, 2019 Collab, 2019 Collab, sanctum beach series



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 07 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 2: The End


I was wondering whether the broken camera was going to be foreshadowing and things were going to derail and well, they have. Rose's heartbreak is instant and I feel for her and the finality of the situation.


Looking back on the challenge that originated the fic and the prompts for each chapter, I think you did a great job coming up with this story and wrote it beautifully. I loved it, and I will definitely check out your other works.


It was a lovely read :)


Susana    



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 07 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: A Surprise


Hey! Here for BvB's Blue Team and to check out your Scorose ^^


The details you put into this chapter and their description are absolutely stunning. I can "see" them perfectly, and it's like I'm right there with Rose. Feeling her elation and excitement, then her confusion as those emotions dwindle, and that ends up turning into frustration, embarrassment and disapointment.


I'm definitely intrigued about what could have happened to Scorpius for him to miss their anniversary and without any kind of message or warning beforehand, so I'll be reading into Chapter 2 right away.


Susana    



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this story and for your lovely comments :) Poor Rose - she went to so much trouble, for what? Well, I guess you have to read on and find out!

 

Thanks once again,

 

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Orphan


Characters: None

Pairings: None

Representation: None

Story Type: None

FFT Groups:
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Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: None

Tropes: None
Incomplete · Published: 01 Jan 1970 · Updated: 01 Jan 1970 · Words: 0 · Chapters: 0 · Reviews: · Likes: · Reads: 0

Series: facingthenorthwind sampler, Slytherin MFWHATA Winners, 2019 Collab, 2019 Collab, sanctum beach series



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 06 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: chapter one


Hi Deni. Here for your requested review!


In general I find JSP a really intriguing character, so I couldn't help but be delighted when you requested for this story to find out what you came up with here ;p


So far, I'm finding Erin really interesting, there's so much to her already. I want to know more about her obvious past with James as well as with Dom, and I'm also curious about her job, more specifically where she sees herself, since it seems that Erin is not quite yet where and what she wants to be in life.


I also found interesting Erin's interactions with James here. There seems to be no love lost between them, but at the same time that interaction when they exited the club was telling of something deeper running between them, so I cannot wait to find out more about them.


Last but not least, I'm eager to know what happened with Dom! It's a bit of a mystery thus far, and obviously something big happened, and now with Scorpius' news it looks like things could get complicated (if only I didn't love a little bit of chaos).


Great first chapter, Deni. Feel free to request again soon :)


Susana    





Fantastic banner by Amoretti @ tda

 

 

A deeply riveting exposé on the life of Oliver Wood.

Because Iris Skeeter just cannot help herself.


Rating and Advisories (required): Mature Audiences (Consent Issues, Sexual Content, Slurs, Substance Abuse, Violence)

Content Warnings (optional): Addiction, Breakups, Dying/Grieving

Genre: Angst, Drama

Tropes: Careers, School, Slow Build/Slow Burn, Sports
Incomplete · Published: 28 Mar 2020 · Updated: 16 Jun 2020 · Words: 15764 · Chapters: 5 · Reviews: 23 · Likes: 4 · Reads: 199

Series: Secrets and Lies



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 06 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 2: An Interview With Oliver Wood


Back for BvB's Blue Team!


I laughed out loud when Oliver didn't seem to associate Iris to her aunt. Of course everyone in the magical world would know of Rita Skeeter and what a leech she was, and only Oliver Wood, Quidditch player extraordinaire who always seems to be in his own little world, wouldn't make that connection about her niece and definitely be more wary and guarded walking into that interview, even if he'd dealt with Rita before.


And I like how Iris approaches her interviews as dinner dates. She's definitely cunning and unafraid (I'm wondering what her Hogwarts House was...) and knows how to take advantage of her attributes and best qualities (and for now, at least, she seems to want to keep things real and not make details up like her Aunt used to).


I'm definitely intrigued about Oliver's visions of Cedric. I'm left wondering if you've followed canon here and Cedric's death was as we know it from the books, or if something else happened and that's why Cedric's appearances are so important. Also Oliver and Cedric's relationship, I'm curious about what happened before Cedric's death, and how it's still very obviously impacting Oliver.


As for constructive criticism, I'll admit this is more something that ticks me off and not really about your writing, but I always find it a bit... I don't know if strange is the right word for it, but it rubs me off the wrong way when characters that don't really know each other (at all, or not that well) have some kind of intimacy. In this particulr case, it was Oliver and Iris' embrace amidst his anxiety attack (in some other fics, for instance, it's a kiss on the forehead). It seems like these are such intimate actions that I find it off-character when it happens, whoever the characters are, if you know what I mean. It's a pet-peeve of mine really, but perhaps a little more build up to their embrace would make it more meaningful.


However, and on that note, the kiss on the cheek felt more natural after their date. They've gotten to know each other a little bit, enjoyed the other's company, it doesn't feel as out of place here.


As for the anxiety attack, I feel like a little more description could be necessary, as afterwards we realize it was indeed an anxiety attack, but while it's happening it wasn't really clear for me.


Lastly, while I don't mind the different POV's that you alternate often between Iris and Oliver, I think breaks between the parts are needed. It's simpler for the reader to understand that there's a break in the narrative and that at least the scene has ended, and/or that there will be a change in POV. Perhaps use an horizontal ruler, or a couple letters or symbols in between POV's and the reading will flow much better.


I'm hoping I've helped with the cc part and that I haven't been too blunt, and in any case the story is already good and engaging and raises curiosity, so I'll definitely want to check out the next chapters.


Feel free to request again soon :)


Susana    



Author's Response:

Oliver is definitely a laugh... At least I try for him to be. I have very particular headcanons for him, though some stories are a divergence. No matter what he can't cook lol! At least not very well. I think he handles himself fine in this one.

Cedric died in the maze, the same way that he was meant to. Oh it's definitely impacting him. He hates himself for everything that happened (but I'll get to that soon.) 

 

Thanks for pointing that out! I totally agree that when I have anxiety attacks I really hate when strangers are trying to comfort me. Like I want my friends to help me deal with it. But this attack wasn't particularly an attack. If you stay tuned there will be 100% real ones in the future. Not that this one wasn't real and that he wasn't upset, it's just that Oliver can get cracy stressed and anxious and this is really just like, a level two for him. But I appreciate your input!! Thank youuuu. Helps the story be better.

 

I'm not a super huge fan of using *** and such for page breaks to separate scenes, because most of my favourite authors don't do it and I find it that it takes a reader out of the story. It's a little metatheatre (that's nothing against people who do decide to use them, and sometimes I do/have used breaks like that in the past.) I usually just include a bigger amount of spacing, so maybe I have to go deal with that because my formatting doesn't always copy and paste properly from my program to the archives. Thanks though.

 

You weren't too blunt at all and I'll definitely be back. Thanks!!

Lily



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 06 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: Ladies and Gentlemen, She Has an Idea!


Hi Lily. Here for your requested review, as well as for BvB's Team Blue!


The first chapter posed an interesting premise. Anyone who is the subject to an exposé like this will always raise curiosity on the readers, since the not knowing does lure people in, so Iris is definitely smart to have gone for it. I'm sure that in great part it was for her readers and her own gain career-wise, but it already feels like there will be more to the story.


And then, of course, there's the mystery about Oliver's life. Is he trying to hide something? Is he just naturally shy or a bit of an introvert, one that would rather enjoy his life and not flaunt about his fame? Or has he gone through something more complicate,d perhaps traumatic.


I'm surely intrigued by the plot, and I can't wait to see where the story will go!


On to chapter 2


Susana    



Author's Response:

Hi Susana! Thanks for your kind review. I am really glad that you're thinking the story is an interesting premise. And honestly the reason that Oliver's hiding things is a big mix of all of the things you mentioned above... But it's about to get pretty dark haha.

 

Thanks for taken the time to read!





Two weeks ago, they saw her smiling and laughing.

 

Now, they are in hiding and her family has made the ultimate sacrifice.


Rating and Advisories (required): Mature Audiences (Violence)

Content Warnings (optional): Dying/Grieving, War

Genre: Angst

Tropes: None
Completed · Published: 07 Jan 2017 · Updated: 07 Jan 2017 · Words: 2970 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 1 · Likes: 1 · Reads: 32

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 03 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


Hi Rhaenyra. Here for BvB's Team Blue!


What first drew me to your story was its summary, which was intriguing and didn't reveal to whom it referred to, so it piqued my curiosity.


But then, more than the grief about Marlene and the tragedy that her family suffered, I think your fic really reflects James and Lily's impotence at what was happening around them, and you conveyed their emotions and frustrations really well. On a sadder note, there's also a nod to the future that they ended up not having and experiencing with Harry, which :'(


The ending was devastatingly simple and powerful to me, as I'm sure we all wish Lily would be able to rock little Harry to sleep for a long, long time, instead of the near doom they had looming over their heads, and I liked (if like is the right verb here) the way something so innocent could be the premonition to what was to come.


Lovely piece <3


Susana    




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Orphan


Characters: None

Pairings: None

Representation: None

Story Type: None

FFT Groups:
Rating and Advisories (required): (None)

Content Warnings (optional): None

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Incomplete · Published: 01 Jan 1970 · Updated: 01 Jan 1970 · Words: 0 · Chapters: 0 · Reviews: · Likes: · Reads: 0

Series: facingthenorthwind sampler, Slytherin MFWHATA Winners, 2019 Collab, 2019 Collab, sanctum beach series



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 03 May 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: Arrival at the Malfoys' Manor


Hey Branwen. Here for BvB's Blue Team! As Scorose is one of my favorite ships, I thought I'd give your story some love.


When Scorpius predicted that Rose would elbow him and countered it with a sweet kiss on the cheek, it was such a cute moment, the way they're in sync. I can totally see Scorpius trying to get Rose flustered often, and Rose being the one who's trying to get him into trouble.


On that note though, I was not expecting Rose to be so Scorpius-crazed but I can definitely understand that new-relationship/need-to-be-close craving that we experience in the beginning of relationships, especially after some time apart. That said, I was surely hoping they were going to get caught in a more compromising position xD


Also, I cannot believe (!) I haven't yet checked your fic "Curiosity is not a sin". I'll have to read it soon?? Definitely!


Rose's introduction to Draco and Astoria was lovely, and overall successfull. Yet last but not least, I couldn't not comment on Draco kinda ripping one to Scorpius at the end. I once wrote a fic about a teenage girl having to get "the talk" from her parents, and I can only imagine that Draco with Scorpius might have gone just as disastrous ;P


I'll always be back to check on your writing, as I've told you before. Your writing is the best <3


Susana    







Banner by me.

Lysander Scamander's biggest problem is that his best friend is dating his twin brother instead of him.
2nd place for dirigibleplums' First Line Challenge


Characters: Original Female Character

Pairings: Lily Luna Potter/Lysander Scamander (HP)

Representation: None

Story Type: One-Shot

FFT Groups:
Rating and Advisories (required): Mature Audiences (Slurs)

Content Warnings (optional): Bullying

Genre: Drama, Fluff, Romance

Tropes: Friendship, Love/Hate Relationships, Slow Build/Slow Burn
Completed · Published: 28 Dec 2016 · Updated: 04 Jan 2017 · Words: 3285 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 3 · Likes: 1 · Reads: 41

Series: House of Stone AU



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 27 Apr 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


Hi. Here for BvB's Blue Team. I ship Lily and Lysander, so I thought I'd check your story out :)


Your view of the trio was interesting. In part it's contrary to mine, since I see Lysander as the popular one and Lorcan as the approachable best friend, yet it's the same when I feel like Lysander and Lily can't fully communicate or act on their feelings, and Lorcan would be a little bit of a "safe" choice.


The starter sentence was such a contrast when Lysander says it in the beginning compared to the ending. At first it's almost in a desperate, exasperated tone, as if it's a kind of last resort, but in the end it's so soft and resigned and to all hell with how it'll be perceived, I loved it!


Kinda wanna know how Lily would take it and what she'd do, now that she's in a complicated position, but still this piece was short and to the point, and I think Lysander's doubts come across very clearly.


I really enjoyed reading this, and I'll make sure to check out your other works.


Susana    



Author's Response:

Aloha, Susana.

Apologies for taking so long to respond.

I have never read any stories with this trio before so I was sort of feeling around blind and I went by sound. Lorcan sounded hard and Lysander sounded soft, so I went that way. Plus I generally write the more unpopular people lol. I'm glad there are some fundamental parallels to your own writing, though. I feel that makes it a bit easier to connect with a story if it has elements you're familiar with.

Just want to say, I would never start with a sentence like that! I was so out of my comfort zone with this piece, lol! It was a lot of fun and I generally try to use important points like that over again in new and more poignant ways in my stories, so I'm very glad you liked the reuse of it.

I had always planned to write a sequel to this oneshot, but I haven't had a lot of time to write anything lately. It would touch on Lily, but it was more of a redemtion for Patty. She got portrayed in a very poor light for the purposes of this story and she's been screeching in my head for redemption ever since.

I'm glad you enjoyed and I hope you continue to do so! Thank you for stopping by.

-Liz





Gert lush banner by down-in-flames

 

Slices of Weasley family life through the years, featuring Arthur and his kids

(and particularly the one who is the spitting image of him, in more ways than one)

 

1st place in Noelle Zingarella's Origin Story Challenge

HPFT Featured Story April 2020


Rating and Advisories (required): Teen Audiences (None)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: Drama, General, Humor

Tropes: Careers, Established Relationship, Family, Marriage, Origin Story, Parenthood
Incomplete · Published: 30 Jan 2020 · Updated: 24 Jul 2020 · Words: 25867 · Chapters: 9 · Reviews: 130 · Likes: 50 · Reads: 18531

Series: Perfectly Imperfect Percy



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 26 Apr 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: 1978


Hey, Melanie. Here for your requested review, as well as for BvB's Blue Team.


First, and addressing your post on my review thread, let me tell you that I love slice of life. I feel like it gives us so many missing moments from the main storylines, and they're delicious to read! It's also my first Arthur/Molly fic, so I'm curious on how you went about it.


The bantering in the beginning with Arthur's colleagues was lighthearted and fun, and I can totally see Arthur blushing and feeling a little embarrassed whenever they teased him about the kids. He seems like such a simple man that really, having that many children almost warrants some teasing.


His displeasure about the low budget that the Department gets also seems on point for him. Not only Arthur seems passionate about his job and what it entails, he understands its importance when it seems like everyone else at the Ministry has forgotten it, and the same goes for the Misuse of Muggle Artifacts Dpt.


Molly's fierceness is always welcome to me. Despite how lovely and nurturing she can be, we also know how strong she is. I can't even imagine raising so many children with Arthur working full-time at the Ministry, but also how nerve-wrecking it must have been to have it happen amidst a war. The stress and the doubt must have been overwhelming, so no wonder she snapped at Arthur so easily.


On a lighter note, Arthur's innability to properly scold his sons is awesome xD "Charlie set the hedge on fire today!" replied by "Proper job" might be my favourite part of all this rambling tbh.


That ending, albeit sad for the way Arthur has resigned himself to his new future, also brings hope for the health of his familiar relationships, as well as the opportunity to make this new department, his dream job department, to what he wants it to be. We know, of course, that it wasn't easy, and still isn't in canon during the 90s, but I'm sure at some point or another Arthur will find the silver lining he can't see right now.


Great first one-shot. I'd love to read from you again.


Susana     



Author's Response:

Hi Susana! So glad to hear your thoughts.

 

It has really been delightful to dig deeper into Arthur's character and tackle him as a protagonist. I scoured the books for some Arthur moments even I had forgotten since my last read of the books, which has admittedly been a while, and piece together some seemingly contradictory or at least curious things about him and bring him to life as something more than just what Harry sees.

 

Weasleys turning red is such a thing (as a redhead with rosacea, I know too well), and for some reason I like to picture Arthur being sort of bashful and blushing easily when teased about even innocuous things -- like just a nice, modest guy -- even though he also can be quite a powerful figure and believes in standing up for what he thinks is right.

 

Molly has all my empathy for how difficult her days must have been raising 7 kids -- or even just 5, as we see here! Five kids under the age of 8!! And ultimately I love to think of Arthur/Molly as an example of a successful, overall happy marriage, a good team who really support one another -- but I also wanted to depict that relationship realistically, and with so many kids AND their financial situation (at least after this point), I am convinced there must have been times when their marriage was on thin ice.

 

Ah, I LOVE that you quoted back to me that "proper job" line. One of my personal favorites from this chapter. I imagine, being a wizard, you have to become used to some level of damage and destruction from kids whose magic is beginning to manifest. XD

 

Thank you so much for this -- I think I already requested in your review thread for the second chapter so I look forward to hearing your thoughts as Arthur's life and family progress!

 

Melanie





 

Adoration only grows, fast and strong, until I cannot live without him. In my world, he replaced the sun, and I breathed only at his command. 

Lovers alone wear sunlight - e.e. cummings 

 

Beautiful banner by lonely star xo @TDA


Rating and Advisories (required): Teen Audiences (Violence)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: Dark, Drama, Romance

Tropes: Destructive Romance, Soulmates, Star-Crossed Romance, Troubled, but Cute
Completed · Published: 31 Oct 2016 · Updated: 31 Oct 2016 · Words: 3908 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 4 · Likes: 5 · Reads: 951

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 18 Apr 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: Blue Leather


Hi, Aphoride. Here for BvB's Blue Team!

I am surrender to your writing! The poetry you weaved into the story is out of this world, it reads so effortlessly, and your rendition of Albus' feelings truly is poetic, I absolutely loved it. The way you used the senses to guide the prose is a skill awfully hard to achieve but you aced it :)

While light is a motif throughout the story (also worthy of note, your descriptions are amazing oh my god), I particularly liked how the plot seems "full" of light when there's the darkness lurking during its entirety, and almost balancing the light in a way at the end.

Now that ending was so surprising and unexpected, I did not see it coming at all. While reading the story it felt like there was something a bit off or out of place but I couldn't exactly tell what, but the vampirism really snuck up on me. In any case, the ending scene has a... I'm gonna go with poetic again because honestly, I feel as though you've made prose poetic here, so the ending scene is poetic and this beauty in its simplicity and innocence, even if it's rather tragic.

This was a great read. I'll definitely be back for more of your writing!

Susana



Author's Response:

Hey - thank you so much for stopping by! :) 

 

Ahhh thank you so much! This is a super old story, haha, from wow, something like almost ten years ago, and it's one where I first kinda felt like I'd settled on something even remotely like a style, yk? So I'm still really fond of it - it's a got a soft spot just for it, haha. It was so much fun to write, too, with all the description and the benefit of ambiguity meaning it could perhaps be a bit more flowery than it would otherwise have been :P 

 

I loved the light motif - and yk, I liked the idea of vampires in light: there was some ironic about it which appealed to me, since vampires are so commonly afraid of or killed by light, especially sunlight, so it was fun to play with that making light such a big thing and such an aesthetic thing for Albus :) 

 

Ahaha - I'm glad, I'm glad! :P I really tried with it to make the twist unobvious - I hoped that people would be thrown off and maybe think of Hyperion perhaps as the vampire, if they thought anyone was at all, which would make the ending still a twist then? And ahhh that last scene was so much fun to write: there's something fairytale-esque about the bower and flowers and it's super romantic, but it is definitely tragic too, because it's a sort of rebirth, rather than 'just sleeping', yk? 

 

Thank you so so much for the review - I'm so glad you liked it! :) 

 

Laura xx

 

For the sandcastle building HC finale 2020



Incomplete · Published: 13 Mar 2017 · Updated: 25 Jan 2024 · Words: 399408 · Chapters: 42 · Reviews: 271 · Likes: 223 · Reads: 33515

Series: Pride of Gryffindor Winners, FROGS Winners, Gryffindor Featured Fics



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 15 Apr 2020 · Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning After the End


Hi, Dan. Finally here for your requested review!


 


First of all, let me start by apologizing for how long it took me to get around reviewing this chapter. It wasn't an easy year for me and life got in the way plenty, and until recently I didn't have a lot of free time to come back to the forums.


 


But I'm here now, and I'm really glad I am. I'd like to start by saying that just from the summary of the story, your premise is alluring. I'll admit to never have read a fic focusing on the aftermath of the Second War, so I'm definitely curious to see how you imagine it.


 


Your descriptions throughout the chapter are so immersive, it's easy to relate to the characters' feelings. Yet, there's something to be said about the beginning of the chapter (and the story), when you go to describe all the layers of Harry's pain. It's as though we can connect with Harry through your writing. We share his pain and embrace his thoughts. Even when the survivor's guilt is already so apparent, and I'm afraid will be present still for many chapters to come.


 


Regardless, I really liked the way you decided to go with the immediate hour after everything was over. It's how I can see it going down and them reacting to things - with sensibility, and not overreacting to what's to come. You took into account what had happened, their feelings, emotional states and physical well-being (or lack thereof), and came up with quite the starter. I can only imagine how overwhelming being with everyone else down at the Great Hall could have been for the trio at this time, and I don't imagine the next few days/weeks/months will be any easier on them all. There's a lot that they can't still process because it's too soon, and unfortunately life has a way to remind us of all the things we aren't handling. When the realization comes that "the magical fantasy was over", I felt that, and it marked the real beginning of your story, I think.


 


Needless to say, and even if it's just the first chapter, I found your characterization very on point. I'm in love with your descriptions and your prose is great to read. It's engaging and simple to follow, yet refined and rich. Also, it didn't even feel like a 7k chapter!


 


Last but not least, and just as a side note, I loved the recognition to Regulus and his last effort to help the good cause.


 


Again, I'm really sorry that it took me so long to get back to you on this. I definitely should have done it sooner :/ still I hope you'll come back sometime as I'll definitely want to keep reading and following your story.


 


Great work, keep it up!


 


Thank you for requesting,


Susana



Author's Response:

Hi, Susana! Welcome back!

 

If you're just starting on post-war fic, I feel privileged that mine was the first. It's always been my favorite genre.

 

I'm pleased that you felt connected with the characters and immersed in their world. I tried really hard to come up with realistic physical and mental states for them. You're correct that they didn't really want the cheers and adorations of the crowd in the Great Hall. They just needed to rest and start to process everything that had happened.

 

It seemed like something Harry would do, to make sure that Kreacher understood the role that both he and Regulus played in the Dark Lord's defeat. I feel like Harry took Dumbledore's admonitions to heart where Kreacher was concerned.

 

As I said, it's good to have you back in the community. Thanks for the review!

 

-Dan





beautiful banner by shadowrose @ TDA

 

 

Draco and Astoria fall in love over time and tea

 

 

 

Written for the HPFT House Collaboration 2018-2019 | Topic: New Beginnings | Theme: Slow Build


Characters: Astoria Greengrass, Draco Malfoy

Pairings: Astoria Greengrass/Draco Malfoy (Harry Potter)

Representation: None

Story Type: Challenge Entry, One-Shot

FFT Groups:
Rating and Advisories (required): Teen Audiences (None)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: Fluff, Romance

Tropes: Slow Build/Slow Burn
Completed · Published: 05 Jan 2019 · Updated: 05 Jan 2019 · Words: 2566 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 12 · Likes: 5 · Reads: 88

Series: Pride of Gryffindor Winners, 2019 Collab



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 23 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


Hey Sarah. Here for another of your winning reviews.


Drastoria is one of my OTPs so I just had to read this story!


I've always been fond of the idea of Draco happening to meet Astoria (either for the first time or seeing her again) after the war and find it very appealing, as if they were bound to be connected one way or another. So your take here is right on point for me.


You've shown Draco struggling with his past and trying to distance himself from the old ways he doesn't agree with anymore, and I've always been a sucker for his redemption arc as Draco is one of my favorite characters. I liked that he struck a friendship with Astoria almost instantly, and that he's not shy about admitting he'll miss her once she goes back to Hogwarts.


I rather enjoyed that Draco kept discovering all these little things about Astoria and freaking out a little about finding out that he has more feelings for her than friendship, and I thoroughly loved the lighthearted way you wrote Astoria as well.


The ending was sweet, and overall I liked the premise on which you wrote the story. I'm still going through your AP but in case you haven't written any more Astoria for now and you ever decide to do it again in the future, make sure to let me know :)


Susana





amazing banner by down-in-flames at tda


Five Times James and Lily's Friends Were Sure They Were More than Friends Plus One Time They Actually Were


For the "Take a Back Road" Challenge, based on the song "Friends Don't" by Maddie & Tae


Rating and Advisories (required): Mature Audiences (Substance Abuse)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: AU, Fluff, Humor, Song Fic

Tropes: Friends to Lovers, Friendship, Slow Build/Slow Burn
Incomplete · Published: 15 Jun 2019 · Updated: 19 Nov 2019 · Words: 3131 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 12 · Likes: 6 · Reads: 246

Series: Pride of Gryffindor Winners, the archive needs more 5+1s, five times they were magical plus one time they were magic



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 22 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


Hey Sarah. Here for one of your winning reviews!

I loved the subtelty of James thinking about Lily as he pretended too hard like he wasn't noticing. It was sweet and very relatable. Also, good on Remus to so easily figure out what was going on.

On a side note, as I was reading this story a group of teenagers sat on the table next to mine in the food court of the mall, and I can tell that Remus's struggle is real!

Marlene was really attentive for not bursting Lily's bubble just yet, even if it's quite obvious to anyone and their neighbor that Lily and James have the hots for each other. Still, going from just friends to something more is never easy, and often a gamble, so it was clever of Marlene not to meddle.

And being drunk always brings out some truths in people, and James wouldn't be the exception. I really like that even in his drunken state, James has this need to hear Lily's voice and talk to her, despite not really having anything important to say. If we don't count the L-bomb he almost dropped, of course.

Aaah, the platonic "we're not dating, yet there's no one else for us" trope. I'm such a sucker for it! Neither James nor Lily see it, and still it's so blatantly obvious that even Alice, who appears to have been away for a while, acknowledges it.

And Mary is so dramatic, I love her. I would totally have done the same thing and spied on James and Lily from the car. It's like seeing history happen right before your eyes, you can't not look! Her near-death experience was totally worth though, even if history turned out not to happen that night lol

Last but not least, you had me laughing out loud at the line "Does he need to jump in with a rescue or back track like a bro?" because that's so Sirius, my stomack hurt from laughing.

I absolutely loved this piece, and your writing is fantastic.

Thank you for participating on my Take a Wizard to Work Day Challenge, and congrats again on 1st place.

Susana





Banner by PixelWayve

 

All this nonsense about me being a hero is crap. Just because I’ve been through hell and back doesn’t make me a hero.

I’m not a hero; I’m a survivor.  


Chapter 8 is up as of April 8, 2021!

Note: This story contains scenes of violence and torture, some of which is similar to events in our world. I will put in an Author's Note at the start of each chapter that contains this sensitive material. 


Rating and Advisories (required): Mature Audiences (Sexual Content, Slurs, Substance Abuse, Violence)

Content Warnings (optional): Bullying, Dying/Grieving, War

Genre: Action/Adventure, Crime/Mystery, Romance

Tropes: Fate/Prophecy, Forgiveness, Friends to Lovers, Friendship, Slow Build/Slow Burn
Incomplete · Published: 30 Jul 2018 · Updated: 08 Apr 2021 · Words: 33457 · Chapters: 8 · Reviews: 59 · Likes: 33 · Reads: 1091

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 22 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 3: 3. The Roar of Three Broomsticks Stops for No One


Hey Aubrey. Here for the last of your winning reviews!

The girls' commentary and description of Madam Puddifoot's was so funny. The way they thought that everything was just a little bit too much was amusing, and likely how anyone with eyes would feel about it lol I sure agree with Charlotte when she says she'd rather have a date at the Shrieking Shack, so would I xD

Okay so I'm super intrigued about Jack and his family. It is surprising that two kids who are muggle born and happened to know each other before were both admitted into Hogwarts. I wonder if it's truly just a coincidence or something else. And in that case, as I'm hoping it is, I'm dying to find out more.

Well, never mind. In part, at least lol I kept on reading and I'm definitely more intrigued now about the Morgans. Why did Jack and his mother not know that his father was a wizard?And why did Ulrich not tell his parents about Jack? There's something more there, I'm sure!

I feel so sorry for Charlotte and what happened to her. It always hurts when someone we considered close starts distancing themselves, even if they don't mean to hurt anyone in the process. And it sure can be awkward (at the very least) to have to be together with that person afterwards, no matter how long has passed.

And Jack didn't make matters better, did he? What a git. One thing is to not care for Charlotte anymore, but almost purposefully sabotaging their project and not giving her a shot to participate? When she was the one waiting for him for so long and, in the end, saving the project? I'm hoping the Professor will know exactly who casted those spells and give Charlote the praise she deserves. And I'm a bit intrigued about Jack's remark towards Charlotte too. What's up with that?

I know I've said this before but I'm enchanted with Charlotte and her invention of spells. It's just so cool and totally something i would go for, no matter the dangers involved. If you keep this up and mention her spellworks in every chapter, I'll be here, a happy camper cheering you on.

Last but not least, poor girls. First, Charlotte falling over would already be humiliating enough, but having everyone pratically oggling and mocking her has to have sucked. Then Kitty, all heartbroken about Brian. Hopefully she'll get over him soon.

Thank you for participating on my Take a Wizard to Work Day Challenge, and congrats again on 2nd place!

Susana





Banner by yours truly

 

 

"You're so--"

 

"Loveable? Endearing? Yes, I know."

 

"You're horrible."

 

"I think you mean wonderful."

 

Ever wonder how James and Lily's story would have played out if they were American high schoolers at an end-of-the-year amusement park trip? Note: story contains whizzing peanuts and scary clowns.


Rating and Advisories (required): Teen Audiences (None)

Content Warnings (optional): Bullying, Discrimination

Genre: Action/Adventure, AU, Dark, Drama, Fluff, General, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Romance

Tropes: Feminism, Forgiveness, Friends to Lovers, Friendship, Love/Hate Relationships, School
Completed · Published: 02 Mar 2019 · Updated: 05 Mar 2019 · Words: 9616 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 11 · Likes: 6 · Reads: 718

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 22 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 1: How Can I Note


Hey Aubrey. Here for yet another of your winning reviews!


First of all, I didn't know I needed a muggle high-school Jily fic until just now, much less at an amusement park, so thanks for making my day. What a crazy/great concept. I have so many thoughts on this story!


To start, it was both nostalgic to think about their field trip, and totally true about boys naggind the girls' patience throughout. I really don't blame Marlene for being annoyed with them, especially when it was her the boys were bothering and it was Lily they were trying to get a rise of. In general, i just loved reminiscing about the cool parts of high-school (it wasn't all bad), particularly the adventures that some field trips were.


Then, the second I read that Flitwick was gonna go with them, I kinda thought (in a bit of panic, I'll admit) that he'd get lost amongst the crowd like kids sometimes do lmao. He's just so tiny, it can't be easy to keep up with his students there, for sure.


I'm not sure where you stand about Snape, but I liked the way you portrayed him in this story. I'm not a fan of him as a character (at all. One could say I passionatey dislike him...) and I feel like you translated reall well who he is in canon to what he would be like if he was a muggle highschooler. Same with the Marauders, to be honest.


And on that note, I couldn't stop laughing at their antics, they were hilarious throughout the story. Poor Mrs. McGonagall. And by te way, it's so weird not to call her Professor? :o


I absolutely loved that Lily called both Snape and James out on their wrongdoings. All the more power to her, putting them in their place!


Last but not least, it was sweet (and totally James) to go look for Lily and make sure that she was okay. Plus, your description of James making his way into the House of Horrors was hilarious and reminded me (fond and embarrassingly) of my own solo adventures into haunted houses.


Such a great story and characterization, I loved it!


Once more, thank you for participating on my Take a Wizard to Work Day Challenge, and congrats again on 2nd place!


Susana





“If I win the contest, will you go out with me?”

 

”Potter, I’m not some barbarian that can be wooed by stuffing yourself with pie.”

 

Third Place Winner of the HPFT Prefects’ Fall Challenge 2018


Rating and Advisories (required): All Audiences (None)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: AU, Drama, Fluff, General, Humor, Romance

Tropes: Friendship, Holidays, School, Soulmates
Completed · Published: 08 Nov 2018 · Updated: 18 Mar 2019 · Words: 1036 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 8 · Likes: 4 · Reads: 897

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 1: Pie-Eating Barbarian


Hey Aubrey. Here for another of your winning reviews!

Once more, it's a great short story, and man did it make me miss Fall *sigh*
James would totally try and get Lily to go out with him by entering ntests such as this! I can almost see Lily rolling her eyes at him every time he has tried before, and how endearing (and a bit maddening) she probably thinks his antics are. But at the end of the day she knows that his heart is in the right place, and she probably likes him all the more for it, and all is good in the world *-*
It was hilarious that Lily's first instinct to Marlene's questions were, naturally, denial and telling her to shut up! She's so head over heels with James that proper responses fail her lol the kiss was sweet and just... Overall happy, you know?
Loved it!
Thanks again for participating in my Take a Wizard to Work Day Challenged, and congrats once more on 2nd place!
Susana





 

 

They say eyes are the gateway to a person's soul. 


Characters: Bill Weasley, Fleur Delacour

Pairings: Bill Weasley/Fleur Delacour (Harry Potter)

Representation: None

Story Type: One-Shot

FFT Groups:
Rating and Advisories (required): All Audiences (None)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: Romance

Tropes: Careers, Feminism
Completed · Published: 11 Nov 2018 · Updated: 11 Nov 2018 · Words: 821 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 8 · Likes: 2 · Reads: 883

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


Hey Aubrey. Here for another of your winning reviews!


Okay, so a few things I'm finding out about your writing and that I feel like I should praise: 1) you give me scenarios I'd never really considered before, which I love!, 2) your writing is really vivid and paints a neat picture of what you're trying to convey without big words and senseless prose, which is awesome, and 3) I'll admit, I envy you a bit for managing to write so little in these short one-shots, and yet be able to tell a story so well (I just don't think I'm able to write a short story, i have such troubles with keepng things short -.-)


Anyway, I really liked that you wondered about how Bill and Fleur got together. It had never really crossed my mind before, and I totally agree with you in that Bill would have been different from others. That said, i enjoyed that harmless and playful flirting they had going on for a while there, and I feel like it was in character for Fleur to be the one to take a step forward.


If you ever decide to write about them in that date or afterwards, make sure to let me know ; )


Thank you for participating on my Take a Wizard to Work Day Challenge, and congrats again on 2nd place!


Susana





For dirigibleplums' Musical Muse Challenge


 


The ending to a love story that maybe wasn't love.


 


"the beautiful me of your fantasies doesn't exist"


From "Siren," by Sunmi


 


 


Characters: None

Pairings: Draco Malfoy/Pansy Parkinson (HP)

Representation: PTSD

Story Type: Challenge Entry

FFT Groups:
Rating and Advisories (required): Teen Audiences (None)

Content Warnings (optional): Breakups

Genre: Romance

Tropes: None
Completed · Published: 27 Sep 2018 · Updated: 30 Sep 2018 · Words: 1682 · Chapters: 1 · Reviews: 7 · Likes: 2 · Reads: 879

Series: None



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


Hey Aubrey. Here for one of your winning reviews!


This was my first time reading for Draco and Pansy. I've always been mildly curious about them and their dynamics, but they are not my otp and therefore I never activelly chose a story with them as the main pairing.


But this was a very nice surprise though. I think you wrote both of them very in character, and I really wasn't expecting the plot of this story for some reason lol I liked that you kind of reminded of me of how things would have been if the war hadn't happened (or if Voldemort had won), and how you made me think about them growing up more in depth.


I particularly enjoyed the way you wrote Pansy actually, as if all the little details of her upbringing are so deeply rooted  into who she is at her core, that it's hard for her to be any other way.


It was a sad piece, yet with an inevitability to it that just can't be ignored. It made me want to know more about how Pansy went on from there.


Thank you for participating on my Take a Wizard to Work Day Challenge, and congrats again on 2nd place.


Susana




by
Orphan


Characters: None

Pairings: None

Representation: None

Story Type: None

FFT Groups:
Rating and Advisories (required): (None)

Content Warnings (optional): None

Genre: None

Tropes: None
Incomplete · Published: 01 Jan 1970 · Updated: 01 Jan 1970 · Words: 0 · Chapters: 0 · Reviews: · Likes: · Reads: 0

Series: facingthenorthwind sampler, Slytherin MFWHATA Winners, 2019 Collab, 2019 Collab, sanctum beach series



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 3: morning dew


And back for Chapter 3, and once more doubling this for BvB's Blue Team!


Yes, they're at The Burrow. I've been waiting for this :D I can totally imagine how tiring it must be for boyfriends/girlfriends of anyone in the clan to be introduced to everyone else, plus being grilled for dating one of their own. It must be quite the experience, and I gotta say Teddy took it like a champ.


One thing that confused me though, was their interaction with George. Is George suspicious of Teddy's and Victoire's arrangement? Is that why he asked them if they had already kissed? Because that's not something that someone would ask to a couple who has supposedly been dating for some time and I guess I just found it a bit odd, despite the prank with the mistletoe at the end.


I was not expecting Hope to show up, so that was a nice surprise. While not planned, it was good for Teddy and Hope to discuss a couple of things that had been bothering them, and so now they're better for it. Although it's tragic, of course, that first Teddy and now Hope are being subjected to Bella's abuse and blackmail. I'm hoping they'll find a way to deal with it soon.


I'm rather enjoying the differences between the universe of your story and canon. Your approach is different, and interesting, and ties with things we already knew and took for granted from canon really well, so keep on going.


As for the questions you asked at the end of the chapter, I think they do seem plausible. I think a little more detail about how they were during the year they've known each other and their feelings would benefit the plot as the stor goes, but overall I'm liking what I'm reading :)


Feel free to snag an open slot on my request reviews thread whenever you update.


Susana



Reviewer: you-make-me-wander Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2019 · Title: Chapter 2: how to live life?


Back for Chapter 2, and again doubling it for BvB's Blue Team.


To begin with, I liked how comfortably welcomed Teddy was into their household, so much so that Louis took a like to Teddy instantly. It was sweet that young Louis wanted to spend time with both Victoire and Teddy :)


His struggles with university life are funny to read and all to reminiscing of my own time studying. God knows we totally forego a steady schedule lol


On a more serious note, I can relate all too well with Teddy's struggle about Hope and family loyalty. It's even sadder to think of his meltdown somewhere that is unfamiliar to him, and with the family of his supposed girlfriend bound to notice that something about him is off, when it's something so personal. I'm hoping he will eventually open up with Victoire about everything, and that she can stand by him as he figures out some way to deal with it.


Also, Bill is just such a dad! I haven't read many fics with him, but the ones that I have usually portray him as the male version of his mother. Kind, funny, present and available to help in any way possible... It's sweet, and endearing, and exactly how I picture him! I absolutely loved his conversatin with Teddy, and I'm sure he was a little taken aback by what Teddy said about Victoire, but in no time Bill will see it with his own eyes, no doubt.


I'm glad that Teddy decided to confide in Victoire, and that he can open up with her about all the abuse he's been through. Also, it's good that you shed some light on how Teddy and Hope ended up under the care of Bellatrix and not Harry, since it's so different from canon.


Susana